Shoes— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition ("current situation" and "financial situation"), remove fillers (uh, umm), and give a brief frequency detail. Use linking words if adding reason.

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes, but I don’t do it very often because I’m saving money at the moment. I usually buy new shoes only once or twice a year, mainly when the old ones wear out.

Sugerencia: Give a direct answer then provide clear, specific reasons using linking words. Remove repetitions and fillers, and use correct vocabulary (e.g., "stretchiness", "fit"). Mention a concrete example if possible.

Ejemplo: No, I haven’t bought shoes online. I prefer buying from local shops because I can try them on to check the fit, comfort and durability. For example, last month I tested a pair by walking and running in the store to make sure they were comfortable.

Sugerencia: Answer directly with a clear amount and simplify phrasing. Avoid irrelevant currency explanation unless asked. Correct grammar and remove fillers. State frequency separately if needed.

Ejemplo: I usually spend around 6,000 rupees on a good pair of shoes. I don’t buy shoes often — maybe once or twice a year unless I need a replacement.

Sugerencia: Give a clear preference in the first sentence, then briefly explain why with specific reasons. Use correct collocations ("comfortable shoes", "look attractive") and avoid awkward phrases like "fits on her table". Keep it under five sentences.

Ejemplo: I prefer comfortable shoes that are also reasonably fashionable. While attractive designs are nice, I choose shoes that fit well and support my feet because uncomfortable shoes affect my posture and confidence.

× Yes, I do like buying shoes, but due to my current situation and my financial situation, I don't think that I would like to buy the shoes, uh, very often.

✓ Yes, I like buying shoes, but due to my current financial situation, I don't think I will buy shoes very often.

Redundant use of 'do' for emphasis is unnecessary in a simple statement; simplify to present simple 'I like'. 'My current situation and my financial situation' is repetitive; combine to 'my current financial situation'. 'Would like to buy the shoes very often' mixes conditional 'would' with general frequency; use 'will' or 'buy ... often' to match present/future intent. Also remove filler 'uh' and unnecessary 'the'. Suggestions: use concise present simple for likes and 'will' for future likelihood.

× No, I buy the shoes only from the, uh, local market so I can see its quality and, uh, I can see it's, uh, reliability, comfort, comfort and, uh, stretchable.

✓ No, I only buy shoes from the local market so I can check their quality, reliability, comfort and stretchability.

Use 'only buy shoes' rather than 'buy the shoes' to refer to shoes in general. 'Its' and 'it's' are incorrect because 'shoes' is plural; use plural pronoun 'their'. 'Stretchable' should be the noun 'stretchability' to list qualities. Remove filler 'uh' and duplicate 'comfort'. Suggestions: match plural nouns with plural pronouns and use consistent noun forms when listing qualities.

× So I can, uh, be comfortable while wearing and running in that suit.

✓ So I can be comfortable while wearing them and running.

The student uses 'that suit' incorrectly; context refers to shoes, so use plural pronoun 'them'. 'Wearing and running in that suit' is awkward and mismatched; simplify to 'wearing them and running'. Remove filler 'uh'. Suggestions: ensure pronouns refer to the correct noun and keep verbs parallel.

× In my country there is uh, no dollar, There is a rupees, so in the shoes I think that I would spend more than six thousands uh, on, on pursue, but I would like to umm, buy them often and occasionally not daily.

✓ In my country we don't use dollars; we use rupees. For shoes, I think I would spend more than six thousand rupees, but I would buy them occasionally, not daily.

Incorrect capitalization and articles: 'no dollar' should be 'we don't use dollars' or 'there are no dollars' and 'There is a rupees' is incorrect—use 'we use rupees'. 'Six thousands' is wrong pluralization; use 'six thousand'. 'on pursue' is incorrect word choice; likely meant 'on purchase' or simply omit. 'Buy them often and occasionally not daily' is contradictory; clarify as 'occasionally, not daily'. Suggestions: use correct currency phrasing, correct number formatting (no plural 'thousands' after a numeral), and choose appropriate words like 'purchase' if needed.

× I would like to prefer comfortables with the fashionable shoes, maybe attracting, but wearing it uncomfortably makes you feel very unconscious.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes over fashionable ones; they may be attractive, but wearing uncomfortable shoes makes you feel self-conscious.

'Prefer' does not take 'would like to' and 'comfortables' is not a correct plural noun for 'comfortable'; use 'comfortable shoes'. 'With the fashionable shoes' should be 'over fashionable ones'. 'Attracting' is the wrong form; use adjective 'attractive'. 'Wearing it uncomfortably' has wrong pronoun and adverb; use 'wearing uncomfortable shoes' or 'wearing them uncomfortably'. 'Very unconscious' is incorrect meaning; likely 'self-conscious' is intended. Suggestions: use correct noun forms, avoid redundant modal constructions, and choose accurate adjectives.

× Umm and I would like to wear comfortable shoes that can makes my feet fits on her table.

✓ I want to wear comfortable shoes that fit my feet.

'Would like to' can be simplified to 'I want' for clarity. 'That can makes' is incorrect: 'makes' should be 'make' if 'can' is kept, but better is 'that fit'. 'My feet fits' has subject-verb disagreement; 'feet' is plural so use 'fit'. 'On her table' is irrelevant and incorrect; remove it. Remove filler 'Umm'. Suggestions: ensure subject-verb agreement, use correct verb forms after modal verbs (e.g., 'can make'), and remove unrelated phrases.