Work— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Reduce repetition and answer directly with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two concise supporting details. Avoid saying 'I'm bored' which is irrelevant; instead state your status and why you value it. Use linking words (for example, 'and' / 'so') correctly and keep to under five sentences.

Ejemplo: I work part-time as a software engineer and I am also studying software engineering in Korea. This combination allows me to gain practical experience while continuing my studies, and it gives me many opportunities to learn new technologies and improve my skills.

Sugerencia: Start with a clear topic sentence naming the location, then add a specific detail about your commute using linking words. Remove filler words (“uh”) and contradictory statements (saying it's not far then complaining) to sound more natural and concise.

Ejemplo: I work in Suwon, which is close to my university. However, I live a bit farther away so I usually take a bus that takes about 45 minutes; I also enjoy walking short parts of the route when the weather is nice.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and coherently: say it is a good place and give two specific reasons using linking words ('because', 'so', 'for example'). Avoid hesitations and small errors (e.g., 'place to work' not 'place to walk') and keep sentences concise.

Ejemplo: Yes, it's a good place to work, especially for a recent graduate, because the team is small so I can take on varied responsibilities and learn quickly. In addition, management is flexible — we can work from home — and most colleagues are friendly and helpful.

Sugerencia: Give a direct opinion in one sentence and support it with one concise reason. Avoid repetition ('currently' twice, 'I I'm') and improve grammar (e.g., 'they are pretty kind'). Use linking words like 'because' to connect ideas.

Ejemplo: Yes, I am very satisfied with my workplace because colleagues are supportive and the management is flexible, which makes balancing work and study much easier.

Sugerencia: Start with a clear statement of your future plan, then give specific reasons and link them logically. Avoid contradictory phrasing ('I'm currently studying and working abroad' vs earlier saying in Korea) — be consistent. Limit to three sentences and use precise vocabulary ('join' or 'work for' big tech, 'gain experience', 'work on impactful projects').

Ejemplo: In the future I would like to move to Europe and work for a major tech company such as Meta. I believe these companies offer challenging projects where I can learn advanced technologies and contribute to products that have a large social impact.

× I'm I'm bored.

✓ I'm bored.

The sentence repeats the contraction 'I'm' twice, which is a redundancy and creates an incorrect sentence structure. Remove the duplicated 'I'm' to produce a single clear clause: 'I'm bored.' Suggestion: Read sentences aloud or proofread to catch accidental repetition.

× I'm currently working as a part-time software engineer in a software company in Korea and also I'm currently studying software engineering in Korea.

✓ I'm currently working as a part-time software engineer at a software company in Korea and I'm also studying software engineering there.

The original uses 'in a software company in Korea' which is grammatically acceptable but repetitive with 'in Korea' twice; 'at' is the more natural preposition for a place of employment. Also placing 'also' before 'studying' improves fluency. Suggestion: use 'at' for workplaces and avoid repeating location phrases; place 'also' before the verb for clarity.

× So I'm bored and I like the experience working and steady at the same time.

✓ So I'm bored, and I like the experience of working while studying at the same time.

Original lacks the noun 'of' after 'experience' and uses 'steady' incorrectly to mean 'studying' or 'being stable.' The corrected sentence adds 'of' and clarifies 'while studying' to express concurrent activities. Suggestion: ensure nouns take required prepositions (experience of) and replace incorrect adjectives with the intended verb forms.

× It gives me the experience and many opportunities to learn more.

✓ It gives me experience and many opportunities to learn more.

Article 'the' before 'experience' is unnecessary when speaking generally. Removing it makes the sentence more natural. Suggestion: omit 'the' when referring to experience in a general sense.

× Uh, my work is in Suwon and is near my school.

✓ Uh, my work is in Suwon and is near my school.

Sentence is acceptable but missing subject for second clause; while meaning is clear, repeating 'it' improves grammar: 'Uh, my work is in Suwon and it is near my school.' Suggestion: include the subject 'it' to complete the clause.

× Uh, but I live, uh, a little bit far from my walk, so I have to take the bus.

✓ But I live a little bit far from my work, so I have to take the bus.

The word 'walk' is a wrong word choice; context requires 'work.' Removing unnecessary filler 'uh' and placing 'a little bit' correctly improves clarity. Suggestion: choose 'work' not 'walk' and avoid filler words in formal replies.

× It takes around 45 minutes by bus.

✓ It takes around 45 minutes by bus.

This sentence is grammatically correct and fits present-tense description of commute time. No correction necessary. Suggestion: none.

× It's not that far and I like the walk.

✓ It's not that far and I like the walk.

Sentence is acceptable, but if referring to walking to work, 'walking' may be clearer: 'I like walking there.' Original later says 'I like walking there.' Either is acceptable; no essential grammar error. Suggestion: use consistent phrasing (either 'I like the walk' or 'I like walking there').

× Yes, I would say is a good place to walk, especially as a, like a fresh graduate.

✓ Yes, I would say it is a good place to work, especially as a fresh graduate.

Multiple issues: missing subject 'it,' wrong word 'walk' instead of 'work,' and unnecessary filler 'like a.' Corrected sentence inserts 'it,' replaces 'walk' with 'work,' and removes filler. Suggestion: ensure subjects are present and use correct vocabulary; avoid hesitation fillers in responses.

× Uh, we don't have many employees. So you, you can do a lot of new things, you can create, you can innovate.

✓ We don't have many employees, so you can do many new things: you can create and innovate.

Original repetitive 'you, you' and comma splices create structure problems. 'A lot of new things' is acceptable but 'many new things' aligns better. Combine clauses properly or use punctuation to avoid run-on sentences. Suggestion: remove repetition and connect clauses with appropriate conjunctions or punctuation.

× So the management they are pretty flexible and you can work from home and uh yeah, most of the people they are helpful and they kind.

✓ The management is pretty flexible and you can work from home. Also, most of the people are helpful and kind.

Pronoun duplication 'the management they' and 'people they' is ungrammatical. Use either the noun or the pronoun, not both. Also 'they kind' misses a linking verb 'are.' Suggestion: remove redundant pronouns and ensure use of 'are' with adjectives.

× Yes, I I'm very satisfied with the current work I'm currently doing and they pretty kind and the management is flexible.

✓ Yes, I'm very satisfied with the current work I'm doing; my colleagues are pretty kind and the management is flexible.

Redundant 'I I'm,' repeated 'current' and missing verb 'are' before 'pretty kind.' Also 'they' is vague; 'my colleagues' clarifies. Suggestion: eliminate duplications and supply correct subject-verb pairs.

× Yeah, I I think I'm pretty like the place I'm currently working.

✓ Yeah, I think I really like the place where I'm currently working.

Redundant 'I I,' wrong word order 'I'm pretty like' should be 'I really like' or 'I quite like.' Also add 'where' for clarity. Suggestion: avoid repetition and use correct collocations: 'like the place' or 'like working there.'

× I'm currently studying and working abroad, but I would like to go to Europe and I would like to work in the big tech companies like Facebook and Meta.

✓ I'm currently studying and working in Korea, but I would like to go to Europe and work for big tech companies like Facebook and Meta.

Student previously said they are in Korea; saying 'studying and working abroad' contradicts earlier content. Assuming intended meaning is 'here' not 'abroad.' Also 'work in the big tech companies' is improved to 'work for big tech companies.' Suggestion: maintain consistency in reference and use 'work for' to indicate employment with companies.

× I think they can be pretty challenging and at the same time, I can learn a lot of new things and I can work on the things that can shape the world in a different direction and in a good way.

✓ I think they would be pretty challenging, and at the same time I could learn a lot of new things and work on projects that could help shape the world in a positive way.

Use of 'can' is acceptable but 'would' and 'could' better express hypothetical future employment. Also 'work on the things' is vague; 'projects' is clearer. Replacing 'in a different direction and in a good way' with 'in a positive way' is more concise. Suggestion: use 'would'/'could' for hypothetical future situations and prefer specific nouns like 'projects.'