Shoes— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and coherent. Begin with a clear topic sentence stating whether you like buying shoes and how often. Use simple, accurate vocabulary and avoid unclear metaphors (e.g., “look like a goat”). Give one or two specific reasons and link them with a connector (because/so). Keep to 2–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes and I usually buy a new pair every few months. I like to have shoes that match different outfits, especially when I go out or take photos, because they complete my look and boost my confidence.

Sugerencia: Organise your response: state clearly if you have bought shoes online, then give balanced reasons using linking words (however, because, for example). Use correct vocabulary (seller, quality, value) and avoid contradictions without explanation. Limit to 3–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I have bought shoes online several times. Sometimes the experience is good because sellers offer a wide selection and lower prices; however, other times the quality is disappointing or the size is wrong, so I check reviews and return policies before I buy.

Sugerencia: Give a direct numerical answer and then explain briefly why. Use correct sentence structure and clear vocabulary for time/frequency and amount (e.g., per month / per year / every few months). Avoid fillers and unclear phrases like “shoot the ball.” Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

Ejemplo: I usually spend about $100 every few months on shoes. I spend that because I like shoes that match my outfits for different occasions, especially when I go out or take photos.

Sugerencia: Start with a clear preference, then give a contrasting statement with a reason and an example. Use linking words (but, however, when) and correct grammar for subject-verb agreement. Keep it brief and specific about occasions.

Ejemplo: I prefer comfortable shoes for everyday wear because they are easier to walk in. However, for special events or photos I sometimes choose fashionable shoes to complete my outfit.

× I like buying shoes so much because when I go out I need the new shoes for one new place.

✓ I like buying shoes very much because when I go out I need new shoes for different places.

The sentence uses 'the new shoes' and 'one new place' incorrectly. Use 'new shoes' (general plural) and 'different places' to match meaning. Also replace 'so much' with more neutral 'very much'. Ensure noun-pronoun consistency and correct plural usage.

× Like when I'm taking a picture I need everything look like a goat and a good news things from me and I want to make my picture look like a gold and better things.

✓ For example, when I'm taking a picture I want everything to look good and stylish, and I want my picture to look golden and better.

The original has incorrect and unclear adjective use ('look like a goat', 'a good news things', 'look like a gold'). Replace with appropriate adjectives and structures: 'want everything to look' + adjective; use 'golden' instead of 'gold'. Remove nonsensical phrases.

× Yeah, I have bought shoes online and I think sometime it was good, sometime it's not good because some the sailor is sail about the quality, but sometime it's bad price with low quality.

✓ Yes, I have bought shoes online and sometimes it was good, sometimes it was not, because some sellers lie about the quality, and sometimes the price is cheap but the quality is low.

Errors include adverb form 'sometime' should be 'sometimes', tense consistency ('it was good' vs 'it's not good') and incorrect nouns ('sailor' should be 'seller', 'is sail about' should be 'lie about'). Also clarify 'bad price' to 'price is cheap but quality is low'. Maintain present perfect for experience and simple past/simple present for results.

× I hate it. But yeah I prefer to buy it online again.

✓ I hate that. But yes, I would prefer to buy online again.

'I hate it' is acceptable but 'buy it online again' is awkward; replace 'it' with 'online' and use conditional 'would prefer' to sound natural. Also 'yeah' -> 'yes' for formality.

× I usually spend on shoes on the few months.

✓ I usually spend on shoes every few months.

'on the few months' is incorrect. Use 'every few months' to express a repeated interval. Also add 'on' after 'spend' only when specifying money (e.g., 'spend 100 on shoes').

× I think it 100.

✓ I think about 100.

Missing verb and currency reference. Use 'I think about 100' or 'I think it's about 100' and preferably specify currency (for example, '100 dollars'). The original lacks a verb.

× Yeah, it is because I need to umm, match with my outfit.

✓ Yes, it's because I need to match my shoes with my outfit.

Incorrect prepositional structure 'match with' should be 'match ... with' or 'match my shoes to my outfit'. Also unnecessary filler 'umm' removed. Keep clear subject 'my shoes'.

× When I go out or take picture, I want something shoot the ball for different occasion.

✓ When I go out or take pictures, I want something suitable for different occasions.

Multiple issues: plural 'pictures', incorrect phrase 'something shoot the ball' is meaningless; replace with 'something suitable'. Use plural 'occasions' for generality.

× Umm belongs to these two type.

✓ I belong to both types.

'Belongs to these two type' is incorrect subject-verb and plural forms. Use 'I belong to both types' to express personal preference covering two categories.

× I prefer the comfortable shoes, but sometimes I prefer to be fashionable shoes too.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes, but sometimes I prefer fashionable ones too.

Definite article 'the' is unnecessary with general preference. 'to be fashionable shoes' is ungrammatical; use 'fashionable ones' to refer to shoes.

× It's depends on the occasion that I goes and shoot about my outfit when I go out, yeah.

✓ It depends on the occasion and where I go and how I style my outfit when I go out.

'It's depends' should be 'It depends' (subject-verb agreement). 'I goes' should be 'I go'. 'shoot about my outfit' is unclear; replace with 'how I style my outfit'. Ensure verbs agree with subjects and clarify meaning.