Hobby— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 回答の基本構成はできていますが、映画のタイトルや単語の発音・語彙を明確にしましょう。例えば、“Mabel's Brock Widow” は “Marvel's Black Widow”、“prot” はおそらく “plot”、“Benders film” は “Avengers films” です。また、“the characters” のように冠詞を使い、映画を好きな理由を一つか二つに絞ると、より自然で効果的です。“because” や “In addition” などの linking words を使うと、説明の流れも明確になります。

Ejemplo: Yes, I do. I enjoy watching movies, especially superhero films. My favourite film is Marvel’s Black Widow because the plot is exciting and the characters are well developed. I also like the Avengers films because they have great action scenes and plenty of humour.

Sugerencia: “I loved” の繰り返しや文の途中で終わる “So” を避け、過去形の文を最後まで完成させましょう。“praised me” と “listened to my songs” が正しい表現です。また、“It was very proud of me” ではなく、“I felt very proud” または “My parents were very proud of me” と言います。子どもの頃の趣味と、それに関する具体的な経験を一つ述べると、内容がより充実します。

Ejemplo: Yes, I did. When I was a child, I loved singing, and I often performed songs for my family. My parents always praised me when they listened to me, so I felt very proud and motivated to keep singing.

Sugerencia: 最初に “No, I don’t” と直接答えた後、現在と過去の趣味を対比するとよいでしょう。“as I said” は不要で、“when I was a junior high school student” より “when I was in junior high school” が自然です。最後の “I was a member” は不完全なので、何のメンバーだったのかを明確にしてください。また、趣味を列挙するだけでなく、現在の趣味が変わった理由や、参加していた活動の具体例を加えると効果的です。

Ejemplo: No, I don’t. I enjoyed singing when I was very young, but my interests changed as I grew older. When I was in junior high school, I took up dancing and running, and I joined the school’s dance club. Nowadays, I mainly enjoy watching movies.

Sugerencia: 姉と共通の趣味があることは明確ですが、“literally rough singing” や “the Tell us with song” は意味が伝わりにくいため、正確な語彙を使いましょう。おそらく “love singing” や “songs from musicals” などを表したかったと考えられます。“when I were” と “when I’m” の混在を避け、習慣については現在形で “When I’m in the bathroom, my sister and I sing together” と言います。姉とどこで、どのような歌を歌うのかを一文で具体的に説明すると、自然でまとまりのある回答になります。

Ejemplo: Yes, we do. My sister and I both enjoy singing. For example, when I’m in the bathroom and she’s nearby, we often sing songs from musicals together. It’s a fun way for us to relax and spend time together.

× because the prot is so exciting and characters are very well developed.

✓ because the plot is so exciting and the characters are very well developed.

A specific group of characters in a particular film requires the definite article the. The word plot is also the correct spelling for the story of a film.

× My parents always praison me when they listened my songs.

✓ My parents always praised me when they listened to my songs.

The answer is describing childhood in the past, so praise must be changed to the past-tense form praised. The expression listened to requires the preposition to.

× My parents always praison me when they listened my songs.

✓ My parents always praised me when they listened to my songs.

The verb listen is followed by the preposition to when it means paying attention to sounds or music: listen to my songs.

× It's very proud it was very proud of me.

✓ They were very proud of me.

Proud describes a person, not an event or situation, so it cannot be used with the subject it here. The natural expression is they were very proud of me.

× It's very proud it was very proud of me.

✓ They were very proud of me.

The student is talking about a childhood experience, so the past-tense form were is appropriate. The subject they refers to the parents.

× No, I don't as I said now I like watching movies but when I was three or four years old I loved singing.

✓ No, I don't. As I said, I like watching movies now, but when I was three or four years old, I loved singing.

The original contains several independent clauses joined without appropriate punctuation. Separate the ideas into sentences and use commas after introductory phrases and dependent clauses.

× So dancing and running and I was a member

✓ I also enjoyed dancing and running, and I was a member of a club.

The original is an incomplete and disorganized sentence. Use a clear subject and verb for each idea. The phrase be a member also normally requires of followed by the organization or group.

× when I were when I'm in the bathroom and she's in the washroom with We sing together

✓ When I'm in the bathroom and she's in the washroom, we sing together.

The subject I takes am, not were, in the present tense. The subject we takes sing, and the sentence should be organized so that the when-clause clearly comes before the main clause.

× when I'm in the bathroom and she's in the washroom with We sing together

✓ When I'm in the bathroom and she's in the washroom, we sing together.

Bathroom and washroom are singular countable nouns in this context, so they need the definite article the. The unnecessary word with should be removed.