Work— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct grammar. Begin with a clear topic sentence, fix small errors (e.g., “in this field”, subject-verb agreement, plural forms), avoid trailing off, and give one specific example of your work to make the response complete. Use linking words like “and” or “for example” to connect ideas. Keep to 3–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: I am a dietitian and have worked in this field for almost ten years. My work is motivating and rewarding because I design evidence-based diet plans to help people manage metabolic disorders naturally. For example, I recently developed a meal program that helped a patient reduce blood sugar levels within three months.

Sugerencia: Start with a clear, grammatical topic sentence and correct small mistakes (remove repetition, use “self-employed” as adjective, fix verb agreement and articles). Add a specific detail about your clinic and use a linking word to explain the benefit. Limit to 3–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: I am self-employed and have run my own nutrition clinic for more than ten years. It is next to my house, which makes it convenient to balance professional duties and family life. As a mother of three, being nearby lets me manage appointments and childcare more easily.

Sugerencia: Give a short topic sentence then two specific supporting details. Fix grammar and incomplete sentences, avoid repetition, and use linking words (e.g., “because”, “for example”, “also”) to make the answer coherent. Mention concrete benefits for patients and staff. Keep within 3–4 complete sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, it is an excellent place to work because I designed it to suit my needs. For example, about 40% of the site is green space where I take peaceful breaks to relax. It also has a large reception area with plenty of seating, which makes patients and children feel comfortable.

Sugerencia: Be more fluent and avoid fillers like “uh” or “umm.” Start with a clear statement of preference and give one or two concise reasons using correct grammar (e.g., “I tried many hospitals and clinics but did not find them as relaxing”). Avoid trailing questions or unclear fragments. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I love the place where I work and I have no plans to move. I tried setting up practice in several hospitals and clinics, but I never found them as relaxing or well-equipped as my current clinic.

Sugerencia: Organize into a clear topic sentence followed by two concise, specific plans. Correct grammar (e.g., “projects”, “play sports”, reduce repetition), use linking words (“first”, “second”), and finish thoughts fully. Specify what kinds of projects and what sports or fitness routine you plan to do to add concreteness. Keep to 3–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: I have two main plans for the future. First, I want to complete the projects I have started—such as a community nutrition program and an online course—which I expect will take three to four years. Second, after I turn forty I plan to return to playing sports, such as tennis and jogging, and to exercise regularly to stay fit and healthy.

× I have been working in this for field for almost a decade.

✓ I have been working in this field for almost a decade.

The preposition 'in' and the phrase order are incorrect; 'in this for field' is a word order and extra word error. Use 'in this field' to indicate the area of work. Suggestion: place 'in' directly before 'this field' and remove 'for'.

× I create scientifically based diet plans that helps people to cure metabolic disorder naturally.

✓ I create scientifically based diet plans that help people to cure metabolic disorders naturally.

The relative clause refers to 'diet plans' (plural), so the verb should be plural 'help' not 'helps'. Also 'metabolic disorder' should be plural 'metabolic disorders' to match general meaning. Suggestion: match verb number to the plural noun and pluralize 'disorder' when speaking generally.

× I have seen lots of.

✓ I have seen lots of patients.

The original is an incomplete sentence missing an object after 'lots of'. Add a noun such as 'patients' to complete the thought. Suggestion: always include the object after 'lots of' (e.g., 'lots of cases', 'lots of patients').

× I'm a I'm a self-employed.

✓ I'm self-employed.

The phrase repeats 'I'm a' and incorrectly uses the indefinite article with the adjective 'self-employed'. 'Self-employed' is an adjective and does not require 'a'. Suggestion: use 'I'm self-employed' or 'I am a self-employed person'.

× That's make it much more convenient to balance my professional duties and family responsibilities, especially since I'm mother of three.

✓ That makes it much more convenient to balance my professional duties and family responsibilities, especially since I'm a mother of three.

Subject-verb agreement: 'That' requires the verb 'makes' (third person singular). Also missing article 'a' before 'mother of three'. Suggestion: use 'That makes' and include 'a' with occupations or roles when needed.

× It is an excellent place to work because I designed it myself so it is tailored to my needs.

✓ It is an excellent place to work because I designed it myself, so it is tailored to my needs.

The sentence runs two clauses together; a comma before 'so' improves clarity. No major grammar error beyond punctuation. Suggestion: use a comma to separate independent clauses joined by coordinating conjunctions.

× About 40% of This site is green space which allows me to take peaceful breaks and stay relaxed all year round.

✓ About 40% of this site is green space, which allows me to take peaceful breaks and stay relaxed all year round.

Capitalization error 'This' should be lowercase 'this' in mid-sentence. Also a comma is needed before the nonrestrictive clause 'which allows...'. Suggestion: correct capitalization and add comma before 'which'.

× My patients and the children also enjoy spending time there because it. It has a huge reception area and plenty of seating together with.

✓ My patients and the children also enjoy spending time there because it has a pleasant atmosphere. It has a huge reception area and plenty of seating.

Original contains sentence fragments: 'because it.' and 'together with.' are incomplete. Complete the clauses by stating why they enjoy it and removing the trailing 'together with' or adding an object. Suggestion: avoid leaving clauses unfinished; include full objects and reasons.

× Definitely I will love the place where I'm already working.

✓ I definitely love the place where I already work.

'Will' is unnecessary when expressing a current preference; use present simple 'love'. Also word order: adverb 'definitely' typically follows subject. Suggestion: use 'I definitely love' or 'I will definitely love' if speaking about future.

× I cannot think about changing this place because I tried umm, in lots of hospital as well as uh, many clinic to start my practice, but I didn't found them uh, relaxing as compared to this place.

✓ I cannot imagine changing this place because I tried in lots of hospitals as well as many clinics to start my practice, but I didn't find them as relaxing as this place.

Several preposition and noun form errors: 'think about changing' better expressed as 'imagine changing' but 'think about' is acceptable. 'In lots of hospital' needs plural 'hospitals' and 'many clinics'. 'Didn't found' is incorrect past tense; use 'didn't find' (do-support with base verb). 'As compared to' should be 'as ... as' or 'compared to'. Suggestion: pluralize countable nouns, use 'find' after 'didn't', and use correct comparative structure 'as relaxing as'.

× It has all the amenities. What?

✓ It has all the amenities.

The fragment 'What?' seems extraneous and unclear. Remove it for clarity. Suggestion: avoid adding interjections that break the flow unless answering a specific prompt.

× I want to finish all the project I have started which I estimate will take about 3 to 4 years and secondly after I turn 40 I plan to return to the playing sports and workout a lot more to stay fit and healthy because I am seeing the people are suffering from lots of issue in their forty 40s so I really want.

✓ I want to finish all the projects I have started, which I estimate will take about three to four years, and secondly, after I turn 40 I plan to return to playing sports and working out a lot more to stay fit and healthy because I see people suffering from many issues in their forties, so I really want to change that.

Multiple errors: 'project' should be plural 'projects' (singular/plural). Use comma before 'which' nonrestrictive clause. 'Return to the playing sports' incorrect article and gerund use — correct is 'return to playing sports'. 'Workout' as a noun; when using verb, use 'working out'. 'I am seeing the people are suffering' awkward; use present simple 'I see people suffering'. 'Lots of issue' should be 'many issues'. 'Forty 40s' should be 'forties'. Sentence ending 'so I really want' is incomplete; add object 'to change that' or similar. Suggestion: pluralize nouns correctly, use gerunds after 'return to', use 'working out' for verb, and complete the final clause.