Food— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two brief reasons with clear linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., 'hardly' → 'hard' or 'very hard', 'caring about' → 'care about') and avoid listing too many items. Aim for 2–3 sentences.

Ejemplo: My favourite foods are high-protein items like chicken and salmon. I’ve been working out a lot for the past two to three months, so I choose protein to support my fitness and overall health.

Sugerencia: Clarify facts and avoid irrelevant details. Start with a direct topic sentence (what you liked), use a linking word to add a reason or memory, and finish concisely. Fix grammar and incomplete phrases (e.g., 'I ran in like Sweden' unclear; 'recovered from tiredness of school or having' incomplete).

Ejemplo: When I was young I loved sweets like cookies, cakes and ice cream. They made me happy and cheered me up after a long day at school.

Sugerencia: Be more specific and avoid redundancy (e.g., 'currently' + 'right now'). Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two concrete examples of seasonal foods and a short reason. Remove filler words like 'umm' and reduce repetition.

Ejemplo: Yes. Since I live in Canada, I eat special dishes for holidays such as roast turkey at Thanksgiving and festive desserts at Christmas. I enjoy these seasonal meals because they bring family traditions and different flavours.

Sugerencia: Correct word choice and grammar, and be specific with linking words to show contrast (use 'used to' and 'now'). Remove unclear words ('curves', 'odor noodles', 'protein sauce') and list clear examples. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, it has changed a lot. I used to prefer carb-rich foods like rice, ramen and bread, but now I prefer protein foods such as chicken and salmon because I’m more focused on fitness.

× I would say my favorite foods are protein sources such as chicken, beef, shrimp, salmon and tuna and that kind of thing, 'cause I've been working out really hardly for last 2-3 months right now in Japan and I'm really caring about my health, so I prefer having protein.

✓ I would say my favorite foods are protein sources such as chicken, beef, shrimp, salmon and tuna and that kind of thing, because I've been working out really hard for the last 2-3 months here in Japan and I care a lot about my health, so I prefer eating protein.

Errors: missing definite article 'the' before 'last 2-3 months'; word choice 'hardly' is incorrect (means almost not) and should be 'hard'; 'right now' redundant with present perfect; 'caring about' should be 'care about' and 'prefer having' is unnatural—use 'prefer eating'. Suggestion: use 'the last 2-3 months', replace 'hardly' with 'hard', remove redundant 'right now' or replace with 'here', and use 'care about' and 'prefer eating'.

× I ran in like Sweden when I was a child, not really much right now but I really loved umm cookies, cakes and ice cream.

✓ I lived in Sweden when I was a child; not so much now, but I really loved cookies, cakes and ice cream.

Errors: 'ran in like Sweden' is incorrect verb and filler 'like' is unnecessary. Use past 'lived' for residence in childhood. 'not really much right now' mixes tenses and is awkward; change to 'not so much now'. Suggestion: use clear past tense 'lived', remove 'like' as filler, and use 'not so much now' to contrast past and present.

× They always made me really happy after eating it and also recovered from tiredness of school or having.

✓ They always made me really happy after eating them and also helped me recover from the tiredness of school.

Errors: pronoun/verb and reference issues: 'They' refers to plural treats so 'it' is incorrect; 'recovered' lacks subject and tense—needs 'helped me recover'. 'tiredness of school or having' is incomplete. Suggestion: match plural pronoun 'them' with 'they', and use 'helped me recover from the tiredness of school' to show causation.

× I'm currently living in Canada right now, so we are celebrating with traditional dishes in different umm, traditional days, for example, Thanksgiving, Christmas, Canada Day, that kind of thing throughout the year.

✓ I'm currently living in Canada, so we celebrate with traditional dishes on different traditional days, for example, Thanksgiving, Christmas, Canada Day, and so on throughout the year.

Errors: redundancy 'currently' and 'right now'; incorrect preposition 'in different ... days' should be 'on different ... days'; 'are celebrating' present continuous is okay but habitual 'celebrate' is better. Suggestion: remove redundancy, use 'celebrate' for habitual actions and 'on' for days.

× And I really enjoy like having different kind of dishes.

✓ And I really enjoy having different kinds of dishes.

Errors: filler 'like' is unnecessary; 'different kind of dishes' should be plural 'different kinds of dishes' or 'different kinds of food'. Suggestion: remove 'like' and use plural 'kinds' to match 'different'.

× Yes, I think it changed a lot. When I was a child, I prefer having curves, for example, rice, ramen noodles, odor noodles and bread.

✓ Yes, I think it has changed a lot. When I was a child, I preferred starchy foods, for example, rice, ramen noodles, udon noodles and bread.

Errors: tense mismatch—'I think it changed' should be present perfect 'has changed' to relate past to present. 'I prefer' should be past 'preferred' to match 'when I was a child'. 'curves' is wrong word; likely intended 'carbs' or 'starchy foods'. 'odor noodles' is misspelling of 'udon'. Suggestion: use present perfect for change over time, past tense for past habits, and correct vocabulary to 'starchy foods' and 'udon noodles'.

× But now I love having protein sauce that I mentioned earlier, like especially chicken and salmon.

✓ But now I love eating the protein sources that I mentioned earlier, especially chicken and salmon.

Errors: 'protein sauce' is incorrect word choice; should be 'protein sources' or 'protein-rich foods'. 'having' is less natural than 'eating' here. 'like especially' is redundant; use 'especially'. Suggestion: replace 'protein sauce' with 'protein sources' and use 'especially' without 'like'.