Flowers— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Improve grammar and sentence clarity: use correct verb forms, pluralization and articles; avoid unclear phrases (e.g. “mind on weed”). Keep answers concise (max 5 sentences) and start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific reason with linking phrase. Use specific vocabulary (e.g. ‘roses’ not ‘the Rose’ unless specific).

Ejemplo: Yes, I love flowers, especially roses and sunflowers. I keep fresh flowers in my room because they brighten the space and create a pleasant atmosphere. For example, a vase of sunflowers on my desk lifts my mood and makes the room look more welcoming.

Sugerencia: Reduce hesitations and correct word choice: avoid filler words (umm) and use accurate names (avoid ‘almonds and Orleans’ unless you mean specific varieties). Start with a direct statement, then give one clear detail about how the person displays their interest, using a linking word (for example / because).

Ejemplo: Yes, my sister loves flowers. For example, she places vases of roses and sunflowers on the windowsill so everyone can see them, and she changes the water often to keep them fresh.

Sugerencia: Make content specific and correct vocabulary: use correct flower names and reduce errors (e.g. ‘roads’ → ‘roses’; clarify local names). Use one linking word to connect idea to consequence (so/therefore). Provide a concise example or detail about where flowers are found. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, many flowers grow near my home, such as roses, sunflowers and marigolds (mukhmali). Therefore, parks and roadside gardens often look colorful and attract both tourists and local visitors.

Sugerencia: Clarify motivation and correct grammar: use correct articles and verb forms, avoid repetitive phrases. State clearly whether you often take photos and give one brief reason with an example. Replace unclear clauses (e.g. ‘she loves dad’) with clear relation (she loves flowers).

Ejemplo: Yes, I often take photos of flowers. For example, when I see a red rose I photograph it to share with my sister because she loves flowers, and I keep those pictures as memories.

Sugerencia: Organize answer with a clear topic sentence and one supporting reason: explain occasions when flowers are sent and mention seasonality briefly. Use correct nouns and articles and avoid repetition. Use linking words like ‘because’ or ‘for example’.

Ejemplo: It depends on the occasion; people usually send flowers for weddings, festivals or as gifts rather than regularly. For example, roses are commonly given at marriage ceremonies and festivals to show respect and affection.

× Yes I do, especially the Rose and sunflower which makes my mind on weed and refresh.

✓ Yes, I do, especially roses and sunflowers, which clear my mind and refresh me.

The student used incorrect articles and singular/plural forms ('the Rose and sunflower' should be plural when speaking generally). Also 'makes my mind on weed and refresh' is awkward and ungrammatical; use 'which clear my mind and refresh me'. Use commas for clarity.

× I keeps flower in my room because it's attract a lot of people and makes good design of the wall.

✓ I keep flowers in my room because they attract a lot of people and make the wall look nice.

'Keeps' is incorrect for the subject 'I' (should be 'keep'). 'Flower' should be plural when generalizing. 'It's attract' is wrong; use plural pronoun 'they' with plural verb 'attract'. 'Makes good design of the wall' is awkward; 'make the wall look nice' is natural.

× Yeah, to be honest, my sister is, umm, big fan of flowers like rose and sunflowers, especially almonds and Orleans.

✓ Yeah, to be honest, my sister is a big fan of flowers like roses and sunflowers, especially marigolds and orchids.

Missing article 'a' before 'big fan'. Use plural 'roses'. 'Almonds and Orleans' seems to be wrong word choices; likely intended flower names such as 'marigolds and orchids'. Use correct nouns.

× She usually keeps keeps it in a place where we can see or absorb clearly, uh, in a brighter place so it attracts lots of people.

✓ She usually keeps them in a place where we can see them clearly, in a bright spot so they attract a lot of people.

Duplicate 'keeps keeps'. Use plural pronouns 'them' to match 'flowers'. 'Absorb clearly' is incorrect; use 'see them clearly'. 'Brighter place' -> 'bright spot'. Pronouns and verb agreement adjusted.

× I would say yes there are the different kinds of flowers like roads, sunflower and mukhmali and the rudunder that times of that kinds of flowers are quite popular and found everywhere.

✓ I would say yes; there are different kinds of flowers like roses, sunflowers, mukhmali and rudder (or local varieties) that are quite popular and found everywhere.

Remove unnecessary 'the'. 'Roads' is incorrect for 'roses'. 'That times of that kinds of flowers' is ungrammatical; simplify to 'that are quite popular'. Clarify unfamiliar flower names or use 'local varieties' if unsure.

× So it makes them some attraction for the tourist and domestic people also.

✓ So they are an attraction for tourists and local people as well.

'It makes them some attraction' is ungrammatical. Use plural subject 'they' (flowers) and correct noun forms 'tourists' and 'local people'.

× Definitely whenever I see a beautiful flowers just like an red rose then I always click a photo or pick one for to provide as a gift to my friends or my sisters because she loves dad.

✓ Definitely, whenever I see a beautiful flower, like a red rose, I always take a photo or pick one to give as a gift to my friends or my sister because she loves them.

'Beautiful flowers' should be singular 'a beautiful flower' when followed by 'like a red rose'. 'Click a photo' is informal but acceptable; 'take a photo' is more natural. 'Pick one for to provide' is wrong; use 'pick one to give'. Pronoun agreement: 'my sisters because she' inconsistent; use 'my sister because she loves them' or adjust context.

× It attracts a lot of people.

✓ They attract a lot of people.

Context refers to 'flowers' (plural), so use plural verb 'attract' and plural subject 'they'.

× So whenever I see a good flower or fresh flower I click and photo to keep send memory or make as an memory for a long period of time.

✓ So whenever I see a beautiful or fresh flower, I take a photo to keep as a memory for a long time.

'Click and photo' is wrong; use 'take a photo'. 'Keep send memory' and 'make as an memory' are ungrammatical; use 'keep as a memory' and 'for a long time'. Article 'an memory' should be 'a memory'.

× Actually it depends on uh situation because they usually provide a flower as an gifts or in occasion only.

✓ Actually it depends on the situation because they usually give flowers as gifts or only on special occasions.

Use 'the situation', not 'on uh situation'. 'Provide a flower as an gifts' has article and number errors: use 'give flowers as gifts'. 'In occasion' should be 'on special occasions'.

× So they don't provide regularly because the flower always grow up in a season.

✓ So they don't give them regularly because flowers only grow in certain seasons.

'Provide' is awkward; 'give' is better. 'Grow up in a season' is incorrect; use 'grow in certain seasons' or 'are seasonal'.

× Especially the Rose is provided in a occasion like when we are married, married, marriage purpose or in an festival as an symbol of respect and care.

✓ Especially roses are given on occasions like weddings or festivals as a symbol of respect and care.

Do not capitalize 'Rose' unnecessarily; use plural 'roses' for general statements. 'Provided in a occasion' wrong article—use 'on occasions like weddings'. 'Marriage purpose' is awkward; use 'weddings'. 'An festival' should be 'a festival'.