Walking— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Give a slightly longer but still concise answer: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific reason and a brief example. Use one linking word to connect ideas.

Ejemplo: Yes, I walk a lot. I find it very relaxing and it helps me clear my mind, especially after work. For example, I usually walk for 30 minutes around my neighborhood park most evenings.

Sugerencia: Make the sentence structure clearer and reduce repetition. Start with a topic sentence, then give a specific detail about who encouraged you and one reason, using a linking word like 'because' or 'so'.

Ejemplo: Yes, I did. My parents often encouraged me to go outside and walk because they believed it would keep me healthy and calm as I grew up.

Sugerencia: Organize the answer: give a clear topic sentence, then two specific reasons linked with 'because' and 'also'. Avoid unclear phrases like 'encourage people to work'.

Ejemplo: People like walking in parks because the green space helps them relax and reduce stress. Also, walking in parks is good exercise and improves health, so many people choose parks for both fresh air and fitness.

Sugerencia: Use a concise topic sentence and provide two clear reasons linked with 'because' and 'so'. Correct small grammatical errors (e.g. 'nearby', 'the weather').

Ejemplo: I would take a long walk in the large park near my house because it has wide paths and pleasant weather. Since it's close by, I can go often and enjoy the fresh air and scenery.

Sugerencia: Clarify tense and structure: answer directly in past tense, state where you walked and why, with one contrasting reason. Avoid filler words and repetition.

Ejemplo: Lately I walked along the road near my house because the pavement is easy to walk on. I avoid walking in the desert nearby because it's too difficult and uncomfortable for long walks.

× Yes, because our family member, they advocate us or encourage us to walk because that feel that will help us in the future to be more healthy and a relaxing person.

✓ Yes, because our family members encouraged us to walk, as they felt it would help us become healthier and more relaxed in the future.

Pronoun and noun number agreement: 'family member' should be plural 'family members' when referring to more than one person. 'They' cannot refer properly after singular phrase. Verb tense and form: use past 'encouraged' to match 'when you were a child'. Use 'encouraged us to walk' rather than 'advocate us'. 'That feel that will help' is ungrammatical — change to 'as they felt it would help'. Use 'healthier and more relaxed' to use correct comparative adjective forms and parallel structure.

× Because nowadays the person is under the pressure so they going to the park to to walk and refresh their mind and feel relaxed that will help them more. So all of them encourage people to work for example. Also it is for to be more healthy.

✓ Because nowadays people are under pressure, they go to the park to walk, refresh their minds, and feel relaxed, which helps them. Parks also encourage people to exercise, and they help people become healthier.

Pronoun and noun issues: 'the person' should be plural 'people' to speak generally. Subject-verb agreement and verb form: 'they going' should be 'they go'. Remove extra 'to'. Use plural 'minds'. Use a relative pronoun 'which' to link the clause. 'Encourage people to work' is unclear; 'exercise' fits the context. 'For to be more healthy' is incorrect; use 'become healthier'.

× In the park that nearby our house, because it's a large park and their weather is very good there and also it is not far away from us. So I can go and walk there because to take a fresh air.

✓ In the park near our house, because it's a large park and the weather there is very good, and it is not far from us. So I can go and walk there to get some fresh air.

Article and preposition errors: 'that nearby our house' should be 'near our house'. 'Their weather' is incorrect pronoun use; use 'the weather there'. 'Not far away from us' is wordy; 'not far from us' is correct. 'To take a fresh air' is incorrect collocation; use 'to get some fresh air'.

× I work lately in the in the road that near our house because it's a good and I can't, uh, walk in the in the desert because I feel very difficult while I while I walking instead when I walk in the road.

✓ I walked recently on the road near our house because it's convenient, and I can't walk in the desert because I find it very difficult to walk there compared with walking on the road.

Tense and verb form: 'I work lately' should be past 'I walked recently' to answer 'Where did you go for a walk lately?'. 'In the in the road that near our house' corrected to 'on the road near our house'. 'It's a good' is incomplete; use 'it's convenient'. Avoid repeating fragments. Use 'I find it very difficult to walk in the desert' for correct verb pattern and clarity; compare with 'walking on the road' for contrast.