Hometown— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Answer directly, then give one clear example of what you learned. Avoid repeating “all about” and use a natural phrase such as “the history of my hometown.”

Ejemplo: Yes, I learned a little about my hometown’s history at school. We studied how the village was established and how it developed over time. I don’t know many details about my own family’s history, though.

Sugerencia: Focus on cultural traditions rather than the general idea of being a good citizen. Use accurate grammar, such as “taught me to respect” and “be aware,” and explain one specific custom.

Ejemplo: Yes, I learned about my hometown’s culture from my family and community. It is a close-knit place, and children grow up learning our language and traditional customs. This taught me to respect our heritage and be considerate of other people.

Sugerencia: This is relevant and well developed. Improve the answer by using “northeastern” as one word and avoiding repetition of “small” and “tiny.”

Ejemplo: My hometown is a village called Kalasen in the northeastern part of Thalin. Most residents belong to the Putai ethnic minority, and many people still speak our language every day. We also keep our traditional customs and festivals alive.

Sugerencia: State clearly that it is a small village, and avoid giving two conflicting population estimates. Use a simple approximate figure and remove the unnatural phrase “scaled based on my estimate.”

Ejemplo: It’s a very small village rather than a big city. I’d estimate that around five hundred people live there. Since the community is so small, many residents know one another.

Sugerencia: Your reasons are personal and relevant, but the final sentence is difficult to follow. Correct “the town shape” to “the town shaped” and organize the examples in a clear list.

Ejemplo: Yes, I do. I’m proud to belong to my ethnic community, and my hometown played a big part in shaping who I am. Its festivals, food, and language give me a strong sense of identity and belonging.

Sugerencia: Keep the strong point about community, but remove unclear phrases such as “out of flats” and “comedy.” Add punctuation and give one concrete example of how neighbours help each other.

Ejemplo: What I like most is the strong sense of community. People know and support one another, and neighbours are happy to help with small tasks. When I’m away, I often miss that friendly atmosphere.

Sugerencia: Make your contrast clearer: you appreciate the village, but dislike its limited infrastructure. The correct word is “infrastructure,” and “in some respects” is more natural than “in some retrospect.”

Ejemplo: I dislike the limited infrastructure in my village. There are few public facilities, and we don’t have a sports centre. It’s also difficult to find a swimming pool for regular practice.

Sugerencia: Answer the duration first, then briefly explain when you left. Avoid repeating the place name, and finish your final sentence rather than trailing off.

Ejemplo: I lived there for about twenty-five years. I was born and raised in the village, but I moved abroad after finishing school to continue my studies. Those early years made me very familiar with the local culture and community.

Sugerencia: Your preference and supporting reason are clear, but use “fitness routine” and “swimming facilities.” Keep the explanation focused and avoid saying “at all” after “no longer matches.”

Ejemplo: I enjoy visiting my hometown, but I wouldn’t want to live there permanently. My daily routine is quite different now, especially because I swim regularly. The village has very few swimming facilities, so it would be difficult to keep up with my exercise.

Sugerencia: Give a direct response and keep the reasons, but remove the repeated “so far” and “for now.” Use a clear linking phrase before explaining why your current country suits you.

Ejemplo: No, I don’t think I’ll move back for a long time. I’m currently living abroad, where there are more job opportunities and a social environment that suits me. For now, I plan to stay here.

Sugerencia: Use simple, accurate wording to describe the location, people, language, and customs. Correct “with most people still speak” to “which most people still speak,” and avoid unclear phrases such as “commodity oriented cultural activities.”

Ejemplo: My hometown is a small village with a diverse community, including many people from the Putai ethnic group. We have our own language, which many residents still speak in daily life. Children also grow up learning local customs and taking part in traditional activities.

Sugerencia: Answer directly by naming what the town is known for. Improve the phrasing “one of the really small minority communities” and give one example of a tradition.

Ejemplo: My hometown is best known for the Putai ethnic community. We are a small minority group, and we still follow many of our traditional customs in daily life. Our festivals are a good example of how we keep our heritage alive.

Sugerencia: This is a specific and interesting example. Correct “one lessons” to “one lesson” and clarify that you compared older words and expressions with modern ones.

Ejemplo: Yes, I did. I remember one lesson in primary school when our teacher asked us to interview older relatives about how our language had changed. We prepared questions, recorded their answers, and compared older words and expressions with modern ones.

Sugerencia: Your answer is clear and well supported. Replace “especially many of my high school friends” with a more natural phrase, and consider saying “about 80%” rather than “around eighty percent.”

Ejemplo: There aren’t many young people left in my hometown. About 80% of my high school friends have moved away, either to nearby cities or abroad. Many leave because there are limited opportunities for work and education.

Sugerencia: Give a clear “no” and explain that career opportunities are limited. The rest of the answer is difficult to understand, so use short sentences and specific examples such as a lack of jobs or training.

Ejemplo: No, I don’t think it is. There are very few local job opportunities, especially for people who want to build a career in a specialized field. Young people often move to larger cities for work or further education.

× I have learned that history about my hometown when I was young in school but not things related to me myself that much because it's all about all about how Dor Home Town was built back then.

✓ I learned about the history of my hometown when I was young and in school, but I did not learn much about things related to me personally because it was all about how Dor Home Town was built back then.

Use the simple past learned for an experience that happened when you were young. The present perfect have learned is not normally used with a specific, finished time in the past, such as when I was young.

× I have learned that history about my hometown when I was young in school but not things related to me myself that much because it's all about all about how Dor Home Town was built back then.

✓ I learned about the history of my hometown when I was young and in school, but I did not learn much about things related to me personally because it was all about how Dor Home Town was built back then.

The phrase learned that history about is not grammatically complete in this context. Say learned about the history. The contrast also needs a complete clause, such as but I did not learn much about. Personally is the appropriate adverb here.

× It feels like a small close knit community where people hold minority views and lifestyles compare with the wider society, so living there taught me to respect for Tory Land and aware of other people's needs.

✓ It feels like a small close-knit community where people have minority views and lifestyles compared with those in wider society, so living there taught me to respect Tory Land and to be aware of other people's needs.

The verb respect takes a direct object, so say respect Tory Land, not respect for Tory Land. The correction also uses compared with to make the comparison grammatical.

× It feels like a small close knit community where people hold minority views and lifestyles compare with the wider society, so living there taught me to respect for Tory Land and aware of other people's needs.

✓ It feels like a small close-knit community where people have minority views and lifestyles compared with those in wider society, so living there taught me to respect Tory Land and to be aware of other people's needs.

After taught me, use parallel infinitive phrases: to respect and to be aware. The original leaves out the verb be before aware, and the phrase lifestyles compare does not form a grammatical comparison.

× It's actually quite small and scaled based on my estimate of the population. I would say the city has maybe around a thousand people give or take. In fact the town itself probably has a closer to five hundred residents in total.

✓ It's actually quite small, based on my estimate of the population. I would say the town has around a thousand people, give or take. In fact, the town itself probably has closer to five hundred residents in total.

The phrase has a closer to is not grammatical. Use has closer to five hundred. The correction also removes the unnecessary a before closer and uses town consistently with the reference to the hometown.

× The town shape who I am from the festivals who celebrate to the food and language I grew up with so and those traditions give me a strong sense of identity and belonging.

✓ The town shapes who I am, from the festivals we celebrate to the food and language I grew up with, and those traditions give me a strong sense of identity and belonging.

The singular subject the town requires the third-person singular verb shapes. The original uses shape, which does not agree with that subject.

× The town shape who I am from the festivals who celebrate to the food and language I grew up with so and those traditions give me a strong sense of identity and belonging.

✓ The town shapes who I am, from the festivals we celebrate to the food and language I grew up with, and those traditions give me a strong sense of identity and belonging.

Use we for the people who celebrate the festivals. Who would refer to people, but festivals are things; the original relative clause also does not identify who celebrates them.

× The town shape who I am from the festivals who celebrate to the food and language I grew up with so and those traditions give me a strong sense of identity and belonging.

✓ The town shapes who I am, from the festivals we celebrate to the food and language I grew up with, and those traditions give me a strong sense of identity and belonging.

So and are used together incorrectly here. Use and to connect the two related ideas, or use so to show that the second idea is a result.

× When I'm away, I'd often feel a bit homesick, to be honest and out of flats, because people there know and support each other neighbours help with small tasks and comedy even bring everyone together.

✓ When I'm away, I often feel a bit homesick, to be honest, because people there know and support each other. Neighbours help with small tasks, and community events bring everyone together.

Use the simple present often feel for a habitual feeling. Would often feel usually describes a past habit or a hypothetical situation, neither of which is indicated here.

× When I'm away, I'd often feel a bit homesick, to be honest and out of flats, because people there know and support each other neighbours help with small tasks and comedy even bring everyone together.

✓ When I'm away, I often feel a bit homesick, to be honest, because people there know and support each other. Neighbours help with small tasks, and community events bring everyone together.

In the final clause, community events is plural, so the verb must be bring. The original says comedy even bring, which does not have a clear grammatical subject-verb relationship. The correction assumes the intended subject was community events.

× Life can be difficult in some retrospect because we do not have any public facilities.

✓ Life can be difficult in some respects because we do not have any public facilities.

The established expression is in some respects, not in some retrospect. Use respects when referring to particular aspects of a situation.

× I've been living there for about twenty five years now. I was born and raised there before moving abroad to continue my studies in Artsreilley, which is in Artsreilley while I was growing up, I became very familiar with the local culture and community and those early experiences influenced my decision to study abroad.

✓ I've been living there for about twenty-five years now. I was born and raised there before moving abroad to continue my studies in Artsreilley. While I was growing up, I became very familiar with the local culture and community, and those early experiences influenced my decision to study abroad.

The original joins separate clauses in a way that creates a run-on sentence. Separate the sentence after Artsreilley and begin a new clause with While I was growing up. This makes the relationship between the ideas clear.

× We have our own language with most people still speak in everyday life.

✓ We have our own language, which most people still speak in everyday life.

With cannot introduce the clause most people still speak in this sentence. Use the relative pronoun which to connect the clause to language.

× There, it's divided into Sara Sub districts, each of which aids densely populated.

✓ The area is divided into Sara Sub districts, each of which is densely populated.

The phrase each of which needs a verb that describes the districts. Use is densely populated. Aids does not form a grammatical predicate with densely populated.

× Yeah, I did, if I remember correctly, there was one lessons in primary school when our teacher asked us to go and interview our older relatives about how the language used to be different from today.

✓ Yeah, I did. If I remember correctly, there was one lesson in primary school when our teacher asked us to interview our older relatives about how the language used to be different from what it is today.

One requires a singular count noun, so use one lesson rather than one lessons.

× Yeah, I did, if I remember correctly, there was one lessons in primary school when our teacher asked us to go and interview our older relatives about how the language used to be different from today.

✓ Yeah, I did. If I remember correctly, there was one lesson in primary school when our teacher asked us to interview our older relatives about how the language used to be different from what it is today.

The original joins two independent clauses with only a comma, creating a run-on sentence. Use a full stop after did. The phrase different from what it is today also makes the comparison complete.

× To be honest, there are hardly any young people left in my hometown these days, especially many of my high school friends.

✓ To be honest, there are hardly any young people left in my hometown these days, especially among my high school friends.

Use among to identify the group in which the situation is especially true. Especially many does not connect the example to the preceding statement grammatically.

× The only main thing that's young people coming back to MTAUP it is relaxing, just have a little break, a little break from the Hatsul and Batsoulife. But for advanced promote their career options. It's not one of a thing that they have to do in here.

✓ The main reason young people come back to MTAUP is to relax and take a little break from the Hatsul and Batsoulife. However, they cannot do much to advance their career options there. It is not something they have to do here.

The original does not form complete, well-ordered clauses: the subject and verb are unclear in the first sentence, and But for advanced promote is not a complete clause. The correction uses complete clauses and the infinitive phrases to relax and to advance. The phrase one of a thing is also ungrammatical; use something.