Hobby— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 回答切题，并列举了多个爱好，但句子在“that”处中断，影响完整性和流利度。注意搭配：应说“play outdoor sports”而不是“play outdoor activities”，并将“this hobbies”改为“these hobbies”。说明原因时要使用连接词和完整句子，例如用“because”和“Moreover”清楚表达放松、社交等作用。建议控制在3—4句内，避免列举过多而没有展开。

Ejemplo: Yes, I have several hobbies, including reading, playing football, and playing video games. I especially enjoy football because it helps me relax and stay active. Moreover, I can meet new people and make friends through the sport.

Sugerencia: 回答内容相关，也给出了原因，但开头缺少标点和自然停顿。应使用“when I was a child”来明确过去时间，并将“on a paper with using different colors”改为“on paper using different colours”。“make me feel relaxed and enjoyable”搭配错误，应改为“make me feel relaxed and happy”或“give me a sense of enjoyment”。可以补充一个具体的绘画内容，使答案更生动。

Ejemplo: Yes. When I was a child, I loved drawing, especially pictures of animals and landscapes. I enjoyed using different colours because it allowed me to express my creativity. It was also a relaxing way to spend my free time.

Sugerencia: 答案回应了“从小保持至今”的爱好，但时态和表达不够自然。“even when I was child or now”应改为“I have played them since I was a child”，因为问题要求突出从过去持续到现在。“communicate the strategies”应改为“discuss strategies”，“in there”应改为“in the game”。原答案是一个过长句子，建议拆分并使用“because”或“also”连接观点。

Ejemplo: Yes, I have played online games since I was a child. I enjoy discussing strategies and practising my skills with my friends. Although I play mainly for fun, I also like meeting people from different places through these games.

Sugerencia: 答案结构清晰，能够比较自己和父亲的共同爱好，也提供了周末活动的具体细节。注意正式表达中应说“My dad and I”，而不是“me and my dad”；“relax our stress”应改为“reduce our stress”或“relax”。“make more fun”不自然，可以说“have fun together”。此外，“play PUBG Mobile”比“play pop g mobile”更准确，且可用“On weekends”自然引出例子。

Ejemplo: Yes, my dad and I have several hobbies in common. We both enjoy playing video games, especially PUBG Mobile, and going hiking. On weekends, we sometimes go for a hike or play games together, which helps us reduce stress and spend quality time with each other.

× I love playing outdoor activities, reading and video games.

✓ I love doing outdoor activities, reading, and playing video games.

并列列举爱好时，几个动词形式应保持一致。这里应使用 doing、reading 和 playing；另外，通常说 do outdoor activities，而不是 play outdoor activities。

× For instance, I love to play football because I think this hobbies can make me feel relaxed and engaged also I can meet some new friends that

✓ For instance, I love playing football because I think these hobbies can make me feel relaxed and engaged, and I can meet some new friends.

hobbies 是复数名词，因此前面的指示词应使用复数形式 these，而不能使用 this。句末的 that 没有引出完整的从句，因此应删除。

× For instance, I love to play football because I think this hobbies can make me feel relaxed and engaged also I can meet some new friends that

✓ For instance, I love playing football because I think these hobbies can make me feel relaxed and engaged, and I can meet some new friends.

两个完整的分句之间需要使用连词 and 连接，并在前面加逗号。不能直接把两个分句连接在一起。

× Certainly when I was a child I loved drawing because drawing on a paper with using different colors can showcase my creativity.

✓ Certainly, when I was a child, I loved drawing because drawing on paper using different colors could showcase my creativity.

paper 表示纸这种不可数材料时，通常不使用 a。表示一般意义上的“在纸上”应说 on paper。

× Certainly when I was a child I loved drawing because drawing on a paper with using different colors can showcase my creativity.

✓ Certainly, when I was a child, I loved drawing because drawing on paper using different colors could showcase my creativity.

with using 的表达不自然。表示“通过使用不同颜色”时，应使用 by using；在这里也可以直接使用 using，使句子更简洁。

× Also I think this can make me feel relaxed and enjoyable

✓ Also, I think this can make me feel relaxed and happy.

relaxed 描述人的感受，而 enjoyable 通常描述事物或活动，不能自然地描述人的感受。描述人的感受时，可以使用 happy、relaxed 或 enjoyable 改为 enjoyable activity。

× Of course, I love to play online games even when I was child or now, I love to communicate the strategies and practice the skills with my buddies in the game and I can meet more friends in there.

✓ Of course, I have loved playing online games since I was a child, and I still love playing them now. I enjoy sharing strategies and practicing skills with my buddies in the game, and I can meet more friends there.

单数可数名词 child 前面需要冠词，应该说 a child。这里还使用了 since I was a child 来清楚表达“从童年一直到现在”。

× Of course, I love to play online games even when I was child or now, I love to communicate the strategies and practice the skills with my buddies in the game and I can meet more friends in there.

✓ Of course, I have loved playing online games since I was a child, and I still love playing them now. I enjoy sharing strategies and practicing skills with my buddies in the game, and I can meet more friends there.

描述现在仍然存在的爱好时，应使用现在时或现在完成时。这里用 have loved 表示从过去开始并持续到现在，用 still love 强调现在仍然喜欢。

× Of course, I love to play online games even when I was child or now, I love to communicate the strategies and practice the skills with my buddies in the game and I can meet more friends in there.

✓ Of course, I have loved playing online games since I was a child, and I still love playing them now. I enjoy sharing strategies and practicing skills with my buddies in the game, and I can meet more friends there.

there 本身可以表示地点，因此前面不需要再加介词 in。应说 meet more friends there，而不是 meet more friends in there。

× Yes, me and my dad have the same hobbies.

✓ Yes, my dad and I have the same hobbies.

在句子中作主语时，应使用主格代词 I，而不能使用宾格代词 me。同时，英语中通常把其他人放在 I 前面，因此说 my dad and I。

× Normally on weekends I will ask him to go hiking or play pop g mobile together so we can relax our stress and make more fun.

✓ Normally, on weekends, I ask him to go hiking or play PUBG Mobile with me, so we can relax and have more fun together.

Normally 和 on weekends 表示经常性习惯，应使用一般现在时 ask，而不是表示将来的 will ask。一般现在时更适合描述固定的周末活动。

× Normally on weekends I will ask him to go hiking or play pop g mobile together so we can relax our stress and make more fun.

✓ Normally, on weekends, I ask him to go hiking or play PUBG Mobile with me, so we can relax and have more fun together.

relax our stress 和 make more fun 的搭配不正确。英语中通常说 relax、reduce stress 或 have fun。这里使用 relax and have more fun together，句子结构和搭配都更自然。