Singing— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and remove filler words (uh). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Vary vocabulary (e.g., therapeutic, comforting) and avoid repetition.

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy singing, although I don't consider myself good at it. For example, I often sing along in the shower or when I'm feeling sad because singing helps me relax and lift my mood.

Sugerencia: Provide a clear, structured response and avoid repeating phrases. Explain briefly why you never learned and give a specific example or consequence. Use linking words (so, because) and correct grammar (learn vs learnt, voice note).

Ejemplo: No, I have never learned formal singing. Because I received negative comments about my voice when I was young, I lost confidence and even avoided listening to my voice notes, so I never pursued lessons.

Sugerencia: Make the answer more fluent and avoid repetition. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give a specific reason and one detail about how you would express your feelings. Use linking words (because, so) and more natural phrasing.

Ejemplo: I would like to sing for my mother because she has supported me throughout my life. For instance, I would write a heartfelt song about her sacrifices and perform it to show my gratitude.

Sugerencia: This answer is strong but could be tightened. Begin with a direct answer, support with a concise reason and a specific personal example. Use linking words for coherence and avoid absolute phrases like 'I can guarantee'.

Ejemplo: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because it helps people process emotions. For example, when I feel sad I listen to songs that relate to my situation and they usually lift my mood within minutes.

Sugerencia: Remove hesitations and correct small errors (e.g., 'I do like listening to others singing' -> 'I enjoy listening to other people sing'). Structure with topic sentence, contrasting example, and linking words (however, but). Be specific about what you enjoy in live performances.

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy listening to other people sing, but only when they have a pleasant voice. For instance, I dislike noisy shower singing from a roommate, yet I love live concerts because the atmosphere and the artist's skill make the performance enjoyable.

Sugerencia: Provide a concise, well-structured answer: state when you took the class, what you learned, and one brief supporting detail. Avoid informal fillers (you know) and repetition. Use past tense consistently.

Ejemplo: Yes, I took a singing class in primary school to explore my talents. During that time I realised I struggled to stay in tune and often disrupted the choir, so I decided singing wasn't for me.

× I do like singing, however I cannot sing uh, so I like listening to music instead.

✓ I do like singing; however, I cannot sing, so I like listening to music instead.

Run-on and punctuation: use a semicolon or period before 'however' and add commas to separate clauses. This improves sentence flow and clarity.

× And I'd sing along in the shower and also sing along when I'm sad.

✓ I also sing along in the shower and when I'm sad.

Tense consistency: student uses 'I'd' (would) which changes meaning. Use simple present 'sing' to match habitual actions.

× I think singing is really therapeutic, especially if you listen to a song that relates to you at that time in your life.

✓ I think singing is really therapeutic, especially when you listen to a song that relates to what you are going through at that time in your life.

Clarity: replace 'if' with 'when' for typical situations and add 'what you are going through' to clearly reference experiences; tense remains present progressive for ongoing experience.

× No, I've never learnt how to sing.

✓ No, I've never learned how to sing.

Spelling variant: 'learnt' is British English and acceptable, but 'learned' is more common in other varieties. Keep present perfect 'have never learned' for experience up to now.

× Reason being I've never really had a good voice.

✓ The reason is that I've never really had a good singing voice.

Incomplete clause: start with 'The reason is that' and specify 'singing voice' for clarity; keep present perfect 'I've never had' to indicate past to present.

× I used to be told that when I was growing up, when I was trying to sing, I used to be told that oh you Can't Sing, oh oh your voice is so hoisty and you don't sound good when you're singing.

✓ I was told when I was growing up and trying to sing, 'Oh, you can't sing; your voice is so hoarse, and you don't sound good when you sing.'

Redundancy and tense: remove repeated 'used to be told'. Use past simple 'was told'. Fix capitalization and punctuation for quoted speech. Replace 'hoisty' with likely intended 'hoarse'. Use base verb 'sing' after 'when you'.

× That even resulted when WhatsApp came, I started using VNS.

✓ When WhatsApp arrived and I started using voice notes, it made me more aware of my voice.

Awkward structure and unclear abbreviation: replace 'VNS' with 'voice notes' and rephrase to show cause-effect; use past simple 'arrived' and 'started'.

× When I would listen to my own voice note, I would I didn't like my voice, so that's why I didn't.

✓ When I listened to my own voice notes, I didn't like my voice, so I stopped.

Remove incorrect conditional 'would' and extra words. Use simple past 'listened' and 'didn't like'. Replace vague 'didn't' with 'stopped' to clarify the action.

× I think if there's someone I would like to to write a song and sing for is my is my mom.

✓ I think the person I would like to write a song for and sing to is my mom.

Word order and repetition: remove duplicate 'to' and 'is my'. Place 'for' and 'to' correctly: 'write a song for' and 'sing to'.

× She has done a lot for me in life and I will write.

✓ She has done a lot for me in life, and I would like to write one.

Ambiguity: 'I will write' is abrupt; use 'would like to write one' to match desire and politeness. Add comma.

× I would like to write a song dedicated to her and sing it for the whole world to hear how much praises I want to sing for my mom.

✓ I would like to write a song dedicated to her and sing it for the whole world to hear how much I want to praise my mom.

Awkward phrase 'how much praises I want to sing' — use 'how much I want to praise' for correct verb and noun usage and clearer meaning.

× As I mentioned earlier, I think singing is therapeutic, especially if you are listening to music that relates to what you are going through in your life at that time.

✓ As I mentioned earlier, I think singing is therapeutic, especially when you listen to music that relates to what you are going through at that time in your life.

Replace 'if you are listening' with 'when you listen' for general habitual situation and simplify progressive tense to simple present for repeated events.

× So yes, I do believe that singing can bring happiness to people.

✓ So yes, I believe that singing can bring happiness to people.

Both forms acceptable; 'I believe' is more natural than 'I do believe' in this context. Use simple present for general truths.

× When I'm sad, I listen to music and I can guarantee that it changes my entire mood.

✓ When I'm sad, I listen to music, and I can guarantee that it changes my entire mood.

Add comma before conjunction for readability. Tenses are appropriate.

× Yes I do Li. I do like to listen to other singing, but obviously if they have a nice voice.

✓ Yes, I do. I like to listen to others singing, but only if they have a nice voice.

Remove 'Li' (likely filler or name). Use 'others singing' or 'other people sing' and complete the conditional with 'only if' for clarity.

× I used to have a roommate used to sing in the shower.

✓ I used to have a roommate who sang in the shower.

Remove duplicate 'used to'. Use relative clause 'who sang' or 'who used to sing' to show habitual past action.

× She used to be so loud and her voice didn't sound great so I didn't like that.

✓ She used to be so loud, and her voice didn't sound great, so I didn't like it.

Replace 'that' with 'it' referring to her singing. Add commas for clause separation.

× But if I attend live concerts of artists that I like, I do like to listen to them sing my favorite songs.

✓ But if I attend live concerts by artists I like, I enjoy listening to them sing my favorite songs.

Use 'by' for artists who perform and replace repetitive 'do like' with 'enjoy' for natural phrasing.

× Yes, I've taken a singing class in primary school because at that time we were all trying to explore our talents.

✓ Yes, I took a singing class in primary school because at that time we were all trying to explore our talents.

Use simple past 'took' with a specific time 'in primary school' rather than present perfect.

× And I think that's when I actually discovered that I Can't Sing because I just used to make the group, you know, go out of chorus or something like that.

✓ And I think that's when I actually discovered that I couldn't sing because I used to make the group go out of chorus.

Use past tense 'couldn't' to match past discovery. Remove filler 'you know' and extra 'or something like that' for concision.

× So I, I discovered then I didn't like to sing.

✓ So I discovered then that I didn't like singing.

Combine fragments into one sentence and use gerund 'singing' after 'like' for natural expression.