Flowers— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Make the response more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct awkward phrasing (“gives you a coming vibe”), and add one specific detail using a linking word. Keep it under 5 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I love flowers. I often buy a bunch at the Sunday market because their scent relaxes me and brightens my home. For example, a small bouquet on my desk helps me focus when I study.

Sugerencia: Combine short sentences to sound more natural and add a specific detail about your sister to enrich the answer. Use linking words like ‘so’ or ‘and then’ to connect ideas.

Ejemplo: Yes, my sister loves flowers, so we usually pick some up together when we go out on Sundays. Afterwards we take them to our favorite cafe and enjoy coffee while admiring them.

Sugerencia: Correct grammar and awkward phrases, be specific about differences between current and past locations, and avoid repetition. Use one or two clear supporting details with linking words like ‘however’ or ‘in contrast’.

Ejemplo: There aren’t many flowers where I live now. However, in my hometown my mother used to grow several varieties of roses, so our old garden was always full of color and fragrance.

Sugerencia: Make the sentence structure more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give a specific example of when you take photos and why, using a linking word like ‘so’ or ‘because’.

Ejemplo: I don’t photograph flowers every day, but when I’m walking or traveling I often take pictures of them because they help me remember the places I visited, for example the wildflowers on a recent hiking trip.

Sugerencia: Avoid vague phrasing and combine ideas smoothly. State a clear general observation, then add a personal trend as a contrasting point with a linking word like ‘however’ or ‘these days’.

Ejemplo: In general, people in my country don’t often send flowers, however these days I send flowers more frequently to close friends and family for special occasions like birthdays or anniversaries.

× Whenever we go to a Sunday market, I ensure that we bring home some because it makes me feel relaxed and it gives you a coming vibe.

✓ Whenever we go to a Sunday market, I make sure that we bring home some because it makes me feel relaxed and it gives me a calming vibe.

The original used 'ensure' with a personal action and 'you' incorrectly. 'Ensure' is formal and not typical in this context; 'make sure' is more natural. 'You coming vibe' is ungrammatical and likely intended as 'calming vibe' referring to the speaker, so change 'you' to 'me' and 'coming' to 'calming'. This fixes verb usage and pronoun reference.

× Yes, I know someone who really loves flowers. It is my sister.

✓ Yes, I know someone who really loves flowers. She is my sister.

Using 'It is my sister' treats a person as 'it', which is incorrect. Replace with the pronoun 'She' to correctly refer to the sister.

× I really enjoy spending time with her and whenever we're going out on a Sunday, we ensure that we buy some flowers before heading to our favorite cafe.

✓ I really enjoy spending time with her and whenever we go out on a Sunday, we make sure that we buy some flowers before heading to our favorite cafe.

'Whenever we're going out' is grammatically acceptable but 'whenever we go out' is more natural for habitual actions. Also replace 'ensure' with 'make sure' for natural spoken English. These changes improve verb form and register.

× There is not much flowers and the place I currently live in, but in my hometown and in our old house my mom used to plant different kind of roses and she really loved those and they also grew fond, grew fondness.

✓ There are not many flowers in the place I currently live in, but in my hometown and in our old house my mom used to plant different kinds of roses; she really loved them and they inspired fond memories.

Use 'There are' with plural 'flowers' and 'many' rather than 'much'. 'Different kind' should be pluralized to 'different kinds' or 'different kinds of roses'. 'She really loved those' should be 'she really loved them'. The phrase 'they also grew fond, grew fondness' is ungrammatical; I suggested 'they inspired fond memories' to convey the intended meaning.

× It is not daily that I take photos of flowers, but whenever I see one while I'm walking or when I'm traveling, I ensure that I take photos of it because it keeps such a good memory of the places that I travel to.

✓ I don't take photos of flowers daily, but whenever I see one while I'm walking or traveling, I make sure to take a photo because it preserves a good memory of the places I visit.

'It is not daily that I take' is awkward; use 'I don't take photos of flowers daily'. 'Ensure that I take photos of it' is formal and slightly awkward; 'make sure to take a photo' is more natural. 'Keeps such a good memory' is unidiomatic; 'preserves a good memory' or 'creates a good memory' is better. Also use 'visit' instead of 'travel to' for concision.

× In my country, I don't think it's often a practice to send flowers to other people, but as I grow older I tend to send more flowers to people that are very close to me, especially if they are celebrating an occasion.

✓ In my country, I don't think it's common to send flowers to other people, but as I have grown older I tend to send more flowers to people who are very close to me, especially when they are celebrating an occasion.

'It's often a practice' is awkward; 'it's common' is more natural. For a change over time, use present perfect 'I have grown older' instead of simple present 'I grow older'. Use 'people who' (not 'that') when referring to people. 'If they are celebrating an occasion' is acceptable, but 'when they are celebrating an occasion' is more natural here.