Work— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct medical terms and grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid redundancy (e.g., don’t repeat the full form and explanation twice). Use correct prepositions and pluralization.

Ejemplo: I’m a second-year resident in the ENT (ear, nose and throat) department at a government hospital in Faridkot. I treat a wide range of cases such as chronic ear infections and nasal disorders, which helps me gain varied clinical experience.

Sugerencia: Give a direct topic sentence then one clear supporting detail about the hospital’s role or patient population. Avoid unclear abbreviations like “ON” and watch small grammar issues (capitalization, articles).

Ejemplo: I work at a government tertiary-care hospital in Faridkot, Punjab. Because it’s a referral centre, patients come from surrounding districts for specialized ENT treatment.

Sugerencia: Give one clear reason and support it with a specific example. Improve sentence structure and remove repetition (e.g., avoid saying 'Primary Health centre' multiple times). Use linking words (because, therefore, for example) to connect ideas.

Ejemplo: Yes, it’s a great place to work because it’s a tertiary centre where I encounter many complex ENT cases. For example, I regularly manage advanced sinus and ear surgeries and attend academic seminars that improve my clinical skills.

Sugerencia: Answer directly then give two concise, well-linked reasons. Combine similar ideas to avoid repetition and improve fluency. Use linking words like 'also' and 'because' correctly in one sentence.

Ejemplo: Yes, I like working there because it has a calm atmosphere and is close to my hometown, so I can visit family easily. Also, as a tertiary centre it offers diverse clinical exposure that helps me improve professionally.

Sugerencia: State your plan clearly in one sentence, then give a brief reason. Avoid repetition (e.g., 'return' and 'back') and unnecessary details. Use a linking word for the reason (because, since).

Ejemplo: I plan to return to government service after completing my residency because I am a government service candidate and want to continue serving my community. This post will allow me to apply the skills I’ve gained during training.

× I am currently working as a second year resident in the department of Auto Rhino Laryngology, also known as ENT, which specializes in treating the patients who concern with ear, nose and throat.

✓ I am currently working as a second-year resident in the Department of Otorhinolaryngology, also known as ENT, which specializes in treating patients who are concerned with ear, nose, and throat conditions.

Use hyphen for compound adjective 'second-year'. Department and Otorhinolaryngology are proper nouns/correct spelling and capitalization. 'the patients who concern with' is ungrammatical: use 'patients who are concerned with' or simply 'treating patients with'. Also add commas in a list 'ear, nose, and throat' and remove unnecessary 'the' before 'patients'.

× I work in a small city of Faridkot at a government hospital.

✓ I work in the small city of Faridkot at a government hospital.

Use 'in the city of Faridkot' or 'in the small city of Faridkot'. 'in a small city of Faridkot' is incorrect because Faridkot is a specific city so use 'the' before 'small city' or remove 'a' and use 'in Faridkot'.

× I work at a government hospital in the state of Punjab, basically in the city Faridkot.

✓ I work at a government hospital in the state of Punjab, basically in the city of Faridkot.

Add article 'of' in 'city of Faridkot' for correct collocation. Also 'the city Faridkot' is less natural than 'the city of Faridkot'.

× It's a tertiary care Health Center in ON in which people from different areas come to get themselves treated.

✓ It's a tertiary care health center in which people from different areas come to get treated.

Do not capitalize 'Health Center' in mid-sentence; use lowercase. Remove unnecessary 'ON' (unclear) or replace with correct location if needed. 'get themselves treated' is wordy; 'get treated' is natural. Also 'in which' is acceptable but could be 'where' for spoken style.

× The number one reason would be it's a tertiary healthcare centre and not any Primary Health centre.

✓ The main reason is that it's a tertiary healthcare centre and not a primary health centre.

Use 'main reason is that' rather than 'would be'. Use lowercase for 'primary health centre' and use article 'a' before it. 'any' is unnecessary and awkward here.

× I get to see a lot of cases which I would not be able to see them in Primary Health centre and also it enables me to attend to various seminars, districts.

✓ I get to see a lot of cases that I would not be able to see in a primary health centre, and it also enables me to attend various seminars and district meetings.

Do not use both 'which' and 'them' (redundant object). Use 'that' or 'which' without 'them'. Lowercase 'primary health centre' and add article 'a'. 'Attend to' is unnecessary with 'attend'; 'various seminars and district meetings' clarifies 'districts' which was incomplete.

× Yes, I would like the place where I work because of its calm atmosphere. Because it's close to my hometown, I can get to visit my hometown whenever I get free.

✓ Yes, I like the place where I work because of its calm atmosphere. Because it's close to my hometown, I can visit my hometown whenever I get free time.

Avoid repeating 'would like' which suggests conditional; 'I like' is more direct. 'Get to visit my hometown' is acceptable but 'can visit my hometown' is simpler. 'Whenever I get free' is incomplete; say 'whenever I get free time'.

× Also, it's a tertiary healthcare centre enabling me to improve my skills.

✓ Also, it's a tertiary healthcare centre, enabling me to improve my skills.

Add a comma before the participle clause for correct punctuation. Article usage is fine; ensure consistent spelling 'centre'/'center'.

× In future I plan to return to government services as I am a government service candidate currently on leave to complete my residency here at hospital.

✓ In the future, I plan to return to government service as I am a government service candidate currently on leave to complete my residency here at the hospital.

Add article 'the' in 'in the future' and before 'hospital'. Use 'government service' (uncountable) rather than 'services'. Add commas for clarity.

× So after my residency is completed I will return back to my government services.

✓ So after my residency is completed, I will return to my government service.

Do not use 'return back' (redundant); 'return to' is correct. Use 'government service' (no plural) and add a comma after the introductory clause.