Work— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and clear. Start with a direct topic sentence (e.g., 'I am currently a student.') then give one or two clear supporting details. Avoid filler words (uh) and unclear phrases (e.g., 'Plasti board', 'science fiscal faculty', 'medical insurance'). Use correct vocabulary for exams and study goals.

Ejemplo: I am currently a student. I recently finished my school board exams in the science faculty and I am waiting for the results. At the moment I am preparing for a competitive international medical entrance exam so I can pursue a career in medicine.

Sugerencia: Open with a clear topic sentence (e.g., 'I don't work at the moment.'). Then explain briefly why you would choose tutoring. Keep sentences short and avoid repetition. Correct grammar (e.g., 'easier', 'I have'). Use linking words such as 'because' and 'so' correctly.

Ejemplo: I don't work at the moment. If I needed a job, I would tutor students because I have experience doing so since grade 10 and I find it rewarding. The tutoring environment is relaxed and homely, which suits me.

Sugerencia: Answer directly then give one or two specific reasons. Remove hesitation and repetition ('their or their house'). Use clearer linking like 'because' and 'for example'.

Ejemplo: Yes, I think tutoring is a good place to work because it is comfortable and flexible. For example, I can teach students at my home or theirs and arrange lessons at convenient times.

Sugerencia: Be concise and avoid repeating previous information. Start with a direct response ('Yes, I would like that type of workplace.') then provide one or two specific benefits. Remove filler sounds and correct small errors ('give a tutor' -> 'be a tutor', 'fix my schedule' -> 'set my schedule').

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like that kind of workplace. It is comfortable and flexible — I could teach at home or at a student's house and set my own schedule to fit my studies.

Sugerencia: Answer with a clear topic sentence about short-term and long-term plans. Use precise vocabulary ('online page/shop', 'develop my skills') and correct grammar (parallel structure: 'develop my skills and run the shop successfully'). Avoid run-on sentences; use linking words like 'and' or 'after'.

Ejemplo: At the moment I run an online shop making bouquets to earn money and improve my business skills. After I complete my medical qualifications, I plan to work as a doctor.

× I am a student and I have just finished my Plasti board examination in science fiscal faculty and I am waiting for my results so that I can work in my future studies.

✓ I am a student and I have just finished my Plasti Board examination in the Faculty of Science, and I am waiting for my results so that I can continue my future studies.

Incorrect use and placement of nouns and pronouns ('science fiscal faculty' unclear) and missing articles. Use 'the Faculty of Science' as a proper noun phrase and 'continue my future studies' is clearer. Capitalize the examination name. Ensure pronoun reference 'I' is consistent.

× And currently I'm preparing for a common entrance exam which is uh, a very competitive international level examination for medical uh insurance.

✓ Currently I am preparing for a common entrance exam, which is a very competitive international-level medical entrance examination.

Tense is present continuous and acceptable, but word choice and noun use are incorrect ('medical insurance' wrong). Rephrase to 'medical entrance examination' and hyphenate 'international-level'. Remove filler words.

× Currently I'm not working anywhere, but if I have to find a job for myself I will give uh tutoring to students because I have done that after I finished my grade 10 I've and I found it a lot more easier than I thought and the environment for this work is very homely and relaxed so I will be giving tutoring if I have to do a work.

✓ I am not currently working, but if I need to find a job I will give tutoring to students because I have done that after I finished grade 10 and I found it much easier than I thought. The environment is very homely and relaxed, so I would choose tutoring if I need to work.

Issues: tense consistency and awkward pronoun/auxiliary use. Replace 'I'm not working anywhere' with 'I am not currently working.' Use 'if I need to find a job' for conditional sense. Remove redundant 'I've' and fix comparative 'much easier' (not 'a lot more easier'). Use modal 'would' for hypothetical. Improve sentence boundaries for clarity.

× The environment for tutoring is not similar to that of working in office because it is very, uh, comfortable and flexible place where we can teach our students in our own home or their or their house.

✓ The environment for tutoring is not similar to working in an office because it is a comfortable and flexible place where we can teach students in our own home or in their home.

Word order and articles incorrect: use 'working in an office' and include 'a' before 'comfortable'. Remove repeated 'their or their house' and simplify to 'their home'. Also remove filler words and unnecessary possessive 'our students' to 'students' for generality.

× As I said, I'm not currently working but thinking of giving a tutor UH after some days and uh. I like the uh working place a lot because it is comfortable and flexible.

✓ As I said, I'm not currently working but I am thinking of tutoring after some time. I like the working environment a lot because it is comfortable and flexible.

Incorrect verb forms and pronoun usage: 'giving a tutor' is wrong; use 'tutoring' or 'being a tutor'. 'After some days' is unnatural; use 'after some time'. Remove filler sounds and adjust 'working place' to 'working environment'.

× For example, I can teach my student in my own house or in their own house and I can fix my schedule uh, as per my need.

✓ For example, I can teach students in my own house or in their house, and I can fix my schedule according to my needs.

Preposition and number agreement: 'in their own house' is acceptable but 'my student' should be plural 'students' for general statement. Use 'in their house' and 'according to my needs' instead of 'as per my need' which is non-native phrasing.

× For now I'm not fully employed and I'm making bouquets by running an online pace and I'm thinking of developing my skill and to run the pace successfully and after my qualification is completed I will be working as a doctor.

✓ For now I am not fully employed; I make bouquets by running an online pace, and I am thinking of developing my skills to run the pace successfully. After I complete my qualifications, I will work as a doctor.

Tense consistency and verb forms: use simple present 'I make bouquets' for ongoing activity or 'I am making bouquets' consistently. 'Running an online pace' likely means 'online pace' -> unclear but kept; consider 'online page' or 'online business'. Use 'developing my skills' (plural) and 'after I complete my qualifications' as correct future-time clause. Ensure future 'I will work as a doctor' is correct.