Work— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct grammar; start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid overlong phrases and incorrect verb forms (e.g., use present perfect for duration, plural/singular agreement).

Ejemplo: I work as a professional dietitian and have been practicing for over ten years. During this time, I have developed evidence-based diet plans to help patients manage metabolic disorders, and I find the work both rewarding and motivating.

Sugerencia: Lead with a direct statement and link reasons briefly. Reduce repetition and tighten sentences; use linking words (because, so) correctly and finish sentences fully. Mention one specific advantage with a concrete example.

Ejemplo: I work at my own clinic, which is next to my house, so it is very convenient. Because I am a mother of three, being nearby allows me to balance appointments and childcare more easily—for example, I can start seeing patients early and be home for my children's school needs.

Sugerencia: Avoid vague phrases and incorrect word choices; use specific vocabulary and correct articles. Organize answer: state your opinion, then give two clear, specific reasons with linking words. Clarify unfamiliar terms (e.g., 'greenery' not 'grinery').

Ejemplo: Yes, it is a great place to work because the clinic has a spacious office and a comfortable reception area. In addition, about 40% of the surrounding land is planted with trees and gardens, which creates a therapeutic environment that helps both patients and staff.

Sugerencia: Give a concise topic sentence and avoid repetition. Use one or two specific reasons and a linking word like 'because' or 'so'. Correct phrases like 'planned to work here for longer' to 'plan to work here for a long time.'

Ejemplo: Yes, I like my workplace because I designed the layout to suit my needs and it is right next to my house, which makes balancing family and work much easier. I plan to continue working here for the foreseeable future.

Sugerencia: Provide a clear, structured answer: state your main short-term plan, include a timeline, then mention a personal goal with reason. Avoid unclear or incomplete phrases (e.g., 'work in my late eighteen') and use precise vocabulary. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

Ejemplo: In the next three to four years I plan to complete several professional initiatives, such as expanding my clinic services and launching patient education programs. After that, I hope to resume competitive shooting to improve my fitness and focus, which will help me perform better in business.

× It has been already more than ten years since I'm in this profession.

✓ It has already been more than ten years since I have been in this profession.

The sentence mixes present perfect progressive idea with a present clause 'since I'm'. Use present perfect 'has been' with 'since' plus present perfect 'I have been' or use 'for' with a duration. Also word order: 'already' goes after 'has'. Suggestion: use 'It has already been more than ten years since I have been in this profession.'

× I planned evidence based diet for my patient to cure their metabolic disorders with the miracle of food science.

✓ I plan evidence-based diets for my patients to treat their metabolic disorders using the benefits of food science.

Original uses past tense 'planned' but context describes regular work, so present simple 'plan' is appropriate. 'Evidence based' needs hyphen as a compound adjective: 'evidence-based'. 'Diet' should be plural 'diets' when referring generally. 'Patient' should be plural 'patients' to match 'their'. 'Cure' is too strong; use 'treat'. Also 'with the miracle of food science' is awkward; rephrase to 'using the benefits of food science.'

× I work at my own clinic and I am self employed.

✓ I work at my own clinic and I am self-employed.

Hyphenation: 'self-employed' is written with a hyphen. No article change needed but punctuation and compound adjective form should be correct.

× My clinic is just adjacent to my house so it is far more convenient to go there and manage both personal and professional responsibilities.

✓ My clinic is just adjacent to my house, so it is much more convenient to go there and manage both personal and professional responsibilities.

'Adjacent to' is correct but 'far more convenient' is acceptable; 'much more convenient' is more natural. Add a comma before 'so'. Minor wording adjustments for naturalness.

× Being a mother of three kids, I have to take care of them.

✓ As a mother of three children, I have to take care of them.

'Being a mother of three kids' is understandable but 'As a mother of three children' is more natural. Use 'children' instead of 'kids' in formal speech.

× So it gives me freedom

✓ So it gives me freedom.

Add a period. Also could be 'gives me the freedom' for clarity: 'So it gives me the freedom to balance responsibilities.'

× First of all, it has each and every kind of facilities like spacious office as well as a reception hall and moreover forty percent of land is dedicated to grinery.

✓ First of all, it has every kind of facility, such as a spacious office and a reception hall; moreover, forty percent of the land is dedicated to greenery.

'Each and every kind of facilities' is incorrect: use 'every kind of facility' or 'all kinds of facilities'. 'Facilities' is countable so match determiners. 'Spacious office' needs an article: 'a spacious office'. 'Grinery' is misspelling; correct is 'greenery'. Add 'the' before 'land'.

× So environment conditions are quite present and therapeutic.

✓ So the environmental conditions are pleasant and therapeutic.

'Environment conditions' is incorrect; use 'environmental conditions' or 'the environment is'. 'Present' is wrong word choice; likely 'pleasant'. Use 'the' before plural noun: 'the environmental conditions'.

× I'm enjoying being here and serving my patient effectively.

✓ I'm enjoying being here and serving my patients effectively.

If speaking generally about all clients, 'patients' plural matches context. Otherwise use 'my patient' with an article if singular and specify which patient.

× Definitely yes because I designed each and every corner myself so it is almost for my comfort and moreover it is next to my house only so it gives me freedom to manage both personal and professional responsibilities.

✓ Definitely yes, because I designed every corner myself so it is almost entirely for my comfort, and moreover it is right next to my house, so it gives me the freedom to manage both personal and professional responsibilities.

Tense: 'designed' is past (correct) because the designing is completed; keep it. Improve determiners: 'each and every' is redundant; 'every corner' suffices. 'Almost for my comfort' is unnatural; use 'almost entirely for my comfort'. 'Next to my house only' should be 'right next to my house' or 'only next to my house'—'right next to' is natural. Add commas and 'the freedom'.

× I have planned to work here for longer.

✓ I plan to work here for a long time.

'Have planned to work here for longer' is awkward. Use 'I plan to work here for a long time' or 'I have planned to work here for the long term.' Choose present simple 'plan' for future intention or present perfect 'have planned' with clearer object.

× I'm juggling with several work and I really want to complete all those initiatives within next three to four years and after that I want to return to my shooting sport so that I can keep myself fit and healthy to perform more effectively in business sector.

✓ I'm juggling several projects and I really want to complete those initiatives within the next three to four years; after that I want to return to my shooting sport so that I can keep myself fit and healthy and perform more effectively in the business sector.

'Juggling with' should be 'juggling' or 'juggling several jobs/projects'. 'Several work' is ungrammatical; use 'several projects' or 'several pieces of work'. Add 'the' before 'next three to four years'. Use a semicolon or separate sentences for clarity. Add 'the' before 'business sector'.

× I want to work in my late eighteen

✓ I want to work into my late eighties.

Original phrase 'in my late eighteen' is ungrammatical and unclear. Likely meant 'late eighties' meaning age; use 'in my late eighties' or if meant 'eighteen' meaning age, say 'when I was eighteen' but context about future work implies age 'late eighties'. Ensure number is appropriate to intended meaning.