Work— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Improve clarity, grammar and conciseness. Start with a clear topic sentence (I am a clinical dietitian), avoid unclear phrases (e.g. “Aavukku”), fix tense and article errors, and reduce redundancy. Use linking words (for example, “also” and “in addition”) to connect supporting details and keep the response within 3–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: I am a clinical dietitian and I also run an organisation called Sports Dietitian of India. I provide therapeutic meal plans for patients with metabolic disorders, and I also visit schools and universities to teach students about food and nutrition. This work is very important to me because I want to improve public health.

Sugerencia: Make the main point clear and correct grammatical mistakes. Use one clear topic sentence (I run my own clinic near my home), then add concise supporting details with linking words (for example, “because” and “so”). Avoid filler words and repeated phrases; limit to 3–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: I run my own clinic, which is located very close to my home. Because it is nearby and convenient, I sometimes bring my homeschooled children with me when there is no one else at home. The clinic has enough space for consultations and parking.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and finish sentences fully. Start with a clear opinion (Yes, it is a good place), then give specific reasons using linking words (for example, “because” and “therefore”). Remove hesitations and complete comparisons; be specific about benefits for patients.

Ejemplo: Yes, it is a great place to work because I moved from a busy city to a semi-rural area to offer patients a calm, green environment. This peaceful setting complements dietary consultations and encourages patients to adopt healthier lifestyles.

Sugerencia: Be concise and correct vocabulary errors (e.g. “no hurt” unclear). Begin with a clear statement (Yes, I like it), then give two brief, specific reasons with linking words like “because” and “also.” Avoid long run-on sentences and repetition.

Ejemplo: Yes, I really like working here because it is my hometown and I have lived here for nearly ten years. I now have better facilities than before, including ample space, parking, and security, which helps me treat my patients more effectively.

Sugerencia: Start with a clear topic sentence stating your plan (I plan to work part-time as a lecturer). Then give specific reasons and use linking language (for example, “because” and “so that”). Correct grammar (article use, verb forms) and avoid vague phrases; keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: I plan to work part-time as a lecturer while running my clinic because I want to share my experience with young dietitians. I believe teaching will help them learn more quickly and avoid mistakes I made during my 15-year career, so they can progress faster.

× Aavukku Clinical dietitian by profession and I also run an organization called Sports Dietitian of India.

✓ I am a clinical dietitian by profession and I also run an organization called Sports Dietitians of India.

Missing auxiliary verb 'am' and incorrect capitalization and word form. Use 'I am' for a complete subject-verb structure and capitalize only proper nouns. 'Dietitians' fits the organization name more naturally. Suggestion: always include the correct form of the verb 'to be' and check capitalization and noun forms.

× I am providing therapeutic like chart to the patients who are suffering from metabolic disorders.

✓ I provide therapeutic charts to patients who are suffering from metabolic disorders.

Incorrect progressive tense and awkward phrase 'therapeutic like chart'. Use simple present 'provide' for habitual actions and plural 'charts' for countable items. Also remove 'like' which is incorrect here. Suggestion: use simple present for regular duties and correct noun forms.

× Moreover, I am visiting school, colleges and universities to educate all the students regarding medical of food and nutrition.

✓ Moreover, I visit schools, colleges, and universities to educate students about the medicine of food and nutrition.

Use of progressive 'am visiting' is odd for repeated actions; use simple present 'visit'. 'School, colleges and universities' needs plural nouns. Preposition 'regarding' is acceptable but 'about' is more natural; 'medical of food and nutrition' is ungrammatical — likely 'medicine of food and nutrition' or 'nutrition and dietetics'. Suggestion: use plural nouns, simple present for habitual actions, and correct noun phrases.

× I'm central employed and I'm running my own clinic since a decade.

✓ I'm centrally employed and I have been running my own clinic for a decade.

Wrong adverb form 'central employed' should be 'centrally employed'. 'I'm running... since a decade' mixes present continuous with 'since' incorrectly; use present perfect continuous 'have been running' and 'for a decade' for duration. Suggestion: use correct adverb forms and present perfect for actions continuing up to now with a duration.

× It is uh, just an act to my next to my house and always convenient to go there and all.

✓ It is just next to my house and always convenient to go there.

Phrase 'an act to my next to my house' is ungrammatical. Remove filler words and redundant phrases. Use 'next to my house' to indicate proximity. Suggestion: eliminate fillers and use clear prepositional phrases.

× I sometimes I also take my kids along with me because they are homeschooled and when we have no elder in our house, they uh, go with me to my clinic.

✓ Sometimes I take my kids with me because they are homeschooled, and when there is no elder at home, they go with me to the clinic.

Redundant 'I sometimes I also' and awkward 'we have no elder in our house'. Use 'there is no elder at home' or 'no adult at home'. Also 'along with me' is wordy; 'with me' is sufficient. Suggestion: avoid redundancy and use natural expressions for absence of adults.

× Definitely, it is incredible place.

✓ Definitely, it is an incredible place.

Missing indefinite article 'an' before a singular countable noun 'place'. Suggestion: include articles before singular countable nouns.

× Uh, I moreover, I moved from a bustling city, from this semi rural area so that I can have enough green space and provide a therapeutic environment to my patients along with the dietary consultations because, uh, it sets an example to them that it is umm, equally important to live in a.

✓ I moved from a bustling city to this semi-rural area so that I can have enough green space and provide a therapeutic environment to my patients along with dietary consultations, because it sets an example that it is equally important to live in a healthy environment.

Redundant and misplaced phrases, incorrect prepositions ('from this semi rural area' should be 'to this semi-rural area'), missing hyphen in 'semi-rural', and sentence ends abruptly 'live in a.' Needs completion: 'live in a healthy environment'. Suggestion: structure the sentence with correct prepositions, remove fillers, and complete the final idea.

× Definitely this place is very close to my no hurt and moreover it is my hometown and it has been almost a decade since I'm living here I have all the amenities to treat my patients in much better way which I hadn't when I was running my clinic in the city moreover I have enough space for parking and providing the guard.

✓ Definitely this place is very close to my heart; moreover, it is my hometown and I have been living here for almost a decade. I have all the amenities to treat my patients much better than when I ran my clinic in the city. I also have enough space for parking and for a security guard.

Multiple problems: 'no hurt' should be 'heart' (word choice), incorrect tense 'since I'm living here' should be 'I have been living here for...'. Run-on sentence needs punctuation. 'In much better way which I hadn't' is ungrammatical — use 'much better than when I ran my clinic in the city'. 'Providing the guard' should be 'for a security guard'. Suggestion: correct word choice, use present perfect for duration, compare with 'than', and break into sentences.

× I'm very ambitious person, I really want to work part time as a lecturer during the clinic hours.

✓ I'm a very ambitious person; I really want to work part-time as a lecturer during clinic hours.

Missing article 'a' before 'very ambitious person' and hyphenation 'part-time'. Punctuation to join clauses. Suggestion: include necessary articles and use hyphens for compound modifiers.

× I have gained enough experience and I really want to pass this information to the budding dietitian so they can excel well much early as compared to me because I took almost 15 years to be at this level.

✓ I have gained enough experience and I really want to pass this information to budding dietitians so they can excel much earlier than I did, because it took me almost 15 years to reach this level.

Pluralize 'dietitian' to 'dietitians' to match 'budding' plural. Use comparative 'earlier than I did' instead of 'much early as compared to me'. Tense and word order: 'it took me' is correct for past duration; 'to reach this level' is the correct phrase. Suggestion: use plural nouns when referring to a group, correct comparative adverb 'earlier', and use clear past constructions.