Memory— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 回答较自然，但存在语法和表达不准确（如“it is easily to remember”、“Like gossipy”）且句子衔接可更流畅。建议：1) 开头直接给出主题句并简明回答（例如："Generally no, but..."）；2) 修正语法错误（use “easy to remember”）；3) 用连接词（however, although, for example）使句子更连贯；4) 控制长度不超过5句并提供具体例子。示例句型也要更正式一些。

Ejemplo: Generally, I'm not very good at memorising abstract information like formulas, although I can easily remember things that interest me. For example, I often recall details about my friends, such as birthdays or personal stories, much more quickly than I remember scientific facts.

Sugerencia: 内容具体且真实，但时态和表达需改进（应为“last winter”、“told me today was her birthday”）。建议：1) 开门见山回答并用过去时描述事件；2) 用连接词（so, then）增强叙述顺序；3) 补充一句反思或结果以丰富内容。

Ejemplo: Yes, last winter I forgot my mother's birthday. She actually called to remind me, so I felt really embarrassed and immediately ordered a large bouquet of flowers online to apologise.

Sugerencia: 回答覆盖多项内容但有重复的连接词（two 'moreover'）和语法问题（"associate with"用法不当）。建议：1) 开始用一句主题句概括主要类别；2) 用不同的连接词（for example, also）列举具体细节；3) 改正搭配错误（"affect my final exam performance"）；4) 保持句子精简。

Ejemplo: I need to remember several practical things every day. For example, I keep PIN numbers for my bank accounts, check my class schedule so I bring the right textbooks, and track assignment deadlines because they can affect my final exam performance.

Sugerencia: 回答表达不够流畅，存在语法和重复（"On Firstly", duplicate 'and', incomplete final clause）。建议：1) 使用正确的序列词（Firstly/First）并避免重复；2) 用并列结构列出方法并用连接词（also, additionally）衔接；3) 完成句子并给出具体例子（which apps, where you stick notes）；4) 控制在最多5句内。

Ejemplo: First, I enter important events into my electronic calendar and set alarms on my phone. I also write quick reminders on sticky notes and put them on my desk or laptop so I see them frequently.

× However, it is easily to remember what I'm interested.

✓ However, it is easy to remember what I'm interested in.

句子中使用了形容词/副词的错误形式。原句用到副词“easily”但应使用形容词“easy”来描述“to remember”这一情况；另外短语“interested”后通常接介词“in”。建议把“easily”改为“easy”，并在“interested”后加“in”。（语法点：形容词 vs 副词；固定搭配“be interested in”）

× Like gossipy and my friend's birthday.

✓ For example, gossip and my friend's birthday.

句子结构不完整，使用了片段短语“Like gossipy and...”且“gossipy”是形容词，语境需要名词。建议用完整短语并把“gossipy”换成名词“gossip”，开头用连接词如“For example”使句子完整。

× Oh yes, in last winter I forgot my mother's birthday and at that time my mother called me and told today was her birthday.

✓ Oh yes, last winter I forgot my mother's birthday, and at that time my mother called me and told me it was her birthday.

时态和从句结构有问题。应使用过去时“it was”而不是现在时“today was”，并在“told”后加宾语“me”。此外“in last winter”物主位置不正确，常说“last winter”。建议统一使用过去时态并补全宾语。

× I felt embarrassed and immediately ordered a big bunch of flowers online.

✓ I felt embarrassed and immediately ordered a large bouquet of flowers online.

虽然原句大体可懂，但用词更地道：用“bouquet”替代“bunch”更常见；“large”比“big”更自然。时态使用正确（过去时），这里只做词汇改进以符合习惯用法。解释：保持过去时，改用更合适的名词短语。

× Oh well, I'd like to say I need to remember pin numbers for different accounts.

✓ Oh well, I'd say I need to remember the PIN numbers for different accounts.

缩略表达更自然：用“I'd say”比“I'd like to say”更口语且更贴切。并且“PIN”作为缩写大写，前可加定冠词“the”来表泛指特定类别的编号。建议用“I'd say”并加定冠词和大写缩写。

× Moreover, I need to remember the class schedules which make sure I bring the right textbooks, and moreover I need to remember the assignment deadlines which associate with my final exam performance.

✓ Moreover, I need to remember the class schedules to make sure I bring the right textbooks, and I also need to remember the assignment deadlines that are associated with my final exam performance.

句中关系从句使用和连接词不当。原句用“which make sure”不合逻辑，应该用不定式“to make sure”表示目的；“which associate with”需改为被动或使用“that are associated with”。另外重复使用“moreover”显得冗余，改为“also”。建议把目的用不定式表达，并把“associate”改为被动结构。

× On Firstly, I like to write down my important things in the electronic calendar and and set alarm to remind me.

✓ Firstly, I like to write down important things in my electronic calendar and set alarms to remind me.

“On Firstly”结构错误，应直接用“Firstly”或“First”。此外双“and”重复，应删除一个；“set alarm”需用复数“alarms”或加不定冠词“an alarm”，并且“my important things in the electronic calendar”改为更自然的词序。建议简化为“Firstly, I like to write down important things in my electronic calendar and set alarms to remind me.”

× Moreover, I also write down the important things in the post it notes and.

✓ I also write down important things on Post-it notes.

原句结尾未完成且词序和介词使用不当。应使用介词“on”与“notes”搭配，并将“Post-it notes”作为固定名词短语，同时去掉多余的“the”和结尾多余的“and”。建议简洁表达为“I also write down important things on Post-it notes.”