Work— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 発言を明確で簡潔にまとめ、文の途中で切れないようにしてください。冒頭で直接質問に答え（I’m not working at the moment）、その後に理由と具体的な行動（留学準備、英語力向上）を2〜3文以内で補足すると自然です。言い切れなかった部分（"My academic skills. Although I'm."）は省くか、完全な文に直してください。接続語（because, so, while）を正しく使い、冗長な語や繰り返しを避けましょう。

Ejemplo: I’m not working at the moment because I’m preparing to study abroad next year. Therefore, I’m focusing on improving my English and strengthening my academic skills by taking intensive classes.

Sugerencia: 質問に対してまず簡潔に答え（I’m not working now; I worked until March as...）、次に過去の職場の具体的な情報（どの学年を教えていたか、担当科目や仕事内容）を加えると説得力が増します。理由を述べる際は接続詞（because, so）でつなぎ、文は2〜3文に収めましょう。

Ejemplo: I’m not working now; until March I was an English teacher at a high school, teaching mainly 10th and 11th graders. It was very rewarding because I helped students improve their speaking and exam skills, so I’d like to continue teaching in the future.

Sugerencia: 答えを冒頭で明確に示した上で、理由を簡潔に述べてください。非流暢な埋め音（uh, um）やタイミング表示（2:00）を話さないようにし、文を途中で切らずに完結させましょう。具体例（同僚のサポート方法や働きやすさの例）を一つ加えると自然さが増します。

Ejemplo: Yes, it was a great place to work because my colleagues and managers were very supportive. For example, they often helped me design lesson plans and provided feedback, which made the atmosphere friendly and productive.

Sugerencia: 質問は現在の希望を尋ねているので時制に注意し、簡潔に答えましょう（I would like to work there / I liked working there）。文章は短くし、文法的な誤り（"in my colleagues"）を直してください。理由は一つか二つに絞り、接続詞（because, so）を適切に使って流れを整えます。

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to work there because the office atmosphere was very comfortable and my colleagues were friendly, so I could concentrate on my work.

Sugerencia: 冒頭で直接将来の計画を述べ（I plan to...）、明確な順序と理由を示しましょう。不要な語（"Money Future workflows"）や繰り返し（"to the to Graduate School"）を取り除き、文は2〜3文以内にまとめてください。具体性を出すために、いつ頃進学したいかやどの分野で研修したいかを付け加えると良いです。

Ejemplo: I plan to go to graduate school next year to improve my teaching skills, and after graduating I will continue working as an English teacher. During my studies I hope to specialize in TESOL to become a better classroom instructor.

× At the moment I'm not working because I am preparing to study abroad next year, so I am focusing on improving my English. My academic skills. Although I'm.

✓ At the moment I'm not working because I am preparing to study abroad next year, so I am focusing on improving my English and my academic skills.

The student produced sentence fragments ('My academic skills.' 'Although I'm.') and an incomplete subordinate clause. Combine related ideas into one complete sentence and remove the unfinished 'Although I'm.' to form a grammatically complete statement. Suggestion: connect the phrases with 'and' or use a relative clause (e.g., 'and I am improving my academic skills') to avoid fragments.

× Until this March, I worked as an English teacher at high school.

✓ Until this March, I worked as an English teacher at a high school.

Missing article 'a' before 'high school' is an article error (use 'a' with singular countable nouns). Also the past tense 'worked' is correct for finished employment. Suggestion: include the indefinite article 'a'.

× My job was very rewarding, so I'd like to continue.

✓ My job was very rewarding, so I'd like to continue teaching in the future.

The verb phrase 'continue' is intransitive and requires an object or gerund to clarify what the speaker wants to continue. Adding 'teaching' or 'working there' completes the sentence. Suggestion: use 'continue teaching' or 'continue working there'.

× 2:00 Because my colleagues and the bosses are very, very friendly and my students were so nice, that's why. They uh, it was uh.

✓ Because my colleagues and bosses were very friendly and my students were nice, it was a pleasant place to work.

The original contains filler sounds, repetition and an unclear structure. Remove fillers and unify tense (past: 'were' to match 'worked until March'). Combine clauses into a clear result clause: 'it was a pleasant place to work.' Suggestion: avoid disfluencies and form a complete cause-effect sentence.

× I would like the place where I work because the office atmosphere was so comfortable in my colleagues are very friendly so I can concentrate on my my job.

✓ I would like the place where I work because the office atmosphere is comfortable and my colleagues are very friendly, so I can concentrate on my job.

Mixed tenses ('would like' with past 'was') and extra words ('in'). Use present tense 'is' to describe the current atmosphere and correct word order: 'office atmosphere is comfortable' and 'my colleagues are very friendly.' Remove duplicate word 'my.' Suggestion: keep tense consistent and eliminate unnecessary words.

× Money Future workflows are that I will continue teaching after going to Graduate School to improve my teaching skills.

✓ My future plan is that I will continue teaching after going to graduate school to improve my teaching skills.

The phrase 'Money Future workflows' is incoherent and appears to be word salad. Replace with 'My future plan' and use lowercase for 'graduate school.' The rest of the clause is fine with future tense 'will continue.' Suggestion: state 'My future plan is...' or 'In the future, I will...'.

× I'd like to go to the to Graduate School.

✓ I'd like to go to graduate school.

Contains duplicate article 'to the to' and unnecessary capitalization. Remove the extra words and use 'graduate school' without 'the' in general statements. Suggestion: simplify to 'I'd like to go to graduate school.'