Work— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct small grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one brief detail using a linking word. Avoid filler words and repetition.

Ejemplo: I'm a medical doctor and also a graduate student. Because of this dual role, my schedule is very busy, but I find it rewarding because I keep learning new skills.

Sugerencia: Make the sentence more natural by adding articles and a small extra detail to make it specific. Use a linking word if you add reasons or descriptions.

Ejemplo: I work at a hospital in the suburbs of Colbert City. It’s a general hospital that serves several nearby communities, so we see a wide range of cases.

Sugerencia: Avoid vague phrasing and unkind descriptions. Respond directly, then explain briefly with a linking word and specific reasons. Use neutral, respectful language when describing patients' backgrounds.

Ejemplo: Some people think it isn’t an ideal workplace because the area has many low-income residents. However, I value the experience since we treat diverse cases and can make a real difference for vulnerable patients.

Sugerencia: Give a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers and correct grammar (use 'fulfilled' not 'fulfilling' for feelings). Add one specific reason with a linking word.

Ejemplo: Yes, I do. Because many people here need medical care, I feel fulfilled every day knowing our work helps the community.

Sugerencia: Make your goal clear and correct the unclear phrase. Start with a direct statement of your plan, then add a short reason or how you will use your experience. Avoid unclear place names or wording.

Ejemplo: I plan to become a university researcher so I can apply my clinical experience to public health research. This would allow me to study local health issues and develop better treatment programs for the region.

× I'm working as a medical doctor, but I'm also studying at as a graduate student, which is pretty busy but quite fulfilling.

✓ I work as a medical doctor, and I'm also studying as a graduate student, which is quite busy but very fulfilling.

Use simple present 'I work' for a regular job rather than 'I'm working' which implies temporary action. Remove extra 'at'. Replace 'but' with 'and' to show two simultaneous facts; 'quite busy but very fulfilling' improves contrast and word choice.

× I work at the hospital located in suburban area in Colbert City.

✓ I work at the hospital located in a suburban area of Colbert City.

Add the article 'a' before 'suburban area' and use preposition 'of' to show belonging to Colbert City. 'In suburban area' is missing an article.

× Actually they say it is not good place to work because there are a lot of low social economic status people.

✓ Actually, they say it is not a good place to work because there are a lot of people of low socioeconomic status.

Insert comma after 'Actually'. Add article 'a' before 'good place'. 'Low social economic status' is a word order error; use the compound adjective 'socioeconomic' and correct noun phrase 'people of low socioeconomic status'.

× Yes, absolutely. There are a lot of people who need our treatment, so I'm, I'm, I've, I'm feeling fulfilling every day so much.

✓ Yes, absolutely. There are a lot of people who need our treatment, so I feel very fulfilled every day.

Remove filler repetitions and incorrect 'I'm feeling fulfilling' which wrongly uses an adjective form; 'fulfilled' describes the speaker's feeling, so use 'I feel fulfilled'. Use 'very' for emphasis and place adverb before adjective.

× I'd like to become a researcher at the university to utilize my experience in UH Western area cover city.

✓ I'd like to become a researcher at a university to use my experience in the UH Western area covering the city.

Replace 'the university' with 'a university' unless referring to a specific one. Use 'use' instead of 'utilize' for naturalness. 'in UH Western area cover city' is ungrammatical; change to 'in the UH Western area covering the city' to show the area applies to the city and use gerund 'covering'.