Library— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Your answer is generally clear but could be more natural and concise. Avoid filler phrases like "you know" and improve grammar by saying "I prefer to go to the library." Also, try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often go to the library, especially before university exams. I prefer studying there because I get distracted easily at home, and the peaceful environment helps me focus better.

Sugerencia: Your answer contains some redundancy and unclear phrases like "externally complicated issues" and "Afterlife." Try to be more specific and use linking words to organize your ideas. Also, avoid repeating words like "assignment assignments."

Ejemplo: When I go to the library, I usually review my notes and complete assignments before exams. Sometimes, I also read self-development books to broaden my understanding of complex topics, which helps me become more knowledgeable.

Sugerencia: Your answer is somewhat disorganized and contains unnecessary details. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence and support it with relevant details. Avoid confusing phrases like "the whole story of my life."

Ejemplo: No, I did not often go to the library as a child. I usually studied at home because my family was small, and the environment was quiet enough for me to concentrate.

Sugerencia: Your answer is off-topic since the question is about Chinese kids, but you talk about Iranian kids. Also, avoid filler words like "you know" and incomplete sentences like "and, you know, ensure." Try to answer the question directly and clearly.

Ejemplo: I'm not sure about Chinese kids, but in Iran, many children often go to the library because it offers a quiet place to study, which helps them concentrate and improve their school performance.

× I prefer go to library and read my books and for example notes there because I get distracted easily and I it is really enjoyable to, you know, benefit from a kind of peaceful environment.

✓ I prefer going to the library and reading my books and, for example, notes there because I get distracted easily and it is really enjoyable to, you know, benefit from a kind of peaceful environment.

The verb 'prefer' should be followed by the gerund form (verb + -ing) when expressing general preferences. Therefore, 'prefer go' should be corrected to 'prefer going'. Also, 'library' needs the definite article 'the' because it refers to a specific place.

× I prefer go to library and read my books and for example notes there because I get distracted easily and I it is really enjoyable to, you know, benefit from a kind of peaceful environment.

✓ I prefer going to the library and reading my books and, for example, notes there because I get distracted easily and it is really enjoyable to, you know, benefit from a kind of peaceful environment.

The noun 'library' is a specific place here, so it requires the definite article 'the'. Omitting 'the' before 'library' is incorrect.

× I usually read my notes and do my assignment assignments, but sometimes I just go to the library in order to read some self development book in order to widen my horizons toward different kinds of externally complicated issues.

✓ I usually read my notes and do my assignments, but sometimes I just go to the library in order to read some self-development books to widen my horizons toward different kinds of externally complicated issues.

The word 'assignment assignments' is redundant; 'assignments' is the correct plural form. Also, 'self development book' should be plural 'self-development books' to match 'some' and to be grammatically correct.

× I usually read my notes and do my assignment assignments, but sometimes I just go to the library in order to read some self development book in order to widen my horizons toward different kinds of externally complicated issues.

✓ I usually read my notes and do my assignments, but sometimes I just go to the library in order to read some self-development books to widen my horizons on different kinds of externally complicated issues.

The preposition 'toward' is less appropriate here; 'on' is more commonly used with 'widen my horizons' to indicate the subject or area of knowledge.

× Afterlife.

✓ Afterlife helps me to be much more knowledgeable indeed.

The word 'Afterlife.' is a sentence fragment and lacks a verb and subject. It should be connected to the previous sentence or expanded to form a complete sentence.

× Actually. When I was a little child, I used to study at home because my immediate family comprises 3 members.

✓ Actually, when I was a little child, I used to study at home because my immediate family comprises 3 members.

The sentence has a punctuation issue rather than a grammar problem, but '3 members' is acceptable. No plural/singular error here.

× So it is not really, it was not really crowded place to study.

✓ So it is not really, it was not really a crowded place to study.

The noun 'crowded place' requires the indefinite article 'a' because it is a singular countable noun.

× Actually, I'm Iranian, so I can talk about the Iranian kids, but yes, they are really crazy about this this kind of places because it provides this opportunity for them to study in a kind of peaceful environment and increase their concentration so they can improve their scores at school and, you know, ensure.

✓ Actually, I'm Iranian, so I can talk about Iranian kids, but yes, they are really crazy about these kinds of places because they provide the opportunity for them to study in a kind of peaceful environment and increase their concentration so they can improve their scores at school and, you know, succeed.

The phrase 'this this kind of places' is incorrect; it should be 'these kinds of places' to agree in number. Also, 'it provides' should be 'they provide' to agree with the plural subject 'places'. The sentence ends abruptly with 'ensure' which is incomplete; 'succeed' fits better here.