Hobby— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and remove fillers (e.g., “umm”). Start with a clear topic sentence, then briefly add one or two specific details about your art (materials, styles, frequency). Use a linking word if you add details. Keep to under five sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes. My main hobby lately is visual art — I enjoy sketching and canvas painting. For example, I usually paint landscapes using acrylics twice a week, which helps me relax and improve my technique.

Sugerencia: Avoid repetition and awkward phrasing like “comparatively.” Begin with a clear topic sentence about childhood hobbies, then give one concise supporting detail (when, where, or how often you sang). Use a linking word to connect ideas.

Ejemplo: As a child, I spent most of my free time singing rather than drawing. For instance, I practiced singing at home and joined school choir rehearsals every week.

Sugerencia: Good content and a strong specific example. Improve naturalness by removing fillers like “so” and “actually,” and tighten redundancy (e.g., “till this date”). Use one linking word to connect continuing the hobby with the example.

Ejemplo: Yes, I have continued singing since childhood. In fact, I recently performed with a band at a Model UN event, singing in front of about 600 people, which boosted my confidence.

Sugerencia: Be more formal and concise: avoid casual tags like “but yeah.” Start with a direct topic sentence, then give two brief specific contrasts (sister’s activities, mother’s baking) and a short reason for not sharing those hobbies. Limit to two or three sentences.

Ejemplo: Not really — my sister prefers physical activities like running, while I enjoy creative pursuits such as painting. My mother likes baking, but I avoid it because I’m not confident in the kitchen and worry about ruining recipes.

× I do actually umm, one of the hobbies that I have been doing recently is art.

✓ I actually do have one hobby that I have been doing recently: art.

Original has awkward word order and unnecessary 'do' placement. Reordering clarifies the subject and verb. Use a colon or 'is' to introduce 'art' as the hobby.

× In arts.

✓ In art.

The phrase 'In arts' is unnatural; 'art' as a general field is uncountable and should be singular. Use 'art' to refer to the subject in general.

× I would say it's sketching and canvas painting.

✓ I would say it's sketching and canvas painting.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable; no change needed. (Included to show it fits allowed types; kept unchanged.)

× When I was a child, I actually indulged more in singing comparatively to arts, even though arts was a factor in my childhood.

✓ When I was a child, I actually indulged more in singing compared to art, even though art was also part of my childhood.

Use 'compared to' not 'comparatively to'. 'Arts' should be 'art' (uncountable) and 'was a factor' is awkward; 'was also part of my childhood' is clearer and matches past tense.

× But I think I spend more of my time singing and pursuing singing as a hobby comparatively.

✓ But I think I spent more of my time singing and pursued singing as a hobby back then.

The context is past, so use past tense 'spent' and 'pursued'. 'Comparatively' is awkward; 'back then' or 'at that time' fits better.

× So as I previously mentioned, I did singing as a hobby and I still continue singing till this date.

✓ So, as I previously mentioned, I sang as a hobby and I still continue to sing to this day.

Use 'sang' for past activity and 'continue to sing' as correct infinitive form. 'Till this date' is non-idiomatic; 'to this day' is idiomatic.

× I actually recently participated in an MUN just for singing.

✓ I actually recently participated in an MUN session just for singing.

MUN (Model United Nations) usually refers to a conference or session; adding 'session' clarifies. The original is acceptable but adding 'session' improves clarity; preposition 'in' is fine.

× I was a part of a band and I performed in front of about approximately 600 people.

✓ I was part of a band and I performed in front of approximately 600 people.

Do not use 'about' and 'approximately' together; they are redundant. Use one quantifier. Also 'a part of' can be shortened to 'part of'.

× Not really since my sister is more into physical activities whereas I am more into creatives.

✓ Not really, since my sister is more into physical activities, whereas I am more into creative pursuits.

'Creatives' as a noun is informal and unclear here; 'creative pursuits' or 'creative activities' is better. Add commas for clarity and natural conjunction use.

× My mother is very much into baking but I can't bring myself to bake as well since I think I would end up burning the food but yeah.

✓ My mother is very much into baking, but I can't bring myself to bake, because I think I would end up burning the food.

Sentence run-on and informal 'but yeah'. Replace with 'because' to explain reason and add commas to separate clauses. 'Bring myself to bake' is fine; remove trailing 'but yeah' for formality.