Work— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Fix grammar (subject-verb agreement, articles) and avoid repetition. Use linking words like "for example" or "and" correctly.

Ejemplo: I'm a high school student. My school offers several international programs, such as academic writing and study-abroad preparation, which help me improve my English. For example, the academic writing class has taught me how to structure essays, and the study-abroad program gives practical language practice.

Sugerencia: Answer the question directly (say where you study/work), then add one specific detail. Avoid repeating the same information; vary vocabulary and correct grammar (articles, verb forms). Use a linking word like "also" or "for instance."

Ejemplo: I study at Sunrise High School. It also runs several English programs, such as practical English and courses on current issues, which help me practice speaking and improve my vocabulary.

Sugerencia: Directly answer and explain with one main reason and a contrasting positive point. Correct unclear phrases and word order. Use a linking word like "because" and a contrast phrase like "however" or "but".

Ejemplo: Not really, because it takes about an hour to get there, so I have to wake up much earlier than my friends. However, it's worth it because the teachers are excellent and I learn a lot.

Sugerencia: Good direct answer and reason. Improve by tightening sentences and using a linking word for effect. Replace vague words like "really" with stronger vocabulary and correct small grammar issues (article use).

Ejemplo: Yes, I like my school’s location because we can see the beautiful ocean from the classroom. That view helps me unwind after a stressful day and makes learning more pleasant.

Sugerencia: Start with a clear statement of your plan, then give two specific reasons with linking words (for example, because, and). Avoid vague or unclear phrases and repetitive adverbs. Correct grammar and use more precise vocabulary.

Ejemplo: I would like to work in Korea in the future because I'm very interested in Korean culture, especially K-dramas and cosmetics. For example, I study Korean language and trends now, and I hope to gain work experience in Seoul's beauty or media industry.

× I am a student, my school offer various international product program and classes such as academic writing and career issues and study abroad program which help me improve my English.

✓ I am a student. My school offers various international product programs and classes such as academic writing, career issues, and a study-abroad program which help me improve my English.

Subject-verb agreement and count noun errors: 'school' (singular) requires 'offers' (singular verb). 'program' should be plural 'programs' to match 'various'. Add commas to separate items and use 'a study-abroad program' for a specific program. Also split run-on sentence into two sentences for clarity.

× It's it can be challenging but I'm really enjoying it.

✓ It can be challenging, but I'm really enjoying it.

Redundant 'it' and incorrect use of 'it's it'. Remove extra 'it' and use a comma before 'but'. Present progressive 'I'm really enjoying it' is correct.

× I am currently high school student and my school offers various kinds of English program such as current issues and practical English and academic writing which help me improve my studying English.

✓ I am currently a high school student, and my school offers various kinds of English programs such as current issues, practical English, and academic writing which help me improve my English.

Missing article 'a' before 'high school student'. 'program' should be plural 'programs' to match 'various'. 'studying English' is awkward; use 'my English'. Add commas to separate list items and a comma before 'and' to join clauses.

× No, it's not because it takes about one hour from my home, which is really hard because I have to wake up every day area then my friends do.

✓ No, it's not, because it takes about one hour from my home, which is really hard because I have to wake up earlier every day than my friends do.

Awkward phrase 'area then my friends do' is incorrect. Use 'earlier' (comparative adverb) and 'than my friends do' for comparison. Add commas for clarity and correct word order.

× So it's really hard and challenging but it's worth going and learning up there.

✓ So it's really hard and challenging, but it's worth going and learning there.

Unnecessary 'up' after 'learning' and missing comma before 'but'. 'Learning there' is the correct phrase.

× Yes, I really like where the school is located because we can see beautiful ocean from my classroom which is really great and special.

✓ Yes, I really like where the school is located because we can see the beautiful ocean from my classroom, which is really great and special.

Missing definite article 'the' before 'beautiful ocean'. Add comma before 'which' to introduce the nonrestrictive clause. Pronoun use ('we' and 'my') is acceptable but ensure articles are correct.

× And seeing ocean from a stressful day really helps me unwind and relax.

✓ Seeing the ocean after a stressful day really helps me unwind and relax.

Use 'the ocean' with the definite article. 'From a stressful day' is unnatural; use 'after a stressful day' to express timing.

× Possibly I would like to work in Korea because I'm really interested in Korean culture such as Korean beauty products or Korean dramas, which is really a good PE important part of my life.

✓ Possibly, I would like to work in Korea because I'm really interested in Korean culture, such as Korean beauty products and Korean dramas, which are an important part of my life.

Subject-verb agreement with 'which' referring back to plural items: use 'are' not 'is'. Remove unclear 'PE' and reorder to 'an important part of my life'. Add commas for clarity.

× I'm really excited to try to move there.

✓ I'm really excited to try to move there.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable, but more natural alternatives exist such as 'I'm really excited to try moving there' or 'I'm really excited about moving there.' The original 'to try to move' is not incorrect.