Shoes— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your habit, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words (e.g., 'because', 'so'). Avoid redundancy and limit to 3–4 sentences. Also correct tense/word forms (e.g., 'use them to their full life' or 'wear them until they wear out').

Ejemplo: I enjoy buying shoes, but I buy them infrequently. I tend to wear each pair for many years because I prefer good quality, so I use them until they wear out.

Sugerencia: Correct grammar and make point more natural. Use a clear topic sentence ('No, I haven't') and one reason with a linking word ('because') plus a brief example. Avoid repeating 'for me'.

Ejemplo: No, I haven't bought shoes online because I worry about the fit; without trying them on, they can be either too large or too small, which makes returns inconvenient.

Sugerencia: Use a direct topic sentence and tighten the sentence structure. State a typical price range or relative amount, then give a reason using linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Correct noun forms ('good-quality shoes').

Ejemplo: I usually spend a fair amount on shoes—around $80–$150—because I rarely buy them and prefer good-quality shoes that will last for several years.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and avoid fillers. Use a clear topic sentence ('I prefer both') and explain briefly why with one or two specific reasons, connected by linking words ('because', 'so'). Fix small mistakes and avoid repetition ('so so me').

Ejemplo: I prefer both fashionable and comfortable shoes because I like a stylish look for social occasions but I also need comfort for walking; therefore I choose brands that combine design with practical support.

× I love buying shoes, but I would say that I'm not the person who has many shoes.

✓ I love buying shoes, but I would say that I'm not a person who has many pairs of shoes.

Use of article and noun form: 'the person who has many shoes' implies a specific person; 'a person' is more natural. Also 'many shoes' is better phrased as 'many pairs of shoes' when counting footwear. This fixes article usage and pluralization.

× When I get a pair of shoes, I would use it with its full ability.

✓ When I get a pair of shoes, I use it to its full potential.

Incorrect phrase 'use it with its full ability' is unnatural. Use of conditional 'would' is unnecessary when describing habitual action; present simple 'use' is correct. Replace 'full ability' with the fixed expression 'full potential'.

× I would use it until it got ripped off or like dirty enough.

✓ I use them until they get worn out or become dirty enough.

Tense consistency: describing habitual behavior should use present simple, not past 'got'. Pronoun agreement: 'a pair of shoes' -> plural pronoun 'them'. 'Ripped off' is wrong for shoes; 'worn out' is appropriate. Remove filler 'like'.

× No, I have never buy shoes online before.

✓ No, I have never bought shoes online before.

Present perfect requires the past participle 'bought', not base form 'buy'. Use 'have never bought' for experience up to now.

× For me, buying shoes online is kind of risky for me because you didn't get the chance to try it with your own feet, so sometimes it might be oversized or too small for your feet.

✓ For me, buying shoes online is risky because you don't get the chance to try them on, so they can be too big or too small for your feet.

Pronoun and tense issues: avoid repeating 'for me'. Use present simple 'don't get' for general truth. 'Try it with your own feet' is unnatural; use 'try them on'. Match number: 'them' refers to shoes. Use 'too big or too small' instead of 'oversized or too small'.

× As I mentioned that I rarely buy new pairs of shoes, so when I get one I would get a pretty expensive one because I need a good quality shoes that I can wear for many years.

✓ As I mentioned, I rarely buy new pairs of shoes, so when I get one I usually buy a fairly expensive pair because I need good-quality shoes that I can wear for many years.

Sentence structure and tense: remove 'that' after 'mentioned' and use present simple 'rarely buy'. Replace conditional 'would get' with habitual 'usually buy'. Use 'pair' not 'one' to refer to shoes, and hyphenate 'good-quality' as an adjective. Keep plural agreement with 'shoes'.

× Nowadays there are tons of shoe brands and.

✓ Nowadays there are tons of shoe brands.

The original sentence ends with an extraneous conjunction 'and' causing a sentence fragment. Remove 'and' to complete the sentence.

× It comes with a practical use and a wonderful design so so me personally, I prefer both.

✓ They come with practical use and wonderful design, so personally I prefer both.

Subject-verb agreement and article use: 'shoe brands' is plural so use 'they come'. Remove unnecessary articles 'a' before uncountable nouns 'practical use' and 'wonderful design'. Fix typo 'so so me' to 'so personally'. Use a comma before the concluding clause.