Work— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words and correct collocations (e.g., "media design at university", "3D motion graphics"). Reduce hesitation words (umm, uh).

Ejemplo: I am a student studying media design at university. I specialize in 3D motion graphics and animation, and I enjoy creating short animated sequences. After I graduate, I hope to work as a 3D motion graphics designer in a studio.

Sugerencia: Answer directly then expand with a specific detail. Correct grammar (use present simple: "I don't work now"). Use one linking phrase to connect ideas and avoid repeating phrases.

Ejemplo: I don't work at the moment; I study at a university in Busan. My campus has a lot of greenery and attractive scenery, which makes it a pleasant place for students to study and relax.

Sugerencia: Respond directly to the question and adapt to context (talk about studying place if you don't work). Use clear reasons and a linking word (because/so). Correct grammar and reduce filler words.

Ejemplo: Although I don't work, my campus is a great place to study. Because it has plenty of greenery and quiet areas, I can relax between classes and concentrate better on my work.

Sugerencia: Clarify the situation and give a direct answer. Fix contradictions ("I'm not studying at university" vs earlier). Say what kind of place you would like and give a specific reason. Use correct vocabulary ("cozy atmosphere", "cafe9/cafe").

Ejemplo: I don't currently work, and I am studying at university, but I like studying in coffee shops. My favorite place is a café near campus because it has a cozy atmosphere, comfortable seats and good coffee, which helps me focus.

Sugerencia: Give a clear, structured response: state your plan, then provide specific steps and reasons. Use correct verb forms ("after I graduate next year, I will apply for jobs in 3D animation"). Avoid repetition and finish sentences fully.

Ejemplo: After I graduate next year, I plan to apply for jobs in the 3D animation industry. I would like to work as a 3D animator producing short films and commercials, so I am building a portfolio of animation work to show potential employers.

× I'm a current student, umm, I'm studying at media design and university.

✓ I'm currently a student; I'm studying media design at university.

The original sentence misuses word order and articles. 'A current student' is acceptable but 'currently a student' is more natural. 'Studying at media design and university' has wrong preposition and order. Use 'studying media design at university' to show the subject studied and the place. Use proper article placement and preposition. Suggestion: Place adverbs correctly (currently before 'a student') and use 'studying X at university' to indicate field and place.

× I'm interested, uh, because I'm interested in media design involving umm, 3D motion graphics, uh, 3D animations or motion graphics.

✓ I'm interested in media design, especially 3D motion graphics and 3D animation.

Redundant 'I'm interested' and awkward gerund phrase 'involving ... motion graphics'. Use a clearer noun phrase and parallel structure: 'especially 3D motion graphics and 3D animation.' Suggestion: Avoid repetition and keep parallel noun forms.

× So after I graduate, I would like, I would like to work in a 3D.

✓ So after I graduate, I would like to work in 3D animation.

The phrase 'work in a 3D' is incomplete and ungrammatical. Add the noun 'animation' to complete the field. Remove repeated phrase 'I would like.' Suggestion: Complete the field name and avoid repetition.

× I'm not I'm don't work now, but I was I was.

✓ I don't work now, but I did before.

The original mixes present and past negatives and repetitions. Use 'I don't work now' for present negative and 'but I did before' to indicate past employment. Keep tense consistency. Suggestion: Use concise correct negative form 'I don't' and a simple past statement for previous action.

× I'm a studying at a university in Busan, so my campus has a lot of greenery and attractive scenery so it it is useful for students to enhance their study.

✓ I'm studying at a university in Busan, so my campus has a lot of greenery and attractive scenery, which is useful for students to improve their studying.

Incorrect article 'a studying' and repeated 'so'. Use 'I'm studying' (present continuous). 'It it is' is duplicated. 'Enhance their study' is awkward; 'improve their studying' or 'help students study better' is clearer. Suggestion: Remove duplicate words, correct verb form, and use a relative clause for clarity.

× Uh, I'm not I don't work now, but it is good place.

✓ I don't work now, but it is a good place.

Redundant 'I'm not I don't' should be 'I don't'. Missing article before 'good place' — use 'a good place.' Suggestion: Use a single negative form and include the indefinite article.

× It is great place to study on my campus.

✓ It is a great place to study on my campus.

Missing indefinite article 'a' before 'great place.' English requires an article before singular countable nouns. Suggestion: Use 'a' or 'the' as appropriate before singular nouns.

× Umm, because my campus a lot of umm, great greenery.

✓ Umm, because my campus has a lot of great greenery.

Missing verb 'has' to link campus and its feature. Also 'a lot of' requires a following noun; include 'has'. Suggestion: Use 'has a lot of' when describing possession.

× It is useful for take a rest.

✓ It is useful for taking a rest.

After 'useful for' use the gerund form 'taking' not the base verb 'take.' Suggestion: Use gerund after prepositions: 'useful for taking a rest' or better 'good for resting.'

× So I love my campus.

✓ So I love my campus.

This sentence is acceptable as is. No correction needed.

× Uh, I'm don't now I'm don't work, but I'm not studying at university.

✓ I don't work now; I'm studying at university.

Original has contradictory phrases and incorrect negative form 'I'm don't.' Use 'I don't' for present negative. Remove 'but I'm not studying' which contradicts later claim. Keep consistent meaning. Suggestion: Use consistent statements and correct negative auxiliaries.

× Uh, I'm studying now these days I'm studying English.

✓ These days I'm studying English.

Redundant 'I'm studying now these days I'm studying.' Simplify to 'These days I'm studying English.' Suggestion: Avoid repetition; use one clear time expression.

× So I would like the place like Gotpe.

✓ So I would like a place like Gotpe.

Missing article before 'place' and awkward phrasing. Use 'a place like Gotpe' to indicate an example place. Suggestion: Include indefinite article when referring to an example place.

× It is my favorite study place because it is foods are cozy and umm.

✓ It is my favorite study place because the food is cozy and the atmosphere is comfortable.

Original mixes singular/plural and has 'it is foods are' which is ungrammatical. Choose singular 'food is' or plural 'foods are' correctly and complete the idea. 'Cozy' suits atmosphere, not food; rephrase to 'food is good' and 'atmosphere is cozy' or combine as above. Suggestion: Keep subject-verb agreement and separate ideas into clear clauses.

× My future work plans I don't know, but after I graduate in next year, I immediately work.

✓ I don't know my future work plans, but after I graduate next year, I will start working immediately.

Awkward word order and incorrect future expression. Use 'I will start working' or 'I will immediately look for work.' 'In next year' should be 'next year.' Suggestion: Use 'will' or 'going to' for future intentions and correct adverb placement.

× I immediately apply for a work in 3D animation field.

✓ I will immediately apply for a job in the 3D animation field.

Use 'apply for a job' not 'apply for a work.' Include article 'the' before '3D animation field' and use future 'will' to match 'after I graduate.' Suggestion: Use 'apply for a job' and appropriate articles.

× So I want to work in a making animations, so I would like to be a.

✓ So I want to work in making animations; I would like to be an animator.

'Work in a making animations' is ungrammatical. Use 'work in making animations' or better 'work in animation' and complete the profession: 'be an animator.' Ensure correct article 'an' before a vowel sound. Suggestion: Use standard job title 'animator' and proper articles.