Work— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Improve clarity and conciseness: start with a direct topic sentence (“I work as an English teacher”) then add one clear supporting detail. Correct place names and avoid redundancy (e.g., don’t repeat ‘I enjoy’ twice). Use precise vocabulary (e.g., ‘watching my students mature’).

Ejemplo: I work as an English teacher at Hong Kong High School in Kuiphong. I enjoy the job because I can communicate with students and watch them become more confident and mature over time.

Sugerencia: Focus on clear pronunciation and grammar, and avoid filler words. Provide a concise topic sentence about the workplace, then one precise supporting detail about commute. Use correct verbs and numbers. For example, replace hesitations (‘uh’) with pauses and fix grammar (‘I take a minibus and it takes about 45 minutes’).

Ejemplo: I work at a Christian secondary school in Kuiphong. I take a minibus to work every day, and the journey usually takes about 45 minutes.

Sugerencia: Organize the response into a clear opinion followed by a relevant, coherent example. Avoid long, unclear anecdotes with grammar errors and pronoun confusion. Use linking words (for example, because, so) and correct tense/word choice (e.g., ‘the principal was supportive; she didn’t mind my sick leave’). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, it is. For example, when I was ill and admitted to hospital, the principal was very supportive and did not criticize me for taking sick leave, so she later offered me a permanent contract.

Sugerencia: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear statement of preference, then give one specific reason. Correct grammar (e.g., ‘It is very difficult to get; many teachers dream of a permanent government post because it offers job security and better benefits’). Use linking words like ‘because’ and ‘so’.

Ejemplo: Yes, I like working there because the principal trusted me and later offered me a permanent contract. In Hong Kong, permanent government posts are hard to get and are valued for their job security and benefits.

Sugerencia: Give a clear, organized plan: start with short-term goals, then long-term goals, using linking words (first, then, in the long term). Correct vocabulary and collocations (e.g., ‘polish my teaching methods’, ‘motivate my students’, ‘seek promotion’, ‘become a vice-principal’). Keep sentences concise and grammatically correct.

Ejemplo: In the short term, I want to polish my teaching methods and design more interactive activities to better motivate my students. In the long term, I hope to seek promotion and eventually become a vice-principal.

× I quite enjoy my work because I like communicating with my students and I also enjoy seeing them becoming more mature.

✓ I quite enjoy my work because I like communicating with my students and I also enjoy seeing them become more mature.

Incorrect use of verb form after 'seeing' with object pronoun: use bare infinitive 'become' after verbs of perception like 'see' (see someone do something). Replace 'becoming' with 'become' to match standard English.

× I work as an English haiku high school teachers and uh, a Christian high school, so I work in Kuiphong.

✓ I work as an English teacher at a Christian high school in Kuiphong.

Multiple plural/singular and word order issues: 'teachers' should be singular 'teacher' to match 'I'. 'haiku' appears to be an error; likely 'at a Christian high school' expresses location. Use 'at' with institutions. Reorder phrase for natural English.

× So every day I need to talk, uh, a minibus to go to work and which took me around 45 minutes.

✓ So every day I need to take a minibus to go to work and it takes me around 45 minutes.

Incorrect verb and preposition: 'talk' should be 'take' for transport. 'a minibus' is correct but use 'take a minibus'. Also clause tense mismatch: use present simple 'it takes me' for habitual action instead of past 'took'. Remove 'which' and replace with 'and it' to connect independent clause.

× I work as an English teacher in the Hong Kong High School, which is located in Kuiphong.

✓ I work as an English teacher at a high school in Hong Kong, which is located in Kuiphong.

Article and proper noun use: 'the Hong Kong High School' implies a specific named school; if speaking generally say 'a high school in Hong Kong'. Also 'in Kuiphong' modifies the school location. Use 'at' with workplace/institution.

× When I was working there and then I got admitted to hospital, the principal was supplies are unlike many other principles in Hong Kong.

✓ When I was working there and then I was admitted to the hospital, the principal was supportive, unlike many other principals in Hong Kong.

Multiple errors: use passive 'was admitted to the hospital' for being hospitalized. 'supplies are' is incorrect; likely meant 'supportive'. 'principles' should be 'principals'. Correct present/past forms and word choice.

× They don't like employee to take sick leave because it and are more cost to the school.

✓ They don't like employees to take sick leave because it is more costly for the school.

Incorrect noun number 'employee' should be plural 'employees'. 'it and are more cost' is garbled; correct to 'it is more costly for the school' using adjective 'costly' and preposition 'for'.

× But my principal didn't show. Any disappointment at me, she just saw apathy and he carries a lot.

✓ But my principal didn't show any disappointment toward me; she was very understanding and cared a lot.

Fragmented and incorrect word choices: 'didn't show. Any disappointment at me' needs to be combined. 'saw apathy' is wrong; intended 'was understanding' or 'showed no disappointment'. 'he carries a lot' incorrect pronoun and phrase; use 'cared a lot'.

× And at the end of the school year he also decided to give me a permanent contract.

✓ And at the end of the school year he also decided to offer me a permanent contract.

Verb choice: 'give me a permanent contract' is understandable but 'offer me' is more natural. Maintain past tense 'decided' consistent with 'offered' context.

× Yes, as I mentioned, I like where I work a lot because you know, I have, I had taken so many sick leave, but my principal still gave me a permanent contract.

✓ Yes, as I mentioned, I like where I work a lot because I have taken so much sick leave, but my principal still gave me a permanent contract.

Tense and article errors: choose present perfect 'I have taken' to show experience up to now. 'so many sick leave' is incorrect: use 'so much sick leave' (uncountable) or 'so many sick days' (countable). Remove redundant 'I had'.

× In Hong Kong. It is a very difficult thing is to get.

✓ In Hong Kong, it is very difficult to get.

Sentence fragments and article use: combine sentences and remove extra 'a' and 'is' to form correct clause 'it is very difficult to get'.

× It is kind of everybody's every teacher, every teacher dreams to get a permanent role.

✓ It is something every teacher dreams of getting: a permanent role.

Awkward repetition and preposition: 'dreams to get' should be 'dreams of getting'. Remove duplicate 'every teacher'. Reorder for clarity.

× In a government setting because it offer a more secure position and somehow they have a better benefit as well.

✓ In a government setting because it offers a more secure position and generally has better benefits as well.

Subject-verb agreement and noun number: 'offer' should be 'offers' to agree with 'it'. 'benefit' should be plural 'benefits'. Use 'generally' for natural adverb.

× To be honest, I have never thought about it, but right now I want to Polish my pedagogies and try to think of some more interactive activities that I can motivate my student learning.

✓ To be honest, I have never thought about it, but right now I want to polish my pedagogical skills and try to think of more interactive activities that can motivate my students' learning.

Capitalization and word choice: 'Polish' should be lowercase 'polish'. 'pedagogies' is awkward; use 'pedagogical skills'. Use plural possessive 'students' learning' and 'motivate' should be followed by object; restructure to 'activities that can motivate my students' learning'.

× And maybe in the long term I will see if I can secure it any opportunities for promotion and maybe be a leader in some company and.

✓ And maybe in the long term I will look for any opportunities for promotion and maybe become a leader in a school or company.

Incorrect verb phrases and extra words: 'secure it any opportunities' is ungrammatical; use 'look for opportunities' or 'secure opportunities'. 'be a leader in some company and.' is incomplete; use 'become a leader in a school or company.' Maintain future intention with 'will'.

× So try to be a vice principal in the futures.

✓ So I will try to become a vice principal in the future.

Tense and noun form: 'try to be' is acceptable but better 'I will try to become'. 'futures' should be singular 'future'. Add subject 'I' for clear sentence.