Food— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be clearer and more natural: begin with a direct topic sentence, avoid unclear phrases (“doesn't rely on flowers”), and limit to 3–4 concise sentences. Add one specific detail about why you like cheesecake (texture, flavor, or when you eat it) and use linking words (for example, because/and) to connect ideas.

Ejemplo: I really like cheesecake. I enjoy its creamy texture and balanced sweetness because it is rich but not overly sugary. For example, I often have a small slice after dinner as a special treat.

Sugerencia: Provide a clear, concise account: start with a topic sentence about your childhood preferences, avoid contradictory or exaggerated statements, and keep it within 3–4 sentences. Use linking words (however, then, later) and give a specific example of a favourite snack and when you ate it.

Ejemplo: When I was a child, I loved sweets and chips. I used to eat candy and crisps almost every day after school. However, as I grew older I started choosing healthier snacks like fruit and nuts, so now I rarely eat junk food.

Sugerencia: Organize the answer: begin with a direct statement that you do eat different foods seasonally or on occasions, then give two clear examples with specific dishes and when they are eaten. Avoid unclear words and correct names (e.g., Eid al-Adha). Use linking words like for example and because.

Ejemplo: Yes, I eat different foods for special occasions. For example, during Ramadan and Eid al-Fitr we prepare sweets like baklava to celebrate after fasting, and during Eid al-Adha our family cooks large meat dishes because we share meat with relatives and neighbours.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and succinctly: state clearly whether your favourite food changed, give one or two reasons with brief supporting details (for example, taking nutrition courses and becoming health-conscious), and avoid filler words. Use linking words such as because and so to show cause and effect.

Ejemplo: Yes, my tastes changed. As a child I preferred chips and sweets, but after studying nutrition and learning about health I started choosing healthier options, so now I prefer foods like grilled fish and salads.

× My favorite food is cheesecake. I believe it has the sweet spot between healthy and not healthy, sugary and not sugary because it doesn't rely on flowers or too much sugar.

✓ My favorite food is cheesecake. I believe it strikes the sweet spot between healthy and unhealthy, sugary and not sugary because it doesn't rely on flour or too much sugar.

Used 'has the sweet spot' which is awkward; 'strikes the sweet spot' is idiomatic. 'Not healthy' and 'not sugary' are better expressed as 'unhealthy' and 'not sugary' (keep parallel structure). 'Flowers' is a wrong word; the intended word is 'flour'. Also 'between healthy and unhealthy, sugary and not sugary' needs parallel adjectives for clarity. Suggestion: Use idiomatic verbs and parallel adjective forms; check for wrong homophones like 'flowers' vs 'flour'.

× When I was young, I was in the healthiest person in the planet because I was so much into sweets, chips and all that kind of junk foods.

✓ When I was young, I was the unhealthiest person on the planet because I was so into sweets, chips and all kinds of junk food.

Incorrect comparison and article: 'the healthiest person' contradicts context; intended meaning is 'unhealthiest'. Use 'on the planet' rather than 'in the planet'. 'So much into' is nonstandard; 'so into' is natural. 'All that kind of' should be 'all kinds of' and 'junk foods' is better as uncountable 'junk food'. Suggestion: Choose correct comparative adjective (unhealthy vs healthy), use 'on the planet', and use 'all kinds of junk food'.

× But when I grow up, I changed my habit a lot and I started to incorporate more healthy food and I started to crave less these kind of foods.

✓ But when I grew up, I changed my habits a lot and I started to incorporate healthier foods and I began to crave these kinds of foods less.

Tense inconsistency: 'when I grow up' should be past 'when I grew up' to match 'changed'. 'Habit' should be plural 'habits'. 'More healthy' should be comparative 'healthier'. Word order for 'crave ... less' should place 'less' after the object: 'crave these kinds of foods less'. Use 'kinds of' not 'kind of' for plural. Suggestion: Keep past tense consistent, use comparative adjective form, correct plural forms, and place adverb 'less' after the verb phrase.

× But when I was younger, I was a huge freak about these type of foods and.

✓ But when I was younger, I was crazy about these types of foods.

Awkward phrase 'a huge freak about' is informal and ungrammatical here; 'crazy about' or 'a huge fan of' is better. 'These type of' should be plural 'these types of' or 'this type of' for singular. Sentence also ended abruptly with 'and.' Suggestion: Use appropriate idiomatic expressions and correct plural/singular agreement; complete the sentence.

× Of course depends on the occasion.

✓ Of course, it depends on the occasion.

Missing subject 'it' makes the sentence incomplete. Adding a comma improves flow: 'Of course, it depends on the occasion.' Suggestion: Ensure each sentence has a subject and verb.

× We are Muslims so in Islam we have Ramadan, Eid al Fitr and Eid al Atha.

✓ We are Muslims, so in Islam we have Ramadan, Eid al-Fitr and Eid al-Adha.

Spelling errors: 'Eid al Fitr' and 'Eid al Atha' should be 'Eid al-Fitr' and 'Eid al-Adha'. Also add comma after 'We are Muslims' for clarity. Suggestion: Check spelling of proper nouns and use commas to separate clauses.

× So an ideal fit. We have gak and it's kind of a sweets to celebrate the the in the fasting and then idle at how we have meat.

✓ For example, during Ramadan we have special sweets to celebrate the end of the fast, and during Eid al-Adha we have meat dishes.

Sentence fragments and many errors: 'an ideal fit' is unclear; likely 'for example' or 'ideally' fits. 'gak' is unclear and likely incorrect. 'the the in the fasting' is garbled; intended meaning is 'to celebrate the end of the fast'. 'idle at how' is wrong; should be 'Eid al-Adha'. Suggestion: Use clear phrases like 'for example' and ensure proper nouns and events are named correctly; avoid fragments.

× So it depends on the occasion and we have different type of food in each one.

✓ So it depends on the occasion, and we have different types of food for each celebration.

'Different type of' should be 'different types of' to match plural 'food types' and 'in each one' is better as 'for each celebration'. Suggestion: Match quantifier and noun number, and use clearer prepositional phrases.

× Yes, of course, I when I was a child, I was a freak about chips and sweets.

✓ Yes, of course. When I was a child, I was crazy about chips and sweets.

Extra 'I' causes sentence error. 'Was a freak about' is awkward; 'was crazy about' is natural. Sentence punctuation improved by splitting into two. Suggestion: Remove redundant pronouns and use natural collocations.

× Uh, also people around me encouraged me to do it. So no one stopped me. And, but when I grow up, I started to be more aware, I started to take a nutrition courses and I become more mindful of my eating habits and I'm glad I've changed.

✓ Also, people around me encouraged me, so no one stopped me. But when I grew up, I became more aware; I started to take nutrition courses and I became more mindful of my eating habits, and I'm glad I changed.

Tense problems: 'when I grow up' should be 'when I grew up' to match past events. 'I started to take a nutrition courses' has article and number errors: remove 'a' or pluralize properly: 'nutrition courses' or 'a nutrition course'. 'I become' should be past 'I became'. Use consistent past tense. Minor punctuation fixes improve clarity. Suggestion: Maintain past tense when describing past life events, ensure noun phrases and articles agree in number, and use consistent verb forms.