Hobby— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Make the answer more concise, use a clear topic sentence, vary sentence structure and vocabulary, and add a brief specific example. Avoid repetition (e.g., "sometimes" repeated). Use linking words to show contrast or reason.

Ejemplo: Yes, I have several hobbies, but they change depending on my mood. For example, when I feel relaxed I enjoy drawing detailed sketches, while on energetic days I like to sing and dance. Generally, reading helps me unwind when I need a quieter activity.

Sugerencia: Provide a direct topic sentence, remove fillers (uh), correct grammar (singular/plural and phrasing), and give one specific detail about what you did or practiced as a child. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, as a child I was interested in beauty pageants and related activities. I practiced walking on stage, choosing outfits, and doing makeup at home, although I never entered an official competition. Those activities helped me become more confident in public.

Sugerencia: Start with a clear direct answer (Yes/No), then briefly explain with a specific reason and an example. Improve sentence cohesion using linking words (because, so, therefore) and correct minor grammar (word order).

Ejemplo: No, I don't have any hobbies that have lasted since childhood because my interests change frequently. For instance, I enjoyed pageant-related activities when I was young, but now I prefer creative hobbies like drawing and reading instead.

Sugerencia: Answer directly, avoid repetition, and give a short specific comparison with one example of a family member's hobby to make your point clearer. Use linking words (however, while) to contrast your hobbies with theirs.

Ejemplo: No, I don't share the same hobbies as my family. While my mother enjoys gardening and my brother plays football regularly, I prefer creative activities like drawing and singing, so our interests are quite different.

× I do have hobbies, but the hobbies are not permanent, they are temporary.

✓ I have hobbies, but they are not permanent; they are temporary.

Using 'do' for emphasis is possible but sounds unnatural in this context. Simplify to the simple present 'I have' to state a general fact. Also combine clauses with a semicolon or conjunction to improve flow.

× Sometimes I like to draw, I sometimes I like to sing, I sometimes I like to dance, sometimes I like to read and it depends on my situation or my current mood.

✓ Sometimes I like to draw, sometimes I like to sing, sometimes I like to dance, and sometimes I like to read; it depends on my situation or my current mood.

There is repetition of 'I' and missing conjunctions. Use parallel structure with repeated 'sometimes' and include 'and' before the last item. Add a semicolon to separate the list from the clause explaining it depends on mood.

× Yes, I did have many hobbies that was related to, uh, doing the beauty pageants.

✓ Yes, I did have many hobbies that were related to taking part in beauty pageants.

Subject 'hobbies' is plural so the relative clause needs plural verb 'were' not 'was' (subject-verb agreement). Also 'doing the beauty pageants' is unnatural; use 'taking part in beauty pageants' or 'competing in beauty pageants.'

× Uh, and uh, unfortunately I didn't get the chance to be in any type of program, but I did have the hobbies of, uh, becoming a beauty pageant.

✓ Unfortunately I didn't get the chance to be in any program, but I had the hobby of wanting to become a beauty pageant contestant.

'Hobbies of becoming a beauty pageant' is ungrammatical. Use 'hobby of wanting to become' or 'aspiration to become a beauty pageant contestant.' Also remove filler 'uh' and simplify tense: 'didn't get' is correct past, so match with 'had.'

× I think no, my hobbies are not permanent and they do change a lot, so I don't think that the hobbies that are related to my childhood are still the hobbies now I am interested in it.

✓ I don't think so; my hobbies are not permanent and change a lot, so I don't think the hobbies I had in childhood are the ones I'm interested in now.

Start with 'I don't think so' rather than 'I think no.' Remove redundant phrasing and correct word order: 'hobbies that are related to my childhood' -> 'the hobbies I had in childhood.' Match tense and ensure pronoun reference 'they' aligns with 'hobbies.'

× No, my family members do have the hobbies, but I think that they have their own type of hobbies and they don't and they don't match with my type of hobbies.

✓ No, my family members have hobbies, but I think they have their own types of hobbies and they don't match mine.

Remove unnecessary 'do' auxiliary; say 'have hobbies.' Avoid repetition 'they don't and they don't.' Use 'types of hobbies' and a more natural comparison 'don't match mine.'

× They do have their own own personalities with their own hobbies.

✓ They have their own personalities and their own hobbies.

Double 'own' is a repetition error. Use 'have their own personalities and hobbies.' Also 'with' is unnecessary; coordinate the nouns with 'and.'