Hobby— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and natural: start with a direct topic sentence, then add 1–2 specific supporting details using a linking word. Avoid unnecessary words (e.g., “do have”) and minor grammar issues (use “a morning walk” or “morning walks”).

Ejemplo: Yes. I usually take a 20–30 minute walk every morning to stay fit. For example, I walk around my neighborhood park because it helps me wake up and improves my mood before work.

Sugerencia: Use past tense consistently and be more specific. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add a cause or example using a linking word such as “because” or “so.” Remove redundant phrases like “I have a hobby” repeated.

Ejemplo: Yes, I did. As a child, I liked spending evenings with my family because my parents returned from work then. For example, we often chatted at the dinner table about our day.

Sugerencia: Keep answers under five sentences, correct tense and wording, and finish your examples. Give a clear topic sentence, then add 1–2 concise supporting details with linking words (e.g., “for example,” “also”). Avoid repetition and complete your example (name a board game).

Ejemplo: Yes. I have kept that habit since childhood: I still spend evenings with my family. For example, we sit at the dinner table and sometimes play board games like Monopoly, which helps us relax and bond.

Sugerencia: Be concise and avoid repetition and filler words. Use clear linking words (e.g., “because,” “so,” “for example”) and correct vocabulary (e.g., hobby, spend time). Provide a short reason or example to support your answer and avoid repeating phrases like “their emotions.”

Ejemplo: Yes, because we all enjoy spending evenings together. For example, we often catch up over dinner and share stories, which shows that spending time together is a mutual hobby.

× I usually do 20 to 30 minutes morning walk every day to make my body fit and healthier.

✓ I usually take a 20- to 30-minute morning walk every day to keep my body fit and healthy.

The verb 'do' is unnatural with 'walk' in this context; use 'take a walk'. '20 to 30 minutes' should be written as '20- to 30-minute' when modifying 'walk'. 'Morning' should be before 'walk' and 'healthier' should be 'healthy' to describe state rather than comparative. Use present simple for habitual action.

× When I was a child, I have a hobby.

✓ When I was a child, I had a hobby.

Mixing past context ('When I was a child') with present perfect 'have' is incorrect. Use simple past 'had' to match the past timeframe.

× I had a hobby of spending time with my family during the evening time as my parents came from their busy schedule hours from their work.

✓ I had the hobby of spending evenings with my family because my parents came home from work after busy hours.

The original sentence has awkward word order and redundancy ('during the evening time', 'came from their busy schedule hours from their work'). Rephrase to natural order: 'spending evenings', 'came home from work after busy hours'. Use 'the hobby' or simply 'I used to spend evenings...' for clarity.

× Yes, I already mentioned before I have have a hobby that in my childhood as I usually spend time evening time with my family members as they came home from their work and we usually spend time at the dinner table and then we also play board games such as.

✓ Yes, I already mentioned that I had a hobby in my childhood: I used to spend evenings with my family when they came home from work; we would eat dinner together and sometimes play board games.

Multiple tense and structure errors: 'already mentioned before' is redundant; 'have have' is a typo; 'have a hobby that in my childhood' is ungrammatical. Use past tense 'had' and 'used to' for habitual past actions. Simplify and complete the sentence; remove the dangling 'such as' or add examples.

× Well, I think yes, 'cause I have a hob, as I mentioned before, I have a hobby of spending time with them.

✓ Well, I think so, because I have a hobby, as I mentioned before: I enjoy spending time with them.

'Yes, 'cause I have a hob' contains typos and informal contractions. 'I think yes' is acceptable but 'I think so' is more natural when agreeing. Use 'because' instead of ''cause' in formal speech. 'Hob' is a typo for 'hobby'. Clarify verb 'enjoy'.

× They also have a hobby spending time with me and sharing their emotions and emotions and their love during the evening time as they have free time on that time.

✓ They also enjoy spending time with me and sharing their feelings and love in the evenings when they are free.

'Have a hobby spending time' is awkward; prefer 'enjoy spending time'. Repeated 'emotions and emotions' is redundant; use 'feelings'. 'During the evening time' and 'on that time' are incorrect prepositional uses; use 'in the evenings' and 'when they are free'.