Shoes— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be concise and correct small grammar issues; state the main idea clearly then add one or two specific supporting details using a linking word. Avoid redundancy (e.g., "I don't like buying shoes" and "I don't find the need to buy another pair" are similar).

Ejemplo: I don't buy shoes often because I prefer to keep a small wardrobe. For example, I have a pair of New Balance trainers that are very durable, so they meet my everyday needs and I rarely need to replace them.

Sugerencia: Organize the answer: give a clear topic sentence, then explain the problem with one or two specific details and a consequence. Fix grammar and phrasing (e.g., "when it came to my house personally" is unclear). Use a linking word like "however" or "because".

Ejemplo: Yes, I have, and it was disappointing because the shoes didn't fit even though I followed the size chart. For example, the heel was too tight, so I had to return them and wait two weeks for a refund.

Sugerencia: Start with a direct topic sentence stating the typical amount, then add a brief reason or condition using a linking word. Avoid repeating "usually" twice and be specific about frequency or conditions.

Ejemplo: I usually spend around two thousand pesos on a pair of shoes. Because I don't buy shoes often, I typically only replace them when my old ones are worn out.

Sugerencia: Good clear answer with relevant supporting detail. Improve by combining sentences for fluency and using a linking word to connect reason and result; remove minor redundancy ("whenever I go out and I wear").

Ejemplo: I prefer comfortable shoes because I love walking; as a result, I can walk longer without straining my feet or getting blisters.

× For example, I have a new balance shoes that are very durable, they're good for everyday and I don't find the need to buy another pair.

✓ For example, I have a pair of New Balance shoes that are very durable; they're good for everyday use and I don't feel the need to buy another pair.

The phrase 'a new balance shoes' mixes singular article 'a' with plural 'shoes'. Use 'a pair of' with brand names: 'a pair of New Balance shoes'. Also 'everyday' should be 'everyday use' (noun) or 'everyday' as adjective; using 'use' clarifies meaning. 'Find the need' is slightly unnatural; 'feel the need' is more idiomatic. Suggestion: Use 'a pair of [brand] shoes' for one set; match noun phrases and articles correctly and prefer idiomatic verbs like 'feel'.

× Yes, I have and it was actually awful because the sizes are different even though I followed the size measurements when it came to my house personally, it didn't fit. So yeah.

✓ Yes, I have and it was actually awful because the sizes were different. Even though I followed the size chart, when the shoes arrived at my house they didn't fit me.

Mixes present and past inconsistently: 'sizes are different' should be past 'were different' to match 'it was actually awful'. 'Size measurements' is better as 'size chart'. The clause 'when it came to my house personally' is ungrammatical; use 'when the shoes arrived at my house' and include the correct subject 'they' and object 'me' for 'didn't fit me'. Suggestion: Keep past tense consistently for past events and use clear subjects for arriving and fitting.

× I don't buy shoes that often so I usually spend around two thousand pesos on a pair of shoes.

✓ I don't buy shoes that often, so I usually spend around two thousand pesos on a pair.

Repeating 'a pair of shoes' after 'buy shoes' is redundant. While not strictly ungrammatical, shortening to 'a pair' is more natural. Also add a comma before 'so' connecting independent clauses. Suggestion: Avoid redundancy by omitting repeated nouns when clear from context and punctuate coordinating conjunctions.

× I usually buy when my old ones get broken.

✓ I usually buy when my old ones break.

Use simple present for habitual actions: 'get broken' is a passive construction and awkward here. 'Break' is the active verb describing the usual condition when replacement occurs. Suggestion: Use simple present for regular habits and prefer active verbs ('break') over 'get' + past participle.

× So whenever I go out and I wear comfortable shoes I'm able to walk a lot longer without straining my feet or having the risk of blisters.

✓ So whenever I go out and wear comfortable shoes, I'm able to walk much longer without straining my feet or risking blisters.

The original contains redundancy 'I go out and I wear'—omit the second 'I'. 'Walk a lot longer' is acceptable but 'much longer' is more natural. 'Having the risk of blisters' is wordy; use the gerund 'risking blisters' or 'without the risk of blisters'. Suggestion: Combine coordinated clauses smoothly, avoid redundant pronouns, and use concise gerund phrases ('risking blisters').