Singing— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 문장 구조와 문법 오류를 고쳐 자연스럽고 간결하게 말하세요. 도입 문장으로 직접 대답한 뒤 이유를 한두 문장으로 구체적으로 설명하고 불필요한 반복을 피하세요. 예: 'I'm not a big fan of singing because I'm not confident in my voice'라는 주제문을 사용하고, 이어서 'I prefer listening to music, especially hip hop and idol groups, because I enjoy the production and vocals'처럼 구체적인 이유와 예를 덧붙이세요.

Ejemplo: I'm not a big fan of singing because I'm not confident in my voice. I prefer listening to music, especially hip hop and idol groups, because I enjoy their production and vocal styles.

Sugerencia: 과거 경험을 말할 때는 간결한 주제문 뒤에 구체적인 세부사항(언제, 어디서, 무엇을 배웠는지)을 체계적으로 제시하세요. 또한 문법(예: 'learned', 'couldn't sing well')과 어휘 사용을 정확히 하세요.

Ejemplo: Yes, I learned some singing when I was in primary school as a member of the school choir. My music teacher taught us how to project our voices clearly, although I still couldn't sing very well.

Sugerencia: 직접적인 답변으로 시작한 뒤 이유와 감정을 구체적으로 설명하세요. 'appreciate'는 동사로 사용하는 문장에서 어순과 형태를 정확히 하세요(예: 'show my appreciation'). 또한 문장을 2~3개로 유지하고 연결어를 사용해 흐름을 자연스럽게 만드세요.

Ejemplo: I would sing for my mother because she is supportive and would understand my poor singing ability. I would like to show my love and show my appreciation by singing a touching song for her.

Sugerencia: 의견은 분명히 밝히되 이유를 명확하고 자연스럽게 설명하세요. 표현을 정확하게 고쳐 의미 전달을 분명히 하세요(예: 'music has the power to lift people's spirits and boost their mood'). 예시를 하나로 통일하고 불필요한 반복을 제거하세요.

Ejemplo: Definitely. I think music has the power to lift people's spirits and boost their mood. For example, when I hear a child's clear singing voice I feel sentimental and it makes me smile.

Sugerencia: 문법과 어휘 선택을 교정하고 문장을 간결하게 만드세요. 'I'm really into'를 사용하고, 음악 장르와 그 이유를 명확히 하세요. 알 수 없는 단어('kambalas')는 피하거나 정확한 단어로 바꾸세요.

Ejemplo: Yes, absolutely. I'm really into listening to music, especially hip hop and idol music, because they make me feel energized. I also enjoy calm acoustic songs that help me relax and feel motivated.

Sugerencia: 부정문으로 시작한 뒤 이유와 의지를 자연스럽게 연결하세요. 'since I became an adult'보다는 간단히 'as an adult'를 사용하는 것이 자연스럽습니다. 목적(기술 향상)을 분명히 말하고 의지를 표현하세요.

Ejemplo: No, I haven't taken any singing classes as an adult. I'm not very confident in my singing, but I'd like to try a class to improve my skills with professional guidance.

× Well to be honest I'm not that big fan of singing because I'm not good at it, so I prefer to listening to music rather than singing by myself.

✓ Well, to be honest I'm not that big a fan of singing because I'm not good at it, so I prefer listening to music rather than singing myself.

Use 'a' with the expression 'not that big a fan' (article error). Remove the unnecessary 'to' before 'listening' and the redundant 'by' before 'myself'. Suggestions: insert 'a' after 'big', use 'prefer listening' (verb + -ing), and use 'singing myself' or 'singing on my own'.

× I enjoy.

✓ I enjoy it.

The verb 'enjoy' requires an object in this context (sentence structure/subject-verb agreement issue). Add 'it' to complete the verb's object. Alternatively, specify what you enjoy (e.g., 'I enjoy listening to music').

× Yes, I have. Back when I was a child, I was a member of school choir in a primary school.

✓ Yes, I have. Back when I was a child, I was a member of the school choir at my primary school.

Missing definite article 'the' before 'school choir' and preposition choice 'at' for location (article and preposition issues). Use 'the school choir' and 'at my primary school' for natural past-tense description.

× So the teacher of the music class taught me how to voice clearly and beautifully.

✓ So the music teacher taught me how to project my voice clearly and beautifully.

Awkward phrasing 'teacher of the music class' and incorrect verb 'voice' used alone. Use 'music teacher' and verb phrase 'project my voice' for correct preposition/verb usage and clarity.

× However, I couldn't sound some.

✓ However, I couldn't sing well.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. Replace with 'sing well' to convey inability to produce good sound. This fixes sentence structure and lexical choice.

× Well, I don't think that frequently, but if I have to choose one, that would be my mom because she will understand my poor singing skills and I also want to show my love and appreciate to her by singing some touching songs.

✓ Well, I don't think about it frequently, but if I had to choose someone, it would be my mom because she understands my poor singing skills and I also want to show my love and appreciation to her by singing some touching songs.

Multiple issues: missing object after 'think', conditional tense should be 'had to choose' and 'someone' as object, 'would' to 'it would be' for clarity, tense consistency (present 'understands'), and wrong noun 'appreciate' should be 'appreciation'. Suggestions: add 'about it', use conditional 'had to choose', and use 'appreciation'.

× Definitely. I believe music has a power to leave people's spirit and boost someone moods.

✓ Definitely. I believe music has the power to lift people's spirits and boost someone's mood.

Use 'the power' (article), verb choice 'lift' is more natural than 'leave', plural 'spirits' and singular possessive 'someone's mood' required. Also 'boost someone's mood' is idiomatic. Fix articles and noun plurals.

× Whenever I listen to some children's clear voice, I feel very sentimental and smile.

✓ Whenever I hear a child's clear voice, I feel very sentimental and smile.

Use 'hear' rather than 'listen to' when referring to a sound occurring; 'some children's clear voice' is incorrect — choose 'a child's clear voice' or 'children's clear voices'. This fixes noun number and sentence structure.

× So I think that is.

✓ So I think that is true.

Sentence is incomplete and lacks an object or complement. Add 'true' to complete the thought and agree with the subject.

× Yes absolutely, I really into tuning tune into music especially I love hip hop and idol music that makes me feel energized.

✓ Yes, absolutely. I really enjoy tuning into music, especially hip hop and idol music that make me feel energized.

Missing main verb after 'really' — use 'really enjoy'. Remove duplicate 'tuning tune'. Use 'tuning into music' (verb + -ing) and make 'music' plural agreement with 'make' for relative clause.

× Also I love some kambalas that makes me feel motivated and calm.

✓ Also I love some ballads that make me feel motivated and calm.

Likely wrong word 'kambalas' (typo); replace with 'ballads' or appropriate genre. Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'ballads that make'. Provide suggestion to choose correct vocabulary and check spelling.

× No, I haven't since I became an adult.

✓ No, I haven't since I became an adult.

This sentence is acceptable but could be clearer as 'No, I haven't since I became an adult.' No grammatical change needed; it's correctly using the present perfect with a past time clause. (Provided for completeness.)

× I'm not very confident about singing, but given a chance I want to try it because I want to improve my singing skills by some professional support.

✓ I'm not very confident about singing, but given the chance I would like to try it because I want to improve my singing skills with some professional support.

Use 'given the chance' (idiomatic), modal 'would like' is more polite and conditional than 'want', and preposition 'with' is better than 'by' for 'professional support'. Suggestions: use modal 'would like' and 'with professional support'.