Work— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more grammatically correct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. "I'm a student") then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms and word order (e.g. "The study process will start next month"). Avoid repeating ideas and reduce fillers.

Ejemplo: I'm a student. I was recently accepted into college, and my classes start next month. Because I'm currently improving my skills in math and English, I hope to find good employment after graduation.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and use clearer vocabulary. Say whether you currently work or plan to work, and name the field correctly (e.g. "finance"). Use linking words to explain reasons and avoid fillers like "uh" and "um".

Ejemplo: I don't work yet, but I plan to work in finance after college because I enjoy working with numbers. I also like studying English, which I think will help me in an international finance job.

Sugerencia: Be precise and avoid vague phrases. Use one topic sentence about the place, then support with two specific reasons linked with words like "because" or "so". Correct grammar and reduce repetition.

Ejemplo: Yes, it's a good place to study because it's quiet and well-organized. As a result, students can concentrate and gain knowledge without stress.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and give a clear reason using linking words. Use correct verb forms and natural phrasing (e.g. "work from home"), and add a brief positive or negative detail to enrich the response.

Ejemplo: No, I prefer to work from home because I feel more productive and I don't like crowded places. Working online also saves time on commuting.

Sugerencia: Clarify your ideas with correct words and structure. Start with a clear topic sentence describing your plan, then add specific steps and use linking words like "then" or "after". Replace unclear phrases (e.g. "give my documents") with natural expressions such as "apply to".

Ejemplo: I plan to study at this college for two years and then apply to universities in the USA or Canada. After graduating, I hope to find a job abroad and gain international work experience.

× I'm student and I recently was accepted into college.

✓ I'm a student and I was recently accepted into college.

Missing indefinite article 'a' before 'student' (article error falling under sentence structure). Also word order 'recently was accepted' is awkward; 'was recently accepted' is the correct order. Suggestion: include the article and place adverb 'recently' before the past participle 'accepted'.

× The study process will be start the next month and in the future I hope I will have great employment because right now I'm improving my skills.

✓ The study process will start next month, and in the future I hope I will have a good job because right now I'm improving my skills.

Incorrect verb form after 'will' ('will be start' is wrong); use base verb 'start' after 'will'. 'The next month' should be 'next month' (article unnecessary). 'Great employment' is unnatural; 'a good job' is idiomatic and requires an article. Suggestion: use 'will start' and idiomatic noun phrases.

× Umm, I will be working at finances, uh, 'cause I like, uh, this employment.

✓ Umm, I will be working in finance because I like this field of work.

Incorrect preposition 'at finances' should be 'in finance' (preposition error). 'This employment' is unnatural; use 'this field of work' or 'this job'. Also remove filler words. Suggestion: use 'in finance' and a natural noun phrase.

× I like so much math and, uh, English lessons.

✓ I like math and English lessons very much.

Word order and placement of 'so much' is incorrect for liking activities; 'very much' after the object is natural. Suggestion: place intensity adverb after the object: 'I like X very much.'

× Yeah, that's so good place to study.

✓ Yeah, that's a very good place to study.

Missing indefinite article 'a' before 'good place' and 'so good' is colloquial; 'very good' is clearer. Suggestion: include 'a' and use 'very' for emphasis.

× This is so peaceful.

✓ It is very peaceful there.

Context requires location reference; 'this' is acceptable but 'it is very peaceful there' is clearer. Also replace 'so' with 'very' for formality. Suggestion: clarify subject and location.

× You can feel confident without like fear and worrying.

✓ You can feel confident without fear and worry.

Unnecessary filler 'like' should be removed. Use parallel nouns 'fear and worry' instead of gerund 'worrying'. Suggestion: remove 'like' and use parallel noun forms.

× It's just peaceful place where you can get more and more knowledge and. Stay.

✓ It's just a peaceful place where you can gain more and more knowledge and stay focused.

Missing article 'a' before 'peaceful place'. Sentence was broken and ended with an isolated 'Stay.' Add a verb to complete idea; 'stay focused' makes sense. Suggestion: combine fragments and add necessary words.

× No, I prefer to stay at home and working online.

✓ No, I prefer to stay at home and work online.

Parallel structure required after 'prefer': use verb in base form 'to stay' and 'work' (or 'to work'). 'Working' is a gerund causing parallelism error. Suggestion: keep verbs parallel: 'prefer to stay... and work...'.

× I don't like going to place where so many people.

✓ I don't like going to places where there are so many people.

Missing plural 'places' (singular/plural issue) and incorrect clause structure; need 'where there are' to indicate existence (there be issue). Suggestion: use plural and include 'there are'.

× My plants are so dreamy and I hope uh in the future it begins to dream.

✓ My plans are dreamy and I hope in the future they begin to come true.

'Plants' is a misspelling for 'plans' (word choice/pronoun error). 'It begins to dream' uses wrong subject and verb; plans are plural so use 'they begin' and 'come true' expresses realization. Suggestion: correct spelling to 'plans' and use plural pronoun and idiomatic expression 'come true'.

× So umm I want to study in this college for two years and then give my documents to USA university or Canadian and to have employment in another country.

✓ So I want to study at this college for two years and then apply to universities in the USA or Canada and find employment in another country.

Preposition: 'study at this college' is correct rather than 'in'. 'Give my documents to USA university or Canadian' is ungrammatical—use 'apply to universities in the USA or Canada'. Also use parallel verbs 'apply' and 'find' to express intention. Suggestion: use 'apply to' and name countries properly, and 'find employment' for clarity.