Walking— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Сократите повторения и упростите структуру. Начните с чёткой тематической фразы, избегайте тавтологии (например, дважды объяснять преимущества здоровья) и лишних вводных слов. Используйте связки (for example, because, so) чтобы сделать ответ более связным и естественным. Постарайтесь уложиться в 2–4 предложения.

Ejemplo: I walk regularly because it helps me stay fit and feel refreshed. For example, walking outdoors lets me breathe fresh air and clear my mind, so I rarely miss an opportunity to go for a short walk.

Sugerencia: Уберите частые заполнители (uh) и избыточные фразы. Начните с прямого ответа, затем приведите 1–2 конкретных примера (с кем, где, зачем). Следите за правильным словосочетанием: «walk every day», «spend time in the fresh air».

Ejemplo: Yes, I walked outside almost every day as a child with my parents and friends. We would often stroll in the nearby park to relax, play games and enjoy the fresh air.

Sugerencia: Ответ неясен и содержит повторения («find it find it»). Лучше выбрать одну четкую идея и подкрепить её конкретным примером — например, компания, природа или спокойствие для ума. Используйте связки (however, because, for example) и избегайте двойных оборотов.

Ejemplo: Many people enjoy walking in parks because of the peaceful atmosphere and natural scenery. For example, some go with friends to socialise, while others walk alone to reduce stress and clear their mind.

Sugerencia: Сделайте ответ короче и точнее: начните с места, затем объясните причину (описание, сезон, особенности). Избегайте грубых ошибок в словах (suburb → suburbs, a big amount → many) и странных названий — уточняйте названия и используйте прилагательные умеренно.

Ejemplo: I would love to take a long walk in the nearby town of Bitter Gulf, which has many parks. I especially enjoy visiting there in summer because the gardens are beautiful and the weather is pleasant.

Sugerencia: Упростите фразы и сделайте последовательность событий логичной. Начните с точного времени и с кем вы были, затем опишите место и причину, почему вам там нравится. Избегайте слова «various sites» без примеров — назовите 1–2 конкретных достопримечательностей.

Ejemplo: Recently I went for a walk with my school friends along Nevsky Prospect in central Saint Petersburg. We enjoyed the historic buildings and street performers, and even though I know the area well, I still appreciate its lively atmosphere.

× Absolutely only adore walking because I think it has a lot of advantages.

✓ I absolutely adore walking because I think it has a lot of advantages.

'Absolutely' is an adverb modifying the verb 'adore'. The adverb should precede the verb phrase 'adore walking'. Placing 'only' before 'adore' is incorrect here; 'only' would narrow the meaning. Move 'absolutely' before the verb to form a natural adverb placement: 'I absolutely adore walking.'

× Because of walking, people can keep fit and stay healthy because they tend to breathe fresh and clean air while doing that.

✓ Because of walking, people can keep fit and stay healthy since they breathe fresh, clean air while doing it.

Repetition of 'because' is redundant; use 'since' or reword. 'Tend to breathe' is unnecessary—use simple present for general truth: 'they breathe'. 'Doing that' is awkward; replace with 'doing it'. Also use a comma between 'fresh' and 'clean' as coordinate adjectives.

× That's why I don't skip walking when I have a chance.

✓ That's why I don't skip a chance to walk when I have one.

'Skip walking' is awkward; native phrasing is 'skip a chance to walk' or 'skip the chance to walk'. Also 'when I have a chance' is better as 'when I have one' for concision. Rearranged for natural sentence structure.

× Yes, I used to walk in every day, uh, with my friends and my parents and, uh, I didn't skip any single chance of leaving the house and, uh, spending time on fresh air to relax, have fun and uh, just for, do that for pleasure.

✓ Yes, I used to walk every day with my friends and my parents, and I didn't miss any chance to leave the house and spend time in the fresh air to relax and have fun; I did it simply for pleasure.

Use 'used to' for habitual past actions is correct, but 'walk in every day' is incorrect order—should be 'walk every day'. 'Didn't skip any single chance of leaving the house' is ungrammatical; use 'didn't miss any chance to leave the house'. 'Spending time on fresh air' should be 'spend time in the fresh air'. Simplify repetitive fillers and correct verb forms for parallel structure.

× I believe not a lot of people like walking in parks because some think that it is pretty boring, but people who actually love that, maybe they find it find it exciting because of the company they are surrounded with and the atmosphere or if they go alone just for mental health.

✓ I believe not many people like walking in parks because some think it is boring, but those who do may find it exciting because of the company they keep and the atmosphere, or they may go alone for their mental health.

Use 'not many' instead of 'not a lot of' for better register. Remove redundant 'pretty' and duplicated 'find it'. 'Company they are surrounded with' is awkward; use 'company they keep'. 'If they go alone just for mental health' should be 'they may go alone for their mental health' for clarity and correct pronoun usage.

× I live in Saint Petersburg and there are plenty of suburb near the city and there is a town named Bitter Gulf which has a big amount of different parks which I like visiting especially during the summer season because it is incredibly beautiful there.

✓ I live in Saint Petersburg, and there are plenty of suburbs near the city. There is a town called Bitter Gulf which has many different parks that I like to visit, especially during the summer, because it is incredibly beautiful there.

Use plural 'suburbs' not 'suburb'. 'A town named' is acceptable but 'a town called' is more natural. 'A big amount of different parks' is incorrect—use 'many different parks' or 'a large number of parks'. 'Which I like visiting' changed to 'that I like to visit' for correct relative clause and infinitive use.

× The last time when I went for a walk, it was the time with my friends from school.

✓ The last time I went for a walk was when I was with my friends from school.

'The last time when I went' is redundant—use 'The last time I went'. 'It was the time with my friends' is awkward; use 'was when I was with my friends'. Ensure past tense consistency.

× We went for a walk in the center of Saint Petersburg, the Main Street called Niosky Prospect.

✓ We went for a walk in the center of Saint Petersburg on the main street called Niosky Prospect.

Preposition 'in' should be 'on' for a street: 'on the main street'. Capitalization: 'Main Street' should be lowercase 'main street' unless it's the official name. Include 'called' for the street name; ensure natural word order.

× It has various sites in it which you can visit while walking, and even though I have seen them plenty of times, I still love them.

✓ It has various sights that you can visit while walking, and even though I have seen them many times, I still love them.

Use 'sights' not 'sites' when referring to tourist attractions. 'In it' is unnecessary; use 'that you can visit while walking'. 'Plenty of times' is colloquial; 'many times' is more standard here. Maintain present perfect 'I have seen' for experiences up to now.