Walking— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more natural and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid contradictions (saying you’re distracted by video and music implies you do walk while watching them).

Ejemplo: Not really. I rarely go for walks because I dislike exercise and I find walking alone boring. Besides, when I have free time I usually prefer watching videos or listening to music at home rather than going outside.

Sugerencia: Use past tense consistently and make the answer more specific. Begin with a clear past-tense topic sentence, then give one specific reason and an example. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas.

Ejemplo: Not really. When I was a child I rarely went for walks because my parents were busy and I stayed at home doing homework, watching TV or playing computer games after school.

Sugerencia: Good content and relevant vocabulary. Make it more concise and use linking words to improve coherence. Give one or two specific effects of walking in parks rather than repeating 'beautiful view'.

Ejemplo: People like walking in parks because of the fresh air and attractive greenery. For example, walking among trees and flowers helps reduce stress and gives an enjoyable place to chat with friends or family.

Sugerencia: Answer is clear and personal. Make sentences smoother and avoid repetition of 'pressure'. Use one linking phrase to add a reason or result.

Ejemplo: I would take a long walk along the beach because I love the sea view and the fresh breeze. Walking by the water helps me relax and forget about the stress of work or study.

Sugerencia: Correct grammar and be concise. Use past tense and a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific details (what you saw or did). Remove hesitations like 'Lady' and fix tense errors.

Ejemplo: Recently I went for a short walk to Star Avenue, which is near my workplace at Harbour City. After work I had some free time, so I strolled around and watched people and the shops.

× I don't walk a lot because I hate exercising and it's tedious to walk alone.

✓ I don't walk much because I hate exercising and it's tedious to walk alone.

'A lot' is acceptable but 'walk much' is more natural with negative. Replace 'a lot' with 'much' for negation. No tense change needed.

× I am distracted from the video and music.

✓ I get distracted by videos and music.

Use 'get distracted' to describe a general reaction and 'by' is the correct preposition for the cause. Use plural 'videos' and 'music' without article for general reference.

× When I was a child, I don't go for go outside for a walk frequently because my parents are very busy and usually I just spend my time on television or computer games or my assignment after school.

✓ When I was a child, I didn't go outside for a walk frequently because my parents were very busy and usually I just spent my time watching television, playing computer games, or doing my assignments after school.

Use past tense to match 'When I was a child' so 'don't' -> 'didn't', 'are' -> 'were', 'spend' -> 'spent'. Also correct verb forms: 'watch television', 'play computer games', 'do assignments'. Use plural 'assignments' for typical homework.

× Because there are many beautiful plants and also beautiful view in the parks, so when people walking in the park, they can relieve their stress and tension and also enjoy the beautiful view with their friends and family members.

✓ Because there are many beautiful plants and beautiful views in parks, when people walk in the park they can relieve their stress and tension and enjoy the scenery with friends and family.

Remove redundant 'so' after 'because'. Use 'views' plural and 'in parks' (general). Use base verb 'walk' after 'when people'. Replace 'enjoy the beautiful view with their friends and family members' with 'enjoy the scenery with friends and family' for natural phrasing and remove redundant words.

× If I had the chance to take a long walk, I would probably go to the beach because I love the sea view and when the breeze around me it feels like there is no pressure.

✓ If I had the chance to take a long walk, I would probably go to the beach because I love the sea view and when the breeze is around me it feels like there is no pressure.

This conditional sentence is fine, but the clause 'when the breeze around me' misses the verb 'is'. Insert 'is' to form 'when the breeze is around me'.

× I can put away all my tension and pressure of work and study at that time.

✓ I can put away all the tension and pressure from work and study at that time.

Use article 'the' for specific feelings 'the tension', and 'from' is the correct preposition to indicate source: 'pressure from work and study'.

× Lady I had go to the Star Ave. because it is near my workplace which is harbour city and after work I had some times and I don't want to go to go back to home as soon as possible so I just spend some time to observe.

✓ Lately I went to Star Avenue because it is near my workplace, Harbour City. After work I had some time and I didn't want to go back home right away, so I just spent some time watching the area.

Correct 'Lady' to 'Lately' (adverb). Use past tense 'went' to match 'lately', and 'had some time' -> 'had some time' but then past 'didn't want' and 'spent' for consistency. Use 'go back home' -> 'go back home' without extra 'to'. Capitalize proper noun 'Harbour City' and use 'Star Avenue' spelled out. Replace 'observe' with 'watching the area' for natural phrasing.