Work— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid run-on sentences and inappropriate tense/forms (use present perfect for duration: "I've been working..."). Use linking words like "and" or "which" correctly and stop at a natural point within five sentences.

Ejemplo: I'm a dietitian and I've been working in dietetics for almost ten years. I find the job motivating and rewarding because it allows me to educate people about nutrition and helps me maintain a healthy lifestyle.

Sugerencia: Use correct grammar and shorter sentences. Begin with a direct statement, then add one or two specific details linked with connectors like "because" or "so." Avoid incomplete endings and redundant phrases.

Ejemplo: I run my own clinic and I'm self-employed. It's next to my house, which is convenient for me and my three children, and it has a spacious, green garden and a comfortable reception area for patients.

Sugerencia: Keep answers complete and avoid filler words (uh, umm). Use clear linking to explain contrasts (e.g., "compared to"). Finish the thought—don't leave sentences hanging. Provide one concrete reason why it's good.

Ejemplo: Yes, it's a great place to work because the environment is calm and therapeutic compared to the busy city clinic I used to run. This tranquility helps both my patients and me feel more relaxed.

Sugerencia: Avoid repetition and irrelevant or unclear phrases. Use clear metaphors correctly and check vocabulary ("Bible" is incorrect here). Provide one or two specific examples of what you do to care for the place, and keep under five sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I love this place because I invested a lot of time creating the garden and building. I tend the plants every morning and regularly check the facility to make sure everything is welcoming for patients.

Sugerencia: Give a clear, direct answer about future plans and avoid trailing off. Use correct articles and plural/singular forms ("a very ambitious person"). If mentioning hobbies, explain briefly how they fit into your future timeline. Limit filler words and finish the statement with a concrete plan.

Ejemplo: I'm ambitious and currently managing several projects, so I plan to finish them before taking on new work. I also hope to return to rifle shooting, a hobby I paused for over ten years, when I turn 40 and have more free time.

× I'm a dietitian by a profession and it has been almost a decade since I'm working in the dietetics department and my field is both motivating and rewarding for me it not only provides a chance to me to educate my people regarding food and nutrition, but also helps me to keep myself fit and.

✓ I'm a dietitian by profession and it has been almost a decade since I have been working in the dietetics department. My field is both motivating and rewarding for me; it not only gives me the chance to educate people about food and nutrition, but also helps me to keep myself fit.

The sentence used 'since I'm working' which is incorrect for expressing a period that started in the past and continues to the present. The correct form is the present perfect continuous ('I have been working') or present perfect ('have worked') depending on nuance. Also 'by a profession' should be 'by profession', and punctuation was needed to separate clauses. Use 'gives me the chance' and 'people' instead of 'my people'. Suggestion: Use present perfect continuous with 'since' for actions that began in the past and continue to now and simplify phrases like 'by profession' and 'educate people about'.

× I'm self-employed, moreover I am run my own clinic.

✓ I'm self-employed; moreover, I run my own clinic.

'I am run' is ungrammatical because 'run' should be the base verb after the subject with the correct auxiliary. The correct structure is simple present 'I run my own clinic'. Also add punctuation for clarity. Suggestion: Use simple present for habitual facts: 'I run my own clinic.'

× My clinic is adjacent to my house so it is convenient for me to go there especially with my all three kids.

✓ My clinic is adjacent to my house, so it is convenient for me to go there, especially with all three of my kids.

The phrase 'with my all three kids' has incorrect word order; correct is 'all three of my kids' or 'my three kids'. Also add commas for readability. Suggestion: Place quantifier 'all three' before 'of my kids' and use commas to separate clauses.

× And the place is quite spacious with lots of green tree where we can play together and I also have a good reception area for my patient with all the amenities they.

✓ The place is quite spacious with lots of green trees where we can play together, and I also have a good reception area for my patients with all the amenities they need.

'Green tree' should be plural 'green trees' to match 'lots of'. 'Patient' should be plural 'patients'. The clause 'with all the amenities they' is incomplete; add 'need'. Suggestion: Ensure plural agreement after expressions like 'lots of' and complete relative clauses with an appropriate verb.

× Definitely, it is incredibly good place, the environment is pleasant and therapeutic.

✓ Definitely, it is an incredibly good place; the environment is pleasant and therapeutic.

The sentence omitted the indefinite article 'an' before 'incredibly good place'. Also punctuation improves flow. Suggestion: Use 'an' before singular nouns starting with a vowel sound: 'an incredibly good place'.

× Moreover, uh, it is tranquil, uh, in contrast to the bustling city where I used to run my clinic.

✓ Moreover, it is tranquil compared to the bustling city where I used to run my clinic.

'In contrast to' is acceptable, but 'compared to' is more natural here; remove filler 'uh' for clarity. No tense change needed. Suggestion: Avoid fillers and choose clearer comparative phrasing like 'compared to'.

× Umm, Then after some time I shifted here and uh, it not only provides.

✓ After some time I moved here, and it not only provides ...

'Shifted' is often used in South Asian English but 'moved' is more common in standard varieties. 'It not only provides' lacks the auxiliary 'does' only if negative; here the clause is incomplete and needs continuation. Also remove filler words. Suggestion: Use 'moved' for relocation and complete sentences; finish the 'not only ... but also' structure.

× Definitely, this place is very close to my heart. Moreover, I have poured my heart and soul into it, uh, and to construct, uh, the building and plants, lots of trees.

✓ Definitely, this place is very close to my heart. Moreover, I have poured my heart and soul into it, constructing the building and planting lots of trees.

The original mixes infinitive and gerund forms awkwardly ('to construct' should be 'constructing') and uses filler words. Use gerunds to describe ongoing or completed activities related to pouring heart and soul. Suggestion: Use parallel gerund forms for a list of actions: 'constructing... and planting...'.

× I nourish it every day. It just like a kid, I plant my tree in the morning and check each and every corner of Bible.

✓ I care for it every day. It's just like a child; I water my trees in the morning and check each and every corner of the property.

'Nourish it' is understandable but 'care for it' is more natural for a place. 'It just like a kid' lacks 'is' and should be 'it's just like a child'. 'I plant my tree' seems wrong tense — likely 'I water my trees' or 'I plant trees' depending on meaning. 'Corner of Bible' is incorrect; likely 'corner of the property' or 'garden'. Suggestion: Use 'it's' contraction or 'it is', match verbs to intended actions (water vs plant), and replace incorrect noun 'Bible' with the intended noun like 'property'.

× I'm very ambitious person, I'm already wearing several hats and really want to complete all the project before starting the next one.

✓ I'm a very ambitious person; I'm already wearing several hats and really want to complete all the projects before starting the next one.

Missing article 'a' before 'very ambitious person'. 'All the project' should be plural 'all the projects'. Suggestion: Use articles with singular count nouns and pluralize nouns after 'all the' when referring to multiple items.

× Although I'm also pursuing a little hobby, uh, which I, umm, stopped for uh, more than a decade and really want to return back to my rifle shooting game, uh, when I turn 40 And then I.

✓ Although I'm also pursuing a small hobby that I stopped more than a decade ago, I really want to return to rifle shooting when I turn 40.

'Stopped for more than a decade' should be 'stopped more than a decade ago' to indicate when the action ceased. 'Return back' is redundant; use 'return to'. 'Rifle shooting game' is awkward; 'rifle shooting' or 'shooting' is better. The sentence was incomplete; it has been made complete. Suggestion: Use 'ago' with past time expressions, avoid redundant 'return back', and finish sentences fully.