Work— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be clearer and more grammatical. Start with a direct topic sentence (I am currently a student). Then add one or two specific details using linking words. Use correct tense and articles, and keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Ejemplo: I am currently a student. I recently finished my senior secondary studies in the medical stream and I am preparing for ALS entrance exams. I plan to pursue higher education abroad next year.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and concisely. Begin with a clear topic sentence (I don’t work at the moment). Provide a reason and a brief future plan using linking words like because or so. Correct grammar (I would, I am keen on).

Ejemplo: I don’t work at the moment because I am still studying. However, in the future I would like to work in a bakery because I am keen on learning how to make pastries.

Sugerencia: Be concise and avoid repetition. Start with a direct response (I’m not sure). Then give a brief, specific reason or imagined scenario using linking words (but, however). Use correct word order and singular/plural forms.

Ejemplo: I’m not sure because I haven’t worked there. However, if I did work in a bakery, I would hope for a friendly atmosphere, clean conditions, and warm, helpful colleagues.

Sugerencia: Give a clear opinion first (Yes or No) then support it with 1–2 specific reasons using linking words (because, for example). Avoid filler words and complete your sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like the workplace if the staff were friendly and cooperative. For example, I prefer places where colleagues share ideas and work as a team because that makes learning easier.

Sugerencia: Structure your answer: state your main plan, then add specific steps using linking words (first, then, after that). Use correct verb forms and clearer phrasing for intentions (I will, I plan to). Be specific about what you want to learn.

Ejemplo: First, I plan to go abroad to pursue higher education. After I finish my studies, I would like to work in bakeries to learn how to make different pastries and understand ingredients and techniques, so I will apply to several bakery shops for work experience.

× Well, recently I have completed my senior education and medical stream and after that I pursuing my ALS academic preparation and moving forward and I planning to pursue my higher education in abroad.

✓ Well, recently I completed my senior education in the medical stream, and after that I have been pursuing my ALS academic preparation. I am planning to pursue my higher education abroad.

Errors: incorrect tense forms and verb forms. 'I have completed' is acceptable but 'I pursuing' and 'I planning' lack auxiliary verbs. Use present perfect continuous 'have been pursuing' to show ongoing preparation; use 'I am planning' for present continuous. Use 'in the medical stream' for correct preposition, and 'abroad' without 'in'. Suggestions: include appropriate auxiliary verbs (have/been/am), match continuous vs completed actions, and correct prepositions.

× Actually I have mentioned earlier that I am a student so I'm not working yet right now but in future if I got the chance then I definitely work in a bakery shop because I was keen interested in them.

✓ Actually I mentioned earlier that I am a student, so I'm not working right now. In the future, if I get the chance, I will definitely work in a bakery shop because I am keenly interested in it.

Errors: tense and sentence structure. 'I have mentioned earlier' is wordy; simple past 'I mentioned earlier' is clearer. 'If I got the chance' should be conditional present 'if I get the chance'. 'I definitely work' needs future 'I will definitely work'. 'I was keen interested in them' is incorrect: use 'I am keenly interested in it' or 'them' -> 'it' (bakery shop). Suggestions: use correct conditional/future forms and correct pronoun agreement.

× Actually, I'm not working right now, so I'm not aware about the is it good place to work? But, uh, in case, if I got the opportunity to work, work at a any kind of shop or any kind of area, then I found out that place was very friendly and environment environment are very clean and all the people are very warm kind.

✓ Actually, I'm not working right now, so I'm not sure whether it is a good place to work. But if I get the opportunity to work at any kind of shop or in any area, I would find that place friendly, the environment clean, and the people warm and kind.

Errors: awkward word order, incorrect tense, and redundancy. 'not aware about the is it good place to work' should be 'not sure whether it is a good place to work'. 'If I got' should be 'if I get' for a real future possibility. 'I found out that place was' should be conditional 'I would find that place'. 'environment environment are very clean' duplicates and has subject-verb disagreement; use singular 'the environment is clean' or restructure. Suggestions: simplify sentences, use correct conditional tense, remove repetitions, and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× Like I actually think that if I'm working in a place that were very friendly and this stuff was very cooperative and they work in a teamwork or suggest or give the ideas from each other and I found out that place was very perfect for me. And but I'm not pretty sure because I'm.

✓ I actually think that if I were working in a place that was very friendly and the staff were very cooperative, and they worked as a team and shared ideas with each other, I would find that place perfect for me. But I'm not sure yet.

Errors: incorrect verb forms and subject-verb agreement. 'that were very friendly' should be 'that was very friendly' or use subjunctive 'if I were working...'. 'this stuff' should be 'the staff'; 'was very cooperative' -> 'were very cooperative' (staff as a collective can take plural). 'they work in a teamwork' -> 'they worked as a team'. 'I found out that place was very perfect' should be conditional 'I would find that place perfect'. Sentence fragment 'because I'm.' incomplete. Suggestions: use correct conditional/subjunctive structures, correct vocabulary ('staff'), complete sentences, and consistent verb agreement.

× My future plans like if I got the opportunity to go abroad then I definitely focusing on my higher education and after that I keen interested in bakery. So I definitely give the resume to the different shops of the bakery because I love to know how to make different kind of pastries, ingredients by putting on it.

✓ My future plans are that if I get the opportunity to go abroad, I will definitely focus on my higher education, and after that I am keenly interested in bakery work. So I will definitely send my resume to different bakeries because I would like to learn how to make different kinds of pastries and how to use various ingredients.

Errors: incorrect tense and verb forms. 'If I got' should be 'if I get' for a real future possibility; 'I definitely focusing' needs auxiliary 'I will definitely focus' or 'I am definitely focusing'. 'I keen interested in bakery' should be 'I am keenly interested in bakery work'. 'give the resume to the different shops of the bakery' -> 'send my resume to different bakeries'. 'different kind of pastries, ingredients by putting on it' is unclear; clarify as 'different kinds of pastries and how to use various ingredients'. Suggestions: use correct conditional/future constructions, correct collocations (send resume, bakeries), plural forms 'kinds', and clearer phrasing.