Shoes— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be clearer and more natural: start with a direct topic sentence (Yes/No + frequency), avoid unclear words ('stole' is wrong here), correct collocations and phrasing, and give one or two brief specific details. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: I don't buy shoes very often — maybe once or twice a year. Mostly I borrow my mom's shoes because we happen to have the same size, so I usually have enough pairs and rarely need to shop.

Sugerencia: Give a clear topic sentence and support it with reasons using linking words. Fix grammar (I prefer going to shops, I don't want to waste money), and avoid repetition. Mention a specific example or situation.

Ejemplo: No, I haven't bought shoes online because I prefer trying them on in shops to check the fit. For example, last month I tried three pairs in a store to make sure they were comfortable before deciding.

Sugerencia: Answer directly with an approximate amount or frequency, use clear currency and numbers, and explain why you spend that much or avoid spending. Use linking words and correct word choice (flexible, comfortable, expensive).

Ejemplo: I usually spend very little on shoes because I rarely buy them — when I do, I prefer spending around $50–$80 on a comfortable, flexible pair. Expensive branded shoes often cost much more, so I avoid them.

Sugerencia: Give a clear preference or balanced answer and explain with specific reasons. Use coherent linking words (because, so, therefore) and correct phrasing (I can't choose, I look for a balance, easy to move, protect my feet). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

Ejemplo: I can't choose one — I try to find a balance between style and comfort because I want shoes that look good but are also easy to walk in. Therefore I usually choose shoes with a simple design and cushioned soles.

× I rarely buy shoes and I often kind of stole my mom's shoes because we have the same size of football.

✓ I rarely buy shoes and I often kind of steal my mom's shoes because we have the same size of foot.

The student used 'stole' (past) while meaning a habitual action, and 'football' is incorrect for 'foot'. Change to present simple 'steal' for habitual action and correct noun to 'foot'. Use 'kind of' sparingly; consider 'sometimes' for clarity.

× So I don't buy usually but I have many to wear.

✓ So I don't usually buy shoes, but I have many to wear.

Adverb placement: 'usually' should come before the main verb 'buy'. Also add 'shoes' after 'buy' for clarity and use a comma before 'but' to connect two clauses properly.

× No because I prefer going to shop and actually taking them because I need I don't want to waste my money and try.

✓ No, because I prefer going to the shop and trying them on since I don't want to waste my money.

Use 'the shop' for specific location and 'try them on' is the correct verb phrase. Remove redundant 'because I need'. Connect reasons with 'since' and adjust verb forms: 'prefer going' is fine, 'trying' fits as gerund after 'prefer' when specifying the action.

× I'm always try try to find comfortable shoes to wear.

✓ I always try to find comfortable shoes to wear.

Do not combine 'I'm' with bare infinitive 'try'. Use simple present 'I always try' to express habitual action. Remove duplicated 'try'.

× I don't really buy shoes because the shoes that contains flexibility and also comfortable are more than like 110 thousand.

✓ I don't really buy shoes because shoes that are flexible and comfortable cost more than 110 thousand.

Use 'shoes that are' to link adjectives properly and 'cost' for price. 'Contains' is incorrect; quantifier 'more than like' is informal—use 'more than 110 thousand'. Remove 'the' before 'shoes' for general reference.

× Yeah. So it's kind of a big budget.

✓ So it's kind of a big expense.

'Budget' is not the right noun here; 'expense' or 'a big amount' fits better. Keep sentence concise and connected to previous statement.

× I can not choose one of them, I always try to find them like middle between my taste but also call like easy to move and like my fit will be protected.

✓ I cannot choose one of them; I always try to find something in the middle that fits my taste but is also easy to move in and keeps my feet protected.

Use 'cannot' as one word. Replace 'them' with 'something' and restructure: 'in the middle' expresses compromise. 'Call like' is incorrect; use 'that is'. 'My fit will be protected' is unnatural; use 'keeps my feet protected'. Adjust pronouns and noun phrases for clarity and correctness.