Library— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Câu trả lời của bạn khá đầy đủ nhưng có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và câu hơi dài, gây khó hiểu. Bạn nên chia câu thành các câu ngắn hơn, sử dụng từ nối hợp lý để làm cho câu trả lời tự nhiên và mạch lạc hơn. Ngoài ra, tránh lặp từ và chú ý phát âm để tăng tính hiệu quả.

Ejemplo: I don't go to the library very often because it is usually noisy, especially with many elementary kids around. Therefore, I prefer to study at home where I can concentrate better and work more efficiently.

Sugerencia: Bạn đã trả lời đúng trọng tâm câu hỏi và có sử dụng từ nối nhưng có lỗi lặp từ "I I" và câu hơi dài. Bạn nên chú ý phát âm rõ ràng, tránh lặp từ và có thể thêm một câu mở rộng để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

Ejemplo: Although I don't visit the library often, I sometimes go there to borrow textbooks or research materials. Additionally, I help my teacher by printing documents when needed.

Sugerencia: Câu trả lời có ý tưởng tốt nhưng có lỗi ngữ pháp (thời thì không nhất quán), câu dài và lặp từ "more more". Bạn nên sử dụng thì quá khứ đơn cho các sự kiện trong quá khứ, chia câu ngắn hơn và tránh lặp từ để câu trả lời tự nhiên và chính xác hơn.

Ejemplo: When I was a child, my school didn't have a library, and my parents didn't allow me to visit public libraries because they were worried about my safety. So, I didn't visit any library until I reached middle school. Fortunately, my middle school built a library, and since then, I have been visiting it more frequently.

Sugerencia: Bạn trả lời khá rõ ràng nhưng câu hơi dài và thiếu dấu phẩy để ngắt câu. Bạn nên chia câu thành các phần ngắn hơn, sử dụng dấu câu hợp lý và thêm từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

Ejemplo: I live in Vietnam, and although my school is an international one, there aren't many Chinese kids attending it. From what I know, Chinese kids prefer to study at home, just like me. However, they occasionally visit the library to borrow resources.

× For me, I don't go to a library very often because in my school elementary kids are also allowed in libraries that most of the time but would be very loud and I couldn't concentrate on my work.

✓ For me, I don't go to the library very often because in my school, elementary kids are also allowed in the libraries, and most of the time it is very loud, so I couldn't concentrate on my work.

The preposition 'to a library' should be 'to the library' because it refers to a specific place known to the speaker and listener. Also, 'allowed in libraries that most of the time but would be very loud' is incorrect; it should be 'allowed in the libraries, and most of the time it is very loud' to correctly connect ideas and use prepositions.

× Because of that I decided to self study at home and that allows me to to focus more and I would be able to work more efficiently.

✓ Because of that, I decided to self-study at home, and that allows me to focus more, and I am able to work more efficiently.

The phrase 'self study' should be hyphenated as 'self-study' when used as a verb. Also, 'to to focus' has a repeated 'to' which is incorrect. The modal 'would be able to' is changed to 'am able to' to match the present tense context.

× However, occasionally I still go there to borrow resources, just as textbooks or research materials.

✓ However, occasionally I still go there to borrow resources, such as textbooks or research materials.

The phrase 'just as' is incorrect here; the correct phrase is 'such as' when giving examples.

× I I also run errands for my teacher in there as well, such as printing documents.

✓ I also run errands for my teacher there as well, such as printing documents.

The repeated pronoun 'I I' is a typographical error and should be corrected to a single 'I'. Also, 'in there' is better expressed as 'there' in this context.

× When I was a kid, my school didn't have a library, so I don't have access to 1, and my parents won't allow me to visit public libraries as they were concerned for my safety.

✓ When I was a kid, my school didn't have a library, so I didn't have access to one, and my parents wouldn't allow me to visit public libraries as they were concerned for my safety.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. 'I don't have access to 1' should be 'I didn't have access to one' to maintain past tense consistency. Also, 'won't allow' should be 'wouldn't allow' to match past tense narrative.

× Therefore, it's safe to say that I haven't visited a library once until I reach middle school.

✓ Therefore, it's safe to say that I hadn't visited a library even once until I reached middle school.

The past perfect tense 'hadn't visited' is appropriate here to indicate an action that was not done before another past event ('reached middle school'). 'Reach' should be in past tense 'reached' to maintain consistency.

× And fortunately my middle school finally built a library and I and since then I visited more more frequently.

✓ And fortunately, my middle school finally built a library, and since then I have visited more frequently.

The phrase 'I and since then I visited more more frequently' is incorrect. It should be 'since then I have visited more frequently' using present perfect tense to indicate an action continuing from past to present. Also, remove the repeated word 'more'.

× I live in Vietnam and although my school is an International School, there aren't many Chinese kids attending it and from what I know Chinese kids prefer to self study at home more just like me, but occasionally they still visit the library to borrow resources as well.

✓ I live in Vietnam, and although my school is an International School, there aren't many Chinese kids attending it, and from what I know, Chinese kids prefer to self-study at home more, just like me, but occasionally they still visit the library to borrow resources as well.

The phrase 'self study' should be hyphenated as 'self-study' when used as a verb. Also, commas are added for clarity. No singular/plural error here but hyphenation is important.