Flowers— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more accurate and fluent. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, use correct vocabulary (name the flower) and give one or two specific details. Keep to 2–4 sentences and use linking words if adding details.

Ejemplo: Yes, I love flowers, especially roses because they come in many colours like red, pink and yellow. For example, I often buy a bouquet of red roses for special occasions because they look elegant and smell nice.

Sugerencia: Organise your answer: give a clear topic sentence, then one or two supporting details with correct word choice and grammar. Avoid vague phrases and filler words. Use linking words (for example, because, so) correctly.

Ejemplo: Yes, my mother loves flowers, especially sunflowers. She enjoys them in summer because they brighten up the garden, and she often takes walks in the park to see them.

Sugerencia: Be specific and use correct vocabulary. Start with a direct answer, then explain with one or two clear details and correct nouns (e.g., ‘bouquets’, ‘park’). Avoid unclear phrases and excessive hesitations.

Ejemplo: Not many flowers grow near my house, so I usually visit the city park on Sundays to see and pick photos of flowers. At the moment I often take pictures of sunflowers and other seasonal blooms there.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and use correct vocabulary (names of flowers). Give a simple seasonal comparison with linking words (for example, in summer... while in spring...). Keep sentences concise and avoid repetition.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often photograph flowers, but the types change with the seasons. For example, in summer I take pictures of sunflowers, while in spring I prefer photographing tulips and cherry blossoms.

Sugerencia: Give a clear topic sentence and specific examples of occasions. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., ‘roses’, ‘gifts’, ‘funerals’ if relevant) and avoid hesitations. Provide one brief reason why people send flowers.

Ejemplo: Yes, people in my country often give flowers on occasions like Valentine’s Day, Christmas and birthdays. For instance, it is common to send roses on Valentine’s Day to show love, and families also send floral arrangements for celebrations or funerals.

× Yes, I like flowers, especially I like losses because it has many covers such as blue, light pink or yellow.

✓ Yes, I like flowers. Especially, I like roses because they have many colors such as blue, light pink, or yellow.

The student used 'losses' (wrong word) and 'covers' (incorrect noun) and mixed singular/plural agreement: 'it has' with plural 'roses'. Replace 'losses' with 'roses', 'covers' with 'colors', and use plural pronoun 'they' with 'have'. Also split into two sentences for clarity.

× Umm yes I know, uh, my mother likes flower, she likes sunflower, so it is the best season because she can take forever of now and she can enjoy going to the park.

✓ Umm yes, I know. My mother likes flowers; she likes sunflowers, so this is the best season because she can take care of them now and she can enjoy going to the park.

'flower' and 'sunflower' should be plural 'flowers' and 'sunflowers' to match general preference. 'It is the best season' is acceptable but better as 'this is the best season'. 'take forever of now' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'take care of them now'. Correct subject-verb agreement and replace incorrect phrase with 'take care of them'.

× Umm actually there is no flower so I can't take powder near my house.

✓ Umm actually there are no flowers, so I can't pick flowers near my house.

Use plural 'flowers' with 'there are'. 'take powder' is incorrect; likely 'pick flowers'. Correct the existential 'there are' for plural and replace wrong verb.

× So every Sunday I go to the park to take the powder of Robert Satya.

✓ So every Sunday I go to the park to pick the petals of roses.

The sentence contains wrong words: 'take the powder of Robert Satya' is unintelligible. Assuming meaning is collecting petals of roses. Use correct verb 'pick' and correct noun 'petals' and 'roses'. Also no article needed before plural 'petals of roses'.

× This in this season I usually take bottle of sunflower or uh I don't know name but some I take some.

✓ In this season I usually pick sunflowers or other flowers; sometimes I pick different kinds.

Original is incoherent: 'take bottle of sunflower' is wrong. Use correct verbs 'pick' and plural 'sunflowers' and simplify to 'other flowers' or 'different kinds'.

× Yes I do, but the flowers depends on the season for for example I usually take Porter or sunflower in summer.

✓ Yes I do, but the flowers depend on the season. For example, I usually take photos of poppies or sunflowers in summer.

'flowers depends' should be 'flowers depend' to match plural subject. 'take Porter' unclear; likely 'take photos of poppies'. Added 'photos of' to match question about taking photos.

× In spring I usually take photo of terrible sun so I usually take the Potter.

✓ In spring I usually take photos of tulips, so I usually photograph those flowers.

The original has many wrong words: 'terrible sun' and 'Potter' seem to be mispronunciations. Use 'tulips' (common spring flower) and correct verb 'take photos of' or 'photograph'. Ensure consistent present habitual tense 'usually take'.

× But that the flower kinds of flower are different from seasons.

✓ But the kinds of flowers are different in each season.

Original word order is incorrect and redundant. Reorder to 'the kinds of flowers are different in each season' for grammatical clarity.

× Yes, umm, they often send rubber at the some events such as Valentine, Christmas or birthday, uh, in my house, uh, when someone come to the bar today, uh, we tend to send Trevor as pleasant.

✓ Yes, umm, they often send flowers at some events such as Valentine's Day, Christmas, or birthdays. In my house, when someone comes to visit, we tend to send flowers as a gesture of goodwill.

Multiple incorrect words: 'rubber' should be 'flowers'; 'at the some events' -> 'at some events'; 'Valentine' -> 'Valentine's Day'; 'when someone come' -> 'when someone comes'; 'come to the bar today' -> 'comes to visit'; 'send Trevor as pleasant' -> 'send flowers as a gesture of goodwill'. Corrected articles, verb agreement, and vocabulary.

× It is very good because the flowers are on the.

✓ It is very nice because the flowers are beautiful.

Original is incomplete and misplaces/adopts wrong words 'on the'. Completed the sentence to convey likely intended meaning: flowers being beautiful makes it nice. Replaced with clear adjective and completed sentence.