Singing— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 回答内容正面但表达不够简洁和准确，存在语法错误和用词不当（如“it bring me the feelings of happiness”、“they send a very interesting activity”）。应直接给出主题句，然后用一两句具体细节支持，用连接词使句子流畅，注意动词时态和单复数一致。练习用更自然的短句代替冗长表达。

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax and makes me feel happy. For example, I often go to karaoke with my friends, and we have a great time singing together and sharing happy moments.

Sugerencia: 回答包含信息但语法混乱（如“school period”、“but I am not stay at home”、“sometimes it failed”）。建议先用一句话回答是否学过，再说明学习经历和练习情况，提供具体细节并使用连接词。注意时态和主谓一致。

Ejemplo: Yes, I have. I took singing lessons at school when I was a student, although I wouldn't call myself very good. I practice regularly and try to improve, but sometimes I still make mistakes.

Sugerencia: 回答内容明确但有重复和不自然表达（如“sing the birthday songs”、“sing the happiness song”、“sing for my family about family life”）。建议先给主题句，然后用一两句具体场景说明，避免重复并用更自然的词汇。

Ejemplo: I usually sing for my friends, especially at birthday parties when I sing the birthday song for them. I also enjoy singing for my family at home to create a warm, joyful atmosphere.

Sugerencia: 观点明确但表达冗长且有语法错误（如“when someone is on someone's birthday parties”、“they have the so many friends”）。建议先直接回答观点，再用一至两句具体原因或例子支持，使用连接词使逻辑更清晰。

Ejemplo: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness. For instance, at birthday parties people sing together, which creates a sense of belonging and makes the birthday person feel loved.

Sugerencia: 回答积极但表达不自然且重复（如“and I I think”、“accent and tongue are very of good quality”）。建议先简单回答，再用具体例子说明为什么喜欢，注意用词准确（e.g. voice, pronunciation）并避免重复。

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy listening to others sing. Some of my friends have voices close to professional singers, and I like their clear pronunciation and expressive tone.

Sugerencia: 回答直接但口语犹豫较多且表达不准确（如“it is then made much sense”、“I always lost my tongue”）。建议先明确回答是否上过课程，然后说明替代方式和遇到的困难，使用自然表达描述问题。

Ejemplo: No, I haven't taken formal singing classes. Instead, I practice at karaoke with friends and family, but I sometimes struggle with pronunciation and feel embarrassed when I make mistakes.

× Why yes, I do, because I think singing can make me relax and it bring me the feelings of happiness.

✓ Yes, I do, because I think singing can make me relax and bring me feelings of happiness.

连词和句子结构不当：原句中用“and”连接两个谓语时，第二个谓语“bring”应与第一部分保持时态和主语一致；此外多余的“the”在“feelings of happiness”前不必要。建议将“and it bring me the feelings of happiness”改为“bring me feelings of happiness”。

× And I often go to sing with my friends, they send a very interesting activity and we can get together to share happiness.

✓ I often go singing with my friends; they organize very interesting activities and we can get together to share happiness.

介词和动词搭配错误：应使用“go singing”表示去唱歌，原文“send a very interesting activity”用词错误，应该是“organize activities”。此外复合句应使用分号或连词分开句子。建议使用固定搭配并改正动词。

× Yes I have. I learned to sing in my school period and but I am not stay at home.

✓ Yes, I have. I learned to sing during my school years, but I don't practice only at home.

时态与动词形式错误：原句“school period”不地道，改为“during my school years”；“I am not stay at home”语法混乱，应使用现在时否定“don't practice only at home”来表达不一直待在家里。建议使用正确的时态和习惯搭配。

× I'm not quite good at singing.

✓ I'm not very good at singing.

副词选择问题：“quite good”在某些语境下可用，但说法更自然的是“not very good”。建议使用更常见的副词“very”。

× I just practice a lot and try to do my best but sometimes it failed.

✓ I just practiced a lot and tried to do my best, but sometimes I failed.

时态不一致：句中描述过去的努力应全部使用过去时，故“practice”应为“practiced”，“try”应为“tried”。建议保持时态一致。

× Who do you want to sing for?

✓ Whom do you want to sing for? (口语中也可说 Who do you want to sing for?)

代词格问题：正式书面语中应使用宾格“whom”，但在口语中“who”常被接受。建议在正式场合使用“whom”。

× I want to sing for my friends like when they are birthdays I will sing the birthday songs for them and sometimes I will go to the karaoke to sing the happiness song for my friends.

✓ I want to sing for my friends. For example, on their birthdays I will sing birthday songs for them, and sometimes I go to karaoke to sing happy songs for my friends.

介词和短语结构错误：原句“when they are birthdays”不正确，应为“on their birthdays”；“go to the karaoke”更自然为“go to karaoke”；“happiness song”应为“happy songs”。建议使用正确的介词短语和形容词形式。

× I also want to sing for my family about family life.

✓ I also want to sing for my family about family life.

句子结构冗余但语法上可接受：若要更自然可改为“I also want to sing songs about family life for my family.” 建议把“about family life”放在“sing songs”后面以更清晰表达。

× Yes, I do like when someone is on someone's birthday parties, uh, people will also sing the birthday song for the people and they feel very happy because they have the so many friends to celebrate the same festival for them.

✓ Yes, I do. For example, at someone's birthday party, people sing the birthday song and feel very happy because they have many friends celebrating with them.

代词和冠词使用混乱：原句重复使用“someone/ someone's/ the people”等导致不清楚，且“birthday parties”应为单数“birthday party”对应场景；“the so many friends”冠词和词序错误，应为“many friends”。建议减少代词重复并使用正确冠词与词序。

× I remember some of my friends sing very well and just like the professional singer and I I think that their accent and tongue are very of good quality and I think is very happy to listen to the songs they sing.

✓ I remember some of my friends sing very well, just like professional singers. I think their pronunciation and tone are of very good quality, and it's very enjoyable to listen to the songs they sing.

形容词、副词和词汇搭配错误：原句“the professional singer”应作复数“professional singers”；“accent and tongue”用词不当，改为“pronunciation and tone”更合适；“very of good quality”词序错误，改为“of very good quality”；“I think is very happy”缺主语，应为“it's very enjoyable”。建议使用恰当名词和固定搭配。

× No, I, I haven't, but I sometimes I will go to the karaoke with my friends or family and I will practice how to sing there.

✓ No, I haven't, but sometimes I go to karaoke with my friends or family and practice singing there.

情态和句子冗余：重复使用“I will”显得不自然，表示习惯动作应使用一般现在时“go”及动名词“practice singing”。建议去掉多余的情态动词，使用正确时态和动名词。

× But umm, it is then made much sense because I always lost my tongue.

✓ But it doesn't make much sense because I always lose my words (or: my tongue gets tied).

句子结构和词汇搭配错误：“it is then made much sense”语序和被动不当，应为“it doesn't make much sense”；“lost my tongue”不地道，常用表达为“lose my words”或“my tongue gets tied”。建议使用更自然的短语并保持否定形式。