Hometown— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and avoid repetition (e.g., “natural beauty” and “beautiful landscapes” are similar). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail (a unique landmark or characteristic). Limit to 2–3 sentences and use a linking word if adding detail.

Ejemplo: I come from Hazan City, a mountainous town in the north. It’s best known for its terraced valleys and a scenic cliffside lookout called Eagle Point, which attracts hikers year-round.

Sugerencia: Avoid vague praise like “I love everything” and repeated phrases. Start with a direct statement of what you like, then give a specific supporting reason or example using a linking word like “because” or “for example.” Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

Ejemplo: I especially like the natural scenery and the close-knit community in my hometown because I grew up exploring the nearby forests with my friends. For example, every summer we would meet at the riverbank to swim and have picnics, which created many good memories.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and avoid repeating ideas from previous answers. Give a precise duration and optionally add one brief, specific supporting detail. Use one linking word if you add a reason.

Ejemplo: I have lived in Hazan City for 17 years since I was born. Because it’s where my childhood friends and family still live, it feels very special to me.

Sugerencia: Organize your answer: give a clear opinion, then support it with 1–2 specific reasons using linking words (e.g., “because” or “however”). Avoid grammatical errors and unclear phrases like “excited place” or “or most.” Offer a brief contrast if appropriate.

Ejemplo: I don’t think it’s ideal for many young people because it lacks entertainment and social venues. For instance, there are very few cafés, cinemas, or night venues, so young people often move to bigger cities for more activities.

× I have lived at here for a long time, so I have many memories with my friends and my family here.

✓ I have lived here for a long time, so I have many memories with my friends and my family here.

The preposition 'at' is unnecessary when using 'here'. Use 'lived here' instead of 'lived at here'. Remove the extra preposition to make the sentence natural and grammatically correct.

× I have lived here about 17 years.

✓ I have lived here for about 17 years.

When giving a duration with the present perfect tense ('have lived'), include 'for' before the length of time. Also place 'about' before the number for natural word order: 'for about 17 years'.

× Nowadays young people often prefer excited place where have many cafes or most.

✓ Nowadays young people often prefer exciting places that have many cafes and more entertainment.

'Excited' is an adjective describing a feeling; to describe places that cause excitement use the participial adjective 'exciting'. 'Place' should be plural to match 'young people often prefer', and relative clause needs a subject: 'that have many cafes'. 'Or most' is unclear; replace with 'and more entertainment' to convey the intended meaning.

× Meanwhile my city is just a peaceful area, so I don't think so.

✓ Meanwhile, my city is just a peaceful area, so I don't think it is a good place for young people.

The phrase 'so I don't think so' is vague because 'so' lacks a clear antecedent. Clarify the intended opinion by restating the subject or idea: 'I don't think it is a good place for young people.' Also add a comma after 'Meanwhile' for correct punctuation and flow.

× I was born and raised in Hazan City, which is a mountainous area. Moreover, it is really famous for its natural beauty and has many beautiful landscapes.

✓ I was born and raised in Hazan City, which is a mountainous area. It is really famous for its natural beauty and has many beautiful landscapes.

Using 'Moreover' at the start of the second sentence is not incorrect but sounds overly formal and slightly redundant in casual speech. Removing it makes the statement more natural. This correction focuses on style rather than strict grammar; sentence structure is clearer without the transitional adverb.