Hobby— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng hơn, dùng câu chủ đề trực tiếp trả lời câu hỏi, sửa ngữ pháp (động từ, số nhiều), tránh lặp từ và thêm chi tiết cụ thể. Nên dùng liên từ ngắn để nối ý và giữ tối đa 3–4 câu. Ví dụ sửa lỗi: 'reading book' -> 'reading books'; 'they have me relax' -> 'they help me relax'.

Ejemplo: I have several hobbies, mainly reading books and listening to music. I do these almost every day because they help me relax after work. For example, I usually read short stories in the evening and listen to acoustic playlists while making dinner.

Sugerencia: Cần tránh từ thừa ('Or') và sửa ngữ pháp cũng như từ vựng sai ('selling books' không đúng). Câu chủ đề nên khẳng định trực tiếp, sau đó đưa ví dụ cụ thể (thể loại sách, thói quen). Dùng liên từ để kết nối lý do và ví dụ. Hạn chế dài dòng và lặp ý.

Ejemplo: Yes, I used to read a lot of books as a child and often finished one every month. I especially enjoyed history and adventure stories because they expanded my knowledge. At school I spent my free periods reading in the library, which became a daily habit.

Sugerencia: Câu trả lời mâu thuẫn và cần chính xác: bạn nói 'I have written books' nhưng ý có lẽ là 'I have read books' hoặc 'I have been writing'. Cần sửa thời thái và rõ ràng về việc là đọc hay viết. Thêm một chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ thể loại hoặc tác phẩm) và dùng liên từ để giải thích lợi ích.

Ejemplo: Yes, I've had a love of reading since childhood because my mother encouraged me to read. Over the years I read many novels and history books, which helped me learn new things and improve my vocabulary. More recently I have also tried writing short stories inspired by what I read.

Sugerencia: Cần tránh lặp từ ('enjoy listening, enjoy listening') và làm câu mạch lạc hơn. Nên nêu câu chủ đề ngắn gọn, giải thích vì sao thích cùng thể loại âm nhạc và thêm một ví dụ cụ thể (nghệ sĩ hoặc hoạt động cùng nhau). Giữ độ dài dưới 4 câu.

Ejemplo: Yes, I share hobbies with my brother; we both enjoy alternative and indie music. We often listen together while studying because the mellow rhythm helps us concentrate. For example, we like bands like Phoebe Bridgers and Arctic Monkeys and sometimes discuss new songs after dinner.

× Hobbies I have several hobbies such as reading book and listening to music.

✓ I have several hobbies such as reading books and listening to music.

The original sentence is missing a proper subject-verb order and has a singular/plural error. Start with the pronoun subject 'I' followed by verb 'have'. 'Book' should be plural 'books' because 'several' requires a plural noun. Suggestion: Use subject-verb order 'I have' and pluralize countable nouns after words like 'several'. (ID:26, ID:1)

× I do this almost every day because they have me relax and put my mind at ease.

✓ I do this almost every day because they help me relax and put my mind at ease.

Pronoun reference and verb choice are incorrect. 'They' refers to 'hobbies' which is OK but 'have me relax' is unnatural; use 'help me relax'. Also ensure verbs agree: 'help' (base) after plural subject 'they'. Suggestion: Use 'help someone do something' for this meaning. (ID:10, ID:27)

× Or when I was a child, I used to read a lot of books and often finished one within a month.

✓ When I was a child, I used to read a lot of books and often finished one within a month.

Leading conjunction 'Or' is unnecessary and creates a sentence structure error. Remove 'Or' to make a clear statement. Suggestion: Begin with 'When I was a child' for past habitual actions. (ID:26)

× At school especially, I read history and selling books every single day.

✓ At school especially, I read history and literature books every single day.

The original mixes verb form 'selling' incorrectly with 'read'. It seems the intended meaning is types of books; 'selling' is wrong. Replace with appropriate noun/adjective like 'literature' or 'history books'. Also maintain parallel noun phrase 'history and literature books'. Suggestion: Use parallel nouns when listing genres. (ID:26, ID:13)

× Yes, I have written books since I was a child because my mother encouraged me to read.

✓ Yes, I have been writing since I was a child because my mother encouraged me to read.

'Have written books since' suggests completion, but 'since I was a child' with ongoing action requires present perfect continuous 'have been writing'. If the meaning is that the habit started in childhood and continues, use 'have been writing'. Suggestion: Use present perfect continuous for actions that began in the past and continue. (ID:5, ID:6)

× Reading helps me learn new things from my studies and improves my language skills.

✓ Reading helps me learn new things in my studies and improves my language skills.

The preposition 'from' is slightly awkward; 'in my studies' is more natural to indicate within academic learning. Suggestion: Choose prepositions that match collocations: 'learn in my studies'. (ID:11)

× Yes, I share hobbies with my brother. We both enjoy listening, enjoy listening to alternative and indie music because it helps us focus when we study and relax after a hectic day.

✓ Yes, I share hobbies with my brother. We both enjoy listening to alternative and indie music because it helps us focus when we study and relax after a hectic day.

The original repeats 'enjoy listening' causing redundancy. Remove the repeated phrase to make the sentence concise. Pronoun 'it' correctly refers to 'listening to music' as a singular activity. Suggestion: Avoid unnecessary repetition and ensure pronoun references are clear. (ID:12, ID:26)