Building— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Cải thiện: Giữ câu trả lời ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp. Tránh lặp từ (ví dụ “of course” và “tall buildings” nhiều lần) và phát âm một số từ (ví dụ: “toppling” nên là “towering” hoặc “located on the 37th floor”). Thực hiện một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó thêm một chi tiết cụ thể. Ví dụ: "Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home. I live in an apartment on the 37th floor of a high-rise, so I can see several skyscrapers from my balcony."

Ejemplo: Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home. I live on the 37th floor of a high-rise, so I can see several skyscrapers from my balcony.

Sugerencia: Cải thiện: Trả lời trực tiếp, dùng cấu trúc mạch lạc và từ vựng chính xác. Tránh lặp và sửa ngữ pháp (ví dụ: “I take my phone to capture” và “landscapes such as mountains and rivers”). Thêm một lý do ngắn gọn để làm rõ quan điểm. Nên dùng liên từ để nối ý. Ví dụ: "No, I don't usually photograph buildings. Instead, I prefer landscapes because I enjoy nature photography."

Ejemplo: No, I don't usually photograph buildings. Instead, I prefer to use my phone to capture landscapes, such as mountains and rivers, because I enjoy nature photography.

Sugerencia: Cải thiện: Trả lời cần chính xác tên địa điểm và câu văn rõ ràng. Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và phát âm (“Landmark 81” thay vì “Landscape 81”, “I have never had a chance” v.v.). Dùng một câu chủ đề rồi giải thích vì sao bạn muốn đến đó, có thể đề cập hoạt động cụ thể. Ví dụ: "I would like to visit Landmark 81 in Ho Chi Minh City because I want to enjoy the view from the observation deck and try local food nearby."

Ejemplo: I would like to visit Landmark 81 in Ho Chi Minh City because I've never been there. If I have the chance, I want to go to the observation deck to enjoy the city view and try local dishes nearby.

Sugerencia: Cải thiện: Trả lời ngắn gọn, dùng ngữ pháp đúng (ví dụ: “a tall building provides you with breathtaking views”). Tránh lặp từ và thêm một ví dụ cụ thể về lợi ích hoặc nhược điểm. Sử dụng tối đa 2-3 câu hỗ trợ với liên từ để mạch lạc. Ví dụ: "Yes, I do because tall buildings offer great views and a peaceful atmosphere, though they can be noisy sometimes."

Ejemplo: Yes, I do. A tall building provides breathtaking views and a peaceful place to relax. For example, I live on the 11th floor now and I enjoy the view from my balcony.

× Of course, of course speak in my surroundings, there are a lot of buildings, tall buildings, umm, like skyscrapers.

✓ Of course, in my surroundings there are a lot of buildings, tall buildings, like skyscrapers.

The student used 'speak in my surroundings' which is incorrect and unnecessary. Use the preposition 'in' with 'my surroundings' and remove 'speak'. Correct word order is 'in my surroundings there are...'. Suggestion: say 'in my surroundings' or 'around my home' and avoid extraneous words.

× And my, my home is a toppling, uh, is an apartment with umm, 37th floor.

✓ My home is an apartment on the 37th floor.

Errors: unnecessary filler words and wrong article/preposition choice. Use 'an apartment' (article 'an' before vowel sound) and 'on the 37th floor' (preposition 'on' for floors). Remove 'toppling' which is incorrect here. Suggestion: say 'My home is an apartment on the 37th floor.'

× Actually not. I'm not keen on taking photos, but sometimes, sometimes I take my phones to take to Scarborough captures some beautiful landscapes like mountain and rivers, not buildings.

✓ Actually, no. I'm not keen on taking photos, but sometimes I take my phone to Scarborough to capture beautiful landscapes like mountains and rivers, not buildings.

Several issues: 'Actually not' should be 'Actually, no.' 'phones' should be singular 'phone' (pronoun/number). Use infinitive 'to capture' after 'to Scarborough' or better 'and capture'. Also plural nouns 'mountains and rivers'. Suggestion: simplify the sentence: 'I'm not keen on taking photos, but sometimes I take my phone to Scarborough to capture beautiful landscapes such as mountains and rivers.'

× Yeah, is Landscape 81 is located in Saigon. I have never have a chance to visit Saigon.

✓ Yes, Landmark 81 is located in Saigon. I have never had a chance to visit Saigon.

Errors: 'is Landscape 81 is' redundant and 'Landmark' spelling. Present perfect requires 'have never had' (past participle 'had') not 'have never have'. Suggestion: use 'I have never had a chance to visit Saigon.'

× So in the future, if I have an opportunity, uh, I will go to Saigon and uh, eat in see science in Landmark.

✓ So in the future, if I have the opportunity, I will go to Saigon and visit Landmark 81 to see it and try the food there.

Original has wrong phrase 'eat in see science in Landmark' which is ungrammatical. Use 'if I have the opportunity' (article 'the') and parallel verbs 'visit' and 'see'. If the speaker means to eat and see the sights, say 'visit Landmark 81 to see it and try the food there.' Suggestion: plan clear verbs and correct word order.

× Yeah, of course, umm in tall building is provide you a very breathtaking views.

✓ Yes, of course. A tall building provides you with very breathtaking views.

Errors: missing article 'a' before 'tall building'; subject-verb agreement 'is provide' should be 'provides'; extra preposition 'with' required after 'provide'; 'views' plural is fine but remove 'a' before it. Suggestion: 'A tall building provides you with breathtaking views.'

× Umm, you can relax and take photos. Umm, for sure. Now I'm now I'm living in an apartment in uh 11th floor and I very happy with.

✓ You can relax and take photos. For sure. Right now I'm living in an apartment on the 11th floor and I'm very happy with it.

Errors: 'in 11th floor' should be 'on the 11th floor' (preposition and article). Missing verb 'am' before 'very happy' and need object 'with it' to complete 'happy with'. Also duplicate 'now' removed. Suggestion: use 'on the 11th floor' and include the verb and object: 'I'm very happy with it.'