Walking— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Improve clarity and grammar, give a direct topic sentence, reduce repetition, and add one or two specific reasons with linking words. Use correct tense and pronouns. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: Not really. Since I moved to China I walk less because the weather is often very hot and my family bought a motorbike, so we usually drive instead. Because of that convenience and the heat, I rarely go for long walks unless I have to.

Sugerencia: Start with a clear topic sentence in first person, correct pronouns and tense, and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to organize details (e.g., 'especially', 'because'), be specific about activities and frequency, and limit to 3–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often walked to the park near my home when I was a child. On weekends my father and brothers would join me, and we would play football or watch other children playing. The park was a community hub, so it felt lively and exciting.

Sugerencia: Give a clear topic sentence and organize supporting points with linking words. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., 'atmosphere', 'amenities', 'lakes') and correct grammar. Offer two or three specific reasons with examples and keep it concise.

Ejemplo: People enjoy walking in parks because the atmosphere is peaceful and there are many activities to join. For example, on weekends you can find exercise classes, playgrounds, and lakes that make the place feel refreshing. This combination helps people relax or meditate.

Sugerencia: Answer directly with a clear location, then give two specific reasons using linking words (e.g., 'because', 'for example'). Correct phrasing and avoid repetition. Limit to 2–3 sentences and include vivid details about activities or scenery.

Ejemplo: I would choose the park by the Yellow River because it has many facilities and nice riverside views. For example, you can play basketball or football there, and the friendly people make walks more enjoyable.

Sugerencia: Provide a clear, coherent account in first person and avoid inappropriate words. Use simple, correct past tense and link actions (e.g., 'I walked past the river and park on my way'). Offer one specific detail (why you walked, how long) and keep it polite and concise.

Ejemplo: Last night I walked to a restaurant near my home. On the way I passed the river and the park, which were lively with people exercising and talking, so the walk felt pleasant even though the restaurant was a bit far.

× I would say I'm not as good as I would like it to be with walking.

✓ I would say I'm not as good at walking as I would like to be.

Incorrect preposition and word order for describing ability. Use 'good at' + gerund and place comparison 'as...as' correctly. Suggestion: say 'good at walking' and 'as I would like to be'.

× Since I moved to China I've been really, really lazy to walk because the weather it's quite hot sometimes and they have already bought a motorbike so I found it remarkably hard for me to spend a lot of time off walking.

✓ Since I moved to China I've been really lazy about walking because the weather is quite hot sometimes and I already bought a motorbike, so I find it remarkably hard to spend much time walking.

Multiple issues: 'lazy to walk' is incorrect—use 'lazy about walking'; 'the weather it's' is incorrect contraction—use 'the weather is'; 'they have already bought' likely wrong subject—use 'I already bought' to match context; tense consistency: use present perfect and simple present ('I've been...'; 'I find...'); 'spend a lot of time off walking' incorrect phrase—use 'spend much time walking'.

× When he used to be a child, I used to walk nearby the park, nearby my home, especially on the weekend, me and my father sometimes with my brothers and they found it incredibly fascinating because most of the community, most of the neighbors, they will find them over there and they can play different kind of sports.

✓ When I was a child, I used to walk to the park near my home, especially on weekends. My father, my brothers and I sometimes went together. We found it incredibly enjoyable because many neighbors were there and people could play different kinds of sports.

Pronoun and tense errors: 'When he used to be a child' should be 'When I was a child'; 'used to walk nearby the park' better as 'used to walk to the park near my home'; 'on the weekend' -> 'on weekends'; subject order 'me and my father' -> 'my father, my brothers and I'; 'they found it' wrong subject, change to 'We found it'; 'most of the community... they will find them over there' incorrect tense and phrasing—use 'many neighbors were there' and 'people could play'.

× It's really.

✓ It was really enjoyable.

Fragment: 'It's really.' is incomplete and unclear. Provide an adjective and proper tense to match previous past context: 'It was really enjoyable.'

× Because the vibe over there, it's quite lovable, it's quite acceptable for a lot of people.

✓ Because the atmosphere there is pleasant and appealing to many people.

Awkward phrasing and incorrect preposition 'over there' is acceptable but word choice 'vibe' and 'lovable' are informal/misused. Use 'atmosphere there' and 'appealing to many people'. Remove unnecessary comma and fix clause structure.

× Specific on the weekend, you will find a lot of activities over there.

✓ Especially on weekends, you will find many activities there.

'Specific on the weekend' incorrect; use 'Especially on weekends'. 'A lot of' is acceptable but 'many' is more natural with countable 'activities'.

× You will feel the nature more and some box has some lakes and make us feel like refreshing and relaxing at the same time.

✓ You can feel closer to nature, and there are some parks with lakes that make us feel refreshed and relaxed at the same time.

Article and noun errors: 'the nature' should be 'nature' or 'closer to nature'; 'some box has some lakes' is nonsensical—likely 'some parks have lakes'; verb forms: 'make us feel like refreshing' incorrect—use 'make us feel refreshed and relaxed'.

× And you can meditate over there.

✓ And you can meditate there.

'Over there' is acceptable but wordy; sentence is otherwise grammatically correct. Suggest shorter 'there'.

× I would say nearby that park, we're located to the Yellow River 'cause there is a lot of activities you are capable to do over there.

✓ I would say near that park, we are located by the Yellow River because there are a lot of activities you can do there.

Preposition errors: 'nearby that park' -> 'near that park'; 'we're located to the Yellow River' -> 'we are located by the Yellow River'; 'you are capable to do' -> 'you can do'. Ensure 'there are' for plural 'activities'.

× You might play basketball, you you might play football and the people over there, they are quite kind and respectful and everywhere.

✓ You might play basketball or football, and the people there are quite kind and respectful.

Repeated 'you' typographical error; use 'or' not comma to list alternatives; 'the people over there, they are' redundant—use 'the people there are'. Remove 'and everywhere' which is vague.

× The last time it was last night, I walked to the restaurant, but unfortunately the restaurant wasn't close.

✓ The last time was last night; I walked to the restaurant, but unfortunately the restaurant was closed.

'wasn't close' incorrect adjective—use past participle adjective 'closed' to describe the restaurant. Also simplify wording: 'The last time was last night.'

× I passed the river, I passed the park.

✓ I passed the river and the park.

Combine clauses for natural speech: use conjunction 'and' instead of repeating 'I passed'.

× I would say that idiots are quite, uh, lively and remarkable.

✓ I would say that people there were quite lively and remarkable.

Using 'idiots' is inappropriate and likely wrong word choice; use 'people' or 'locals'. Also match past tense 'were' with 'last night'. 'Remarkable' is uncommon for people—consider 'friendly' or 'interesting'.