Flowers— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid colloquialisms like "freak," and add one brief reason or example. Keep it under five sentences and use a linking phrase for clarity.

Ejemplo: Yes, I love flowers. I enjoy receiving them and also like giving them to friends because they brighten up a room and show appreciation.

Sugerencia: Reduce hesitations and tighten structure: begin with a direct statement, use one linking word to introduce an example, and provide one specific detail about her behaviour. Avoid repetition.

Ejemplo: Yes, my sister loves flowers. For example, whenever we pass a florist she always goes in and often buys plants or seeds to grow in her garden.

Sugerencia: Correct grammar and remove fillers: use a clear topic sentence, fix phrasing (e.g. "my grandfather is fond of flowers"), and give one specific detail about the garden. Keep it concise.

Ejemplo: Yes, there are many flowers, especially at my home. My grandfather is fond of gardening and he has a large garden with a wide variety of roses and lilies.

Sugerencia: Clarify your stance and fix contradictions: start with a clear answer (yes or no), remove redundant phrases, and give one condition when you would take photos. Use linking words like "however" or "only when."

Ejemplo: Not usually. However, I will take a photo if I see a rare or unusually beautiful flower, for example a blue poppy, so I can remember it.

Sugerencia: Be more precise and avoid vague language: start with a direct statement, give one clear example of occasions when flowers are sent, and avoid repeating words and fillers. Use a linking word to connect idea and example.

Ejemplo: Yes, people often send flowers for occasions like anniversaries or to welcome guests. For instance, men commonly give bouquets to their partners on anniversaries or Valentine's Day.

× I do love flowers, but I'm not a kind of freak that knows every species of flowers and their names.

✓ I do love flowers, but I'm not the kind of freak who knows every species of flower and their names.

Use 'the kind of' not 'a kind of' when referring to a specific type of person in this context; use 'who' for people not 'that'; use the singular 'flower' after 'species of' because 'species' is followed by a noun in singular or plural but commonly 'species of flower' is preferred.

× Yes, uh, my sister is the one who loves flower umm, whenever we go out and if there is a flower shop in the way, then she would definitely enter the flower shop and buy a plant or a flower seed to grow in her garden.

✓ Yes, uh, my sister is the one who loves flowers. Umm, whenever we go out and there is a flower shop on the way, she will definitely go into the shop and buy a plant or flower seeds to grow in her garden.

Use plural 'flowers' to describe liking flowers generally. Use 'on the way' not 'in the way' for a shop encountered while going somewhere. Use simple future 'will' for habitual future actions rather than 'would' here. Use 'go into the shop' rather than 'enter the flower shop' for natural phrasing and 'flower seeds' (plural) is more natural when talking about seeds.

× Yes, especially in my home. Also my grandfather is a fond of flowers, that's why there is a garden, huge garden with lots of different flowers, umm being grown under his.

✓ Yes, especially at my home. Also my grandfather is fond of flowers; that's why he has a large garden with lots of different flowers growing in it.

Use 'at my home' (or 'in my home') for location; do not use 'is a fond of'—use 'is fond of' or 'he is fond of'. Use 'he has a large garden' instead of awkward 'there is a garden, huge garden'. Use present participle 'growing' plus 'in it' to complete the phrase rather than 'being grown under his' which is incomplete and ungrammatical.

× No, I really take photos of flowers in my daily life as I've been seeing flowers all the time.

✓ No, I don't really take photos of flowers in my daily life because I see flowers all the time.

Negative present simple requires 'do not' (don't). 'I really take' conflicts with intended negative meaning. Use 'because' to link reason. Use simple present 'see' for habitual situation rather than present perfect continuous 'I've been seeing' which is unnatural here.

× Yes, especially in my home. Also my grandfather is a fond of flowers, that's why there is a garden, huge garden with lots of different flowers, umm being grown under his.

✓ Yes, especially at my home. Also my grandfather is fond of flowers; that's why he has a large garden with lots of different flowers growing in it.

Explained above: replace passive 'being grown under his' with active present participle 'growing in it' to form a correct and complete clause.

× Umm it is mostly sent to the to the couples umm by the male partner.

✓ Umm it is mostly sent to couples by the male partner.

Remove the repeated 'to the' and do not use the definite article 'the' with plural 'couples' in general statements. The passive 'is mostly sent' is fine; simplify phrasing for clarity.

× Yes, uh, my sister is the one who loves flower umm, whenever we go out and if there is a flower shop in the way, then she would definitely enter the flower shop and buy a plant or a flower seed to grow in her garden.

✓ Yes, uh, my sister is the one who loves flowers. Umm, whenever we go out and there is a flower shop on the way, she will definitely go into the shop and buy a plant or flower seeds to grow in her garden.

Use 'she will' rather than 'she would' for a likely or habitual future action; this corrects the third person singular modal/future construction.

× Yes, especially in my home. Also my grandfather is a fond of flowers, that's why there is a garden, huge garden with lots of different flowers, umm being grown under his.

✓ Yes, especially at my home. Also my grandfather is fond of flowers; that's why he has a large garden with lots of different flowers growing in it.

Replace vague possessive 'his' with 'he has' and 'in it' to clarify the referent. Use correct pronoun/reference structure.

× I love receiving flowers and giving flowers to others.

✓ I love receiving flowers and giving them to others.

Use pronoun 'them' to avoid repetition; this improves cohesion. No article change necessary but sentence becomes more natural.

× If there is a certain flower which is unique, which I think is unique, then obviously I would take just the one photo.

✓ If there is a certain flower that I think is unique, then obviously I will take just one photo.

Use 'that' instead of 'which' for restrictive clause in spoken English; use 'will' rather than 'would' for a likely future action. Remove redundant 'which is unique, which I think is unique.' Also 'just one photo' is more natural than 'just the one photo.'