Shoes— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words, correct grammar (use 'enjoy' or 'like', and 'I buy' not 'I realize buying'). Give one or two brief supporting details using linking words. Keep under five sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes and I usually buy a new pair about once a month. Because I play sports regularly, I tend to buy sneakers that are supportive and breathable so I can train comfortably.

Sugerencia: Give a direct answer then explain with specific reasons and linking words. Fix grammar (use 'I have never bought' and 'see the shoes in person'). Reduce repetition and finish the thought with a clear reason.

Ejemplo: No, I have never bought shoes online. I prefer trying them on in person because it’s hard to judge fit and comfort from photos, so I usually visit stores to test the size and feel before buying.

Sugerencia: Check the accuracy of details and use realistic amounts. Respond clearly with correct grammar and give one reason. Avoid repetition and filler words. If you meant another amount, correct it and explain why that price suits you.

Ejemplo: I usually spend around $50 on a pair of shoes because I look for durability and comfort. Spending that amount allows me to buy well-made sneakers that last through regular sports practice.

Sugerencia: Good clear preference. Improve by giving a concise reason and adding a specific example or comparison using linking words. Remove fillers and repeat fewer words.

Ejemplo: I prefer comfortable shoes because I play football regularly and need good cushioning and support. For example, I choose shoes with padded insoles and a sturdy sole rather than trendy designs that might be less supportive.

× Yes, I realize buying shoes.

✓ Yes, I enjoy buying shoes.

The student used 'realize' incorrectly; 'realize' refers to becoming aware, not enjoying. This is a word choice error and sentence structure issue. Use 'enjoy' to express liking an activity. Also 'buying shoes' is correct as a gerund phrase following 'enjoy'.

× I am a person who really like playing sports, so I often, uh, buy umm, sneakers to umm umm, to uh, maintain my habit.

✓ I am a person who really likes playing sports, so I often buy sneakers to maintain my habit.

The relative clause 'who really like' must agree with its antecedent 'person' (singular), so the verb should be 'likes'. Also remove filler words and redundant phrases for clarity.

× No, I never bought shoes online.

✓ No, I have never bought shoes online.

When referring to life experience up to now, English typically uses the present perfect ('have never bought') rather than the simple past ('never bought'). Use present perfect to indicate experience without a specified time.

× I believe that when I purchase shoes online, it is difficult to see directly the shoes what I want to purchase.

✓ I believe that when I purchase shoes online, it is difficult to see the shoes I want to buy directly.

The phrase 'see directly the shoes what I want to purchase' is ungrammatical. Use 'see the shoes I want to buy directly' or 'directly see the shoes I want to buy'. Also replace 'what' with a relative clause 'that' or omit it: 'the shoes I want to buy.'

× So I often go to the stores and and observe every.

✓ So I often go to the store and try them on.

The original sentence is vague and contains a repeated 'and'. 'Observe every' is incorrect usage. Common collocations are 'go to the store' and 'try them on' when referring to shoes. Use singular 'store' for habitual shopping or plural 'stores' consistently.

× I usually spend $5 on shoes.

✓ I usually spend about $50 on shoes.

Spending $5 on shoes is unusually low and likely a typo; if the student meant a typical amount, '$50' is more plausible. If $5 was intended, it is grammatically fine but contextually odd. This suggestion assumes correction of quantifier to realistic amount. If $5 was correct, no grammatical correction is needed.

× I think this expense is really enough for me to, uh, purchase durable, durable shoes and, uh, which relaxed me.

✓ I think this amount is enough for me to buy durable shoes, and it makes me feel relaxed.

Problems: repeated adjective 'durable, durable', incorrect use of 'expense' (better 'amount'), and incorrect relative clause 'which relaxed me' — use 'it makes me feel relaxed'. Rearranged to natural collocations: 'amount is enough to buy durable shoes' and 'it makes me feel relaxed'.

× I prefer comfortable shoes.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes.

This sentence is correct and fits the question; no grammatical change needed.

× I am a football player so with comfortable shoes it is ideal opportunity for me to umm, feel more comfortable when I play football.

✓ I am a football player, so comfortable shoes give me an ideal opportunity to feel more comfortable when I play football.

Original sentence has awkward word order and missing articles: 'it is ideal opportunity' should be 'an ideal opportunity'. Better phrasing places 'comfortable shoes' as the subject: 'comfortable shoes give me an ideal opportunity...' Remove fillers and ensure article usage.

× So that's why I like comfortable.

✓ So that's why I like comfortable shoes.

The adjective 'comfortable' cannot stand alone as a noun here. Add the noun 'shoes' to complete the idea: 'I like comfortable shoes.'