Walking— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (umm) and unclear phrases (“I just do myself”), and combine ideas into one or two sentences. Mention a habit and a reason or frequency with linking words.

Ejemplo: Yes, I walk a lot. I try to walk every day and set a goal of 10,000 steps because it helps me stay healthy and clears my mind.

Sugerencia: Good content and structure but remove tentative phrases (“were trying to”) and minor redundancy. Use a clear past habit statement and one or two specific details with linking words.

Ejemplo: Yes, we often walked outside when I was a child. My parents took us to parks or the lake almost every day so we could run, play, and enjoy the fresh air.

Sugerencia: Organize the answer with a clear main idea and two specific reasons connected by linking words. Avoid fillers and awkward phrasing (“preferable”, “can't practice hard”); choose natural vocabulary like “cleaner air” and “low-impact exercise.”

Ejemplo: People like walking in parks because the trees make the air cleaner, so it is relaxing. Also, walking is a low-impact form of exercise, which makes it suitable for many people who prefer gentler activity.

Sugerencia: Give a concise topic sentence then two specific image-rich details. Remove fillers and repetitive phrases. Use linking words for coherence (for example, “because” or “and”).

Ejemplo: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in Central Park in New York City in autumn because the trees would be colorful. I would enjoy a coffee, explore the trails, and relax for most of the day.

Sugerencia: Start with a clear past-time sentence and remove repetition. Use one or two specific details (who, where, purpose) and a linking word to explain reason.

Ejemplo: Yesterday I walked in our neighborhood with my sister because we were trying to reach our 10,000-step goal.

× I just do myself.

✓ I just do it myself.

The original sentence misuses the reflexive structure. 'Do myself' is incorrect because 'do' needs an object; the speaker likely means 'do it myself' to indicate performing the action personally. Use 'it' as the object or rephrase to 'I just walk by myself.'

× I try to walk every day. 10K steps, umm, that's a little challenge for me.

✓ I try to walk every day. Ten thousand steps is a little challenge for me.

This issues involves subject-verb agreement and number expression. '10K steps' (ten thousand steps) is a singular quantity as a measurement and should take the singular verb 'is' when described as 'a little challenge'. Also spell out or properly format the number in formal speech: 'ten thousand steps.'

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside for a walk when you were a child?

Use of preposition is incorrect for this context. 'Have a walk' is less natural than 'go for a walk'. Change 'to have a walk' to 'for a walk' to match common English collocation in past questions.

× my parents were trying to take us out for a walk every day in the parks or just near the lake so we can walk, run, jump and breathe some fresh air.

✓ My parents tried to take us out for a walk every day in the parks or near the lake so we could walk, run, jump and breathe some fresh air.

Tense and modality: 'were trying to take' is continuous and suggests an ongoing attempt; simple past 'tried' fits better for habitual past action. Also sequence of tenses requires 'could' instead of 'can' when describing past ability. Capitalize start of sentence. Remove redundant 'just' and awkward phrasing.

× I think, uh, there are a lot of trees in the parks, so the air is more fresh and preferable so people can walk and relax.

✓ I think there are a lot of trees in the parks, so the air is fresher and more pleasant, allowing people to walk and relax.

'More fresh' is nonnative; use comparative 'fresher.' 'Preferable' is inappropriate; use 'more pleasant' or 'nicer.' Also improve sentence flow: replace 'so people can' with 'allowing people to' for natural connection.

× walking is also a sort of sport for people who can't practice, uh, hard.

✓ Walking is also a kind of sport for people who can't do hard exercise.

Awkward phrase 'a sort of sport' is better as 'a kind of sport.' 'Can't practice hard' is unclear; 'can't do hard exercise' or 'can't engage in strenuous exercise' conveys the intended meaning. Use 'exercise' rather than 'practice' in this context.

× I would like to go to the Central Park located in New York City, uh, during an autumn and walk there, take a coffee and walk there for like the whole day, uh, watch.

✓ I would like to go to Central Park in New York City during autumn, have a coffee and walk there for the whole day and watch.

Do not use the definite article 'the' before 'Central Park' when naming the park; say 'Central Park.' 'During an autumn' is incorrect—use 'during autumn' or 'in autumn.' 'Take a coffee' is nonnative; use 'have a coffee.' Remove redundant 'walk there' repetition. End phrase 'watch' is vague; kept as 'and watch' but consider specifying what to watch.

× Yesterday in our neighborhood I was walking with my sister and and we were walking because we have we had to accomplish the 10K steps.

✓ Yesterday in our neighborhood I was walking with my sister because we had to reach ten thousand steps.

Remove duplicate 'and' and redundant repetition of 'we were walking.' Use past perfect/plausible simple past 'we had to' rather than mixing 'have' and 'had.' Express number as 'ten thousand steps' and use 'reach' or 'complete' instead of 'accomplish' for natural collocation with step counts.