Snacks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be careful with grammar (e.g., ‘buys’ should be ‘buy’) and avoid minor redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two supporting details using linking words. Keep it within 3–4 concise sentences and use more precise vocabulary (for example, ‘pastries’ or ‘sandwiches’ instead of ‘other light snacks’).

Ejemplo: I usually have a snack between 3:00 and 4:00 in the afternoon. Typically I buy pastries or a sandwich from a shop near my office, or I order something online because it’s more convenient.

Sugerencia: Good content and clear opinion. Improve naturalness by correcting small phrasing issues (e.g., ‘nutritious snacks’ -> ‘nutritious ones’) and add a linking word to connect ideas. You can also give a brief example or result to make it more specific.

Ejemplo: If I feel hungry, I think it’s fine to have a snack occasionally, especially nutritious ones like fruit or oatmeal cookies. These are better than processed chips because they provide vitamins and help keep my energy steady throughout the afternoon.

Sugerencia: Correct grammatical errors and repetition (e.g., ‘taste goods’ -> ‘tasty’, remove duplicated ‘were’). Use linking words (for example ‘however’ or ‘but’) to contrast past and present habits, and be specific about how your parents encouraged you (e.g., ‘they offered fruit instead’). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often ate fast food like burgers and drank soft drinks when I was young because they were tasty and easy to get after school. However, my parents later encouraged me to choose healthier options, for example by offering fruit and homemade snacks instead.

Sugerencia: Good idea but revise grammar and sentence structure: use contractions or simple present consistently (‘I’m fasting’), correct articles and prepositions (‘for a snack’), and combine short sentences for fluency. Mention one or two specific fruits to be more concrete.

Ejemplo: At the moment I’m fasting, so I only eat twice a day — breakfast at about 8:00 and lunch around 2:00. However, if I feel hungry between meals I usually have fruit, for example an apple or a banana.

× 'I often buys snacks such as biscuits, bread, or other light snacks from a shop near my office or in my house, and sometimes I order them online because it's convenient.'

✓ 'I often buy snacks such as biscuits, bread, or other light snacks from a shop near my office or at my house, and sometimes I order them online because it is convenient.'

'buys' is incorrect because the subject I requires the base form buy (subject-verb agreement). Also native preposition use is near my office or at my house (not in my house when referring to purchasing location). Suggestion: use I often buy and use at my house for clarity.'

× 'If I feel hungry, I think it's fine to have a snack occasionally, especially if it's nutritious snacks like fruit or oatmeal cookies.'

✓ 'If I feel hungry, I think it is fine to have a snack occasionally, especially if it is a nutritious snack like fruit or oatmeal cookies.'

'it's nutritious snacks' mixes singular contraction with plural noun. Use consistent singular or plural: 'it is a nutritious snack' or 'they are nutritious snacks'. Suggestion: match number between subject and noun and avoid contraction ambiguity.'

× 'These types of snacks are better than processed ones or chips because they provide vitamins and help keep my energy steady.'

✓ 'These types of snacks are better than processed ones or chips because they provide vitamins and help keep my energy levels steady.'

'energy steady' is missing a countable noun: energy levels is the common collocation. Suggestion: use 'energy levels' to convey stability of energy.'

× 'Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young, mostly fast foods like burgers and soft drinks, which I know was unhealthy.'

✓ 'Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young, mostly fast food like burgers and soft drinks, which I know was unhealthy.'

'fast foods' is awkward: 'fast food' as an uncountable noun is preferred. The rest is past tense consistent. Suggestion: use 'fast food' for general category.'

× 'I love them because they taste goods and we were were easy to get after school, but my parents later encouraged me to choose healthier options.'

✓ 'I loved them because they tasted good and they were easy to get after school, but my parents later encouraged me to choose healthier options.'

'taste goods' uses wrong adjective/adverb and form: 'tasted good' fits past tense. Also 'we were were easy to get' is ungrammatical and contains duplicate 'were'. Use 'they were easy to get'. Suggestion: change verbs and pronouns to match past context and correct adjective use.'

× 'Recently I don't eat snacks because I am in a fasting mode.'

✓ 'Recently I do not eat snacks because I am fasting.'

'in a fasting mode' is awkward; present continuous 'I am fasting' is natural. Use full form do not for formality. Suggestion: say 'I am fasting' or 'I am in a fast' depending on context.'

× 'I only eat twice a day. First is in the morning around 8:00 AM and the lunch is around 2:00 PM.'

✓ 'I only eat twice a day. The first is in the morning around 8:00 AM and lunch is around 2:00 PM.'

'First is' lacks a clear noun; use 'The first' and avoid 'the lunch' when referring generally: 'lunch' is sufficient. Suggestion: use articles appropriately and keep parallel structure.'

× 'But sometimes if I feel hungry I eat fruits in as a snack.'

✓ 'But sometimes if I feel hungry I eat fruit as a snack.'

'in as a snack' contains extra preposition in and wrong plural 'fruits'. Use uncountable 'fruit' for general reference and 'as a snack' without in. Suggestion: use 'eat fruit as a snack.'