Shopping— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and avoid filler words (uh, um). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details using linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., “buy items” → “don't buy anything” or “buy a few things”; “suits to my outfits” → “suits my style/outfits”).

Example: Yes, I enjoy shopping, especially for clothes in large malls. For example, I often go with friends to browse new collections, and occasionally I buy a few pieces that suit my style.

Suggestion: Avoid incorrect words (e.g., “prove prices” → “compare prices”) and reduce repetition. Use a clear reason supported by a specific example and linking words like “because” and “so”.

Example: Yes, I usually compare prices because it helps me save money. For instance, I check online and in-store prices before buying so I can get the best deal.

Suggestion: Correct vocabulary (e.g., “indecisive”), reduce fillers, and structure the answer: topic sentence + reason + brief example. Use linking phrases like “because” and “if”. Make verb forms correct (“make a decision”, “buy the item”).

Example: Sometimes I am indecisive, but I usually narrow my choices by considering my budget. If I still can't decide, I wait until the next day and then I buy the item if I still want it.

Suggestion: Give a clearer main opinion and support it with a specific reason and example. Avoid unclear fragments (e.g., “four famous brands”). Use linking words like “however” and “for example”.

Example: Not really. Price does not always indicate quality; however, well-known brands can charge more because of reputation. For example, a brand-name T-shirt may cost more even if a similar non-branded one is made from the same fabric.

× I'm fond of shopping, especially, uh clothes in great malls.

✓ I'm fond of shopping, especially clothes at large malls.

Use 'at' or 'in' with locations; 'at large malls' or 'in large malls' is natural. Also 'great' can be replaced with 'large' or 'big' for collocation with 'malls'. Remove extra comma before 'clothes'. Suggestion: say 'especially clothes at large malls.'

× Uh, sometimes I just go around with my friends to uh, look at the new collections, but I buy items.

✓ Sometimes I just go around with my friends to look at the new collections, but I rarely buy anything.

Original sentence is contradictory and unnatural: 'but I buy items' conflicts with 'just go around'. Also 'go around to look at' is fine; use 'rarely buy anything' to convey intended meaning. Suggestion: keep consistent contrast 'but I rarely buy anything.'

× I think this suits to my outfits.

✓ I think this suits my outfits.

Verb 'suit' does not take the preposition 'to' when meaning 'is appropriate for'. Correct structure: 'suits my outfits.' Remove 'to'. Suggestion: 'I think this suits my outfits.'

× And yes, most of the time I can prove prices because it helps me to save my money, umm, for a long run.

✓ Yes, most of the time I compare prices because it helps me save money in the long run.

'must prove prices' is wrong; intended verb is 'compare'. 'Save my money' should be 'save money' (no possessive). 'For a long run' is incorrect idiom; correct phrase is 'in the long run.' Also remove unnecessary 'And' and 'umm.' Suggestion: 'I compare prices because it helps me save money in the long run.'

× And also, uh, I have the opportunity to search items I need and compare the prices online.

✓ I can also search for the items I need and compare prices online.

Use 'search for' when looking for items. 'The prices' can be 'prices' in general. 'Search items' is incorrect verb-preposition collocation. Remove extra 'And also, uh' filler. Suggestion: 'I can also search for the items I need and compare prices online.'

× Umm, sometimes I tend to be in decisive, but uh, I think about my budget and I narrow down my choices based on that.

✓ Sometimes I tend to be indecisive, but I think about my budget and narrow down my choices based on it.

'Be in decisive' is ungrammatical; the adjective is 'indecisive.' Also 'think about my budget and I narrow down' is repetitive; combine clauses and use 'based on it' for clarity. Remove fillers. Suggestion: 'Sometimes I tend to be indecisive, but I think about my budget and narrow down my choices based on it.'

× Umm, if I cannot just make decision, uh, I go home and tomorrow I will buy item I need.

✓ If I cannot make a decision, I go home and buy the item I need the next day.

Use 'make a decision' (include article). 'Cannot just make decision' misorders 'just' and lacks article. 'Tomorrow I will buy item I need' should be 'buy the item I need the next day' to fit past/future reference coherently. Remove fillers. Suggestion: 'If I cannot make a decision, I go home and buy the item I need the next day.'

× Not really. I don't think price reflects the quality of products, but uh, four famous brands.

✓ Not really. I don't think price reflects the quality of products, but for famous brands,

'Four famous brands' is likely a mispronunciation of 'for' versus 'four'. Replace with 'for famous brands' and continue sentence. Also 'price reflects the quality' is better as 'the price reflects the quality.' Suggestion: 'Not really. I don't think the price reflects the quality of products, but for famous brands,'

× I think they uh, have more expensive items because of their reputation and also quality, but they have the same price in every branch.

✓ I think they have more expensive items because of their reputation and higher quality, but prices are the same in every branch.

'More expensive items because of ... and also quality' needs parallelism: 'reputation and higher quality.' 'They have the same price in every branch' should be 'prices are the same in every branch' for grammaticality and clarity. Remove filler 'uh'. Suggestion: 'I think they have more expensive items because of their reputation and higher quality, but prices are the same in every branch.'