Work— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 回答は意図は伝わるが、文法と語順の誤り、冗長さがある。以下を直すとより自然で明確になる：1) 職業を最初に簡潔に述べる（トピック文）。2) 店の種類と提供する料理を短く具体的に補足する。3) 冗長な繰り返し（“I work”の重複）を避ける。文法（冠詞、複数形、語順）も修正する必要がある。

Ejemplo: I'm a service crew member at a Japanese restaurant that specializes in shabu-shabu and yakiniku. I help prepare dishes and serve customers during busy shifts.

Sugerencia: 意味は分かるが不自然な表現と不要な語（"and then", "which stands in"）がある。場所を明確に述べ、余計なフレーズは省くこと。建物が新しいことを言いたいなら短い補足文でつなげる。接続詞は適切に使うこと。

Ejemplo: I work at Hanada Airport, in International Terminal 3. The restaurant is located in a newly built section of the terminal.

Sugerencia: 論理のつながりが弱く、文法や語順の誤りが目立つ。まず肯定か否定をはっきり述べ、次に理由を一つか二つで具体的に説明する。接続詞（because）の後は完全な文を続ける。"international customers"の語順と冠詞に注意する。

Ejemplo: Yes, it is. I enjoy working there because I can improve my English by speaking with international customers, and the shifts are well organized.

Sugerencia: 回答は肯定して理由を述べているが、最後が途切れており冗長な表現がある。理由は2点までにまとめ、具体例（どんな国の客か、どんなやり取りがあるか）を一つ挙げると良い。不要な定冠詞や過剰な接続詞を避けること。

Ejemplo: Yes, I do. I like it because the restaurant is modern and I meet customers from many countries, such as Japan, China and Europe, which helps me learn different cultures.

Sugerencia: 意図（人権分野で働きたい）が伝わるが、文法と語順の誤りが大きい。'work for an NGO'や'join a human rights organization/center'など自然な表現を使う。計画の具体性（いつ、どのように）を一つ示すと説得力が増す。

Ejemplo: I'd like to work for an NGO that focuses on human rights. I'm planning to study law or social work and apply for positions at a human rights center in the next few years.

× I currently work at the restaurant Service Crew and I work at Japanese restaurant which serves shabu, shabu shabu and yakinik style.

✓ I currently work as a service crew member at a Japanese restaurant that serves shabu-shabu and yakiniku.

The original sentence misuses articles and job expression. Use 'as a service crew member' to describe role, 'a Japanese restaurant' for an unspecified single restaurant, and 'that' to introduce the relative clause. Also use correct names 'shabu-shabu' and 'yakiniku' and remove repetition. Suggestion: practice article usage ('a' vs 'the') and common role expressions.

× I work at Hanada Airport International Terminal 3 and then the building I work at is the new building which stands in.

✓ I work at Haneda Airport International Terminal 3; the building I work in is the new terminal.

The original has awkward structure and redundant phrasing ('and then' and 'which stands in'). Use a semicolon or separate sentences and say 'the building I work in' or 'the new terminal.' Suggestion: simplify and use natural preposition placement ('work in').

× I think so because. I work at the 100 airport because I want to improve English skills and serve the customers is international.

✓ I think so because I work at the airport to improve my English skills and serve international customers.

Fragmentation ('because.'), incorrect 'the 100 airport', missing possessive 'my', and incorrect clause 'serve the customers is international.' Combine into one clear sentence, use 'airport' without '100', 'my English skills', and 'international customers.' Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments and ensure subject and modifiers are correct.

× Yes, I like the place I work at because the building is quite new and I deal with many kinds of customers from the different countries and.

✓ Yes, I like the place I work because the building is quite new and I deal with many kinds of customers from different countries.

Avoid ending with 'and' and redundant 'the' before 'different countries.' Also 'work at' can be shortened to 'work.' Use 'from different countries' rather than 'from the different countries.' Suggestion: remove unnecessary words and avoid sentence-ending conjunctions.

× I I'd like to work other NGOs members to deal with the human rights and I'm planning to get in human rights center.

✓ I'd like to work with members of other NGOs on human rights, and I'm planning to join a human rights center.

Original mixes pronouns and lacks prepositions: use 'work with members of other NGOs' and 'join a human rights center.' 'Get in' is incorrect here. Suggestion: learn common verb+preposition collocations such as 'work with' and 'join.'