Shopping— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 回答要更自然、简洁并直接回应问题。开头用一句明确的主题句，然后用一到两句具体而相关的细节支持你的观点。避免过于书面或生硬的短语（例如“entailed commodities”），使用更常用的词汇，并注意句子连贯性。可练习用连词（because、and、so）把句子连接起来。

Example: Yes, I enjoy shopping. I like it because it gives me a chance to meet people and practise my social skills, and I can also buy everyday things like food and drinks when I need them.

Suggestion: 回答清晰但语法和用词需改进。避免重复（例如“compare prices”与“comparing prices”在句中重复）。用更自然的表达说明理由，并提供一个具体例子说明如何比较价格以判断质量。

Example: Yes, I usually compare prices because it helps me find better deals and judge product quality. For example, if two similar headphones have very different prices, I check reviews and materials to decide which one is worth buying.

Suggestion: 回答含义明确但重复多、表达不够自然。应减少重复的短语（例如多次使用“I think”），并用更具体的细节说明是什么让你难以选择（如太多品牌、相似价格、促销信息）。用链接词使句子更流畅。

Example: Sometimes it is hard for me to choose because there are many brands and frequent discounts. For instance, when several stores offer similar clothes at different prices and vouchers, I often spend a long time comparing them before deciding.

Suggestion: 答案过于绝对而且观点缺乏平衡。考试中更好的策略是给出有条件的回答并举例说明。避免重复句式，改用更自然的表达并说明例外情况或如何判断质量（如品牌、材料、评价）。

Example: Not always. Generally higher price can indicate better quality, but that's not guaranteed. For example, a more expensive watermelon might be grown organically and taste better, but sometimes expensive branded products are overpriced compared with similar cheaper options.

× Yes, definitely, because I think that shopping is extremely beneficial approach for me to communicate with others. Sharing the relevant interpersonal skills.

✓ Yes, definitely, because I think that shopping is an extremely beneficial way for me to communicate with others and to share relevant interpersonal skills.

句子结构不完整且衔接不当。“beneficial approach”搭配不自然，应该说“beneficial way”。第二句“Sharing the relevant interpersonal skills.”是一个片段，缺主语和谓语，应与前句合并并用不定式或动名词短语补全。建议将两个片段合并为完整句，并使用并列结构（and to share / and share）。

× Besides doing this kind of thing can also make me get the entailed commodities like food, drinks, etc.

✓ Besides, doing this kind of thing can also help me get the related commodities like food and drinks.

原句缺标点且搭配不当。“Besides”后应有逗号或作为句首连接词。“make me get”用法生硬，应改为“help me get”或“allow me to get”。“entailed commodities”不自然，应改为“related commodities”或“necessary items”。此外列举最后的“etc.”在口语中可省略或改为“and so on”。

× Yes, absolutely, because I think that the comparing prices cannot only make me purchase more bargains, but also can make me evaluate the commodity's quality.

✓ Yes, absolutely, because I think that comparing prices can not only help me find better bargains, but can also help me evaluate the quality of commodities.

“the comparing prices”中不该使用定冠词且“comparing”作动名词时不需“the”。“purchase more bargains”搭配错误，通常说“find better bargains”或“get better deals”。“commodity's quality”要改为复数或结构更自然的“the quality of commodities”。此外调整助动词位置，使句子更流畅。

× Yes, I think so, because I think that in China there's a variety of choices for you to purchase commodities so that you can be disrupted by a variety of external factors like the discounts, vouchers, etc.

✓ Yes, I think so, because I think that in China there are a variety of choices for you to purchase commodities, so you can be distracted by external factors like discounts and vouchers.

“there's a variety of choices”中“there's”是单数形式与复数名词短语“a variety of choices”不一致，应使用“there are”。“be disrupted”用词不当，应改为“be distracted”或“be influenced”。同时去掉重复的“a variety of”，并将“etc.”省略或改为“and so on”。

× Yes, I think so, because I think that there is a right correlation between the commodities price and the quality.

✓ Yes, I think so, because I think that there is a positive correlation between the price of commodities and their quality.

“right correlation”搭配不自然，应使用“positive correlation”或“a clear correlation”。“commodities price”名词所有格或介词短语需调整为“the price of commodities”。“the quality”与前半句的指代需一致，改为“their quality”。

× For instance, in terms of the fruits like watermelon, the more expensive watermelon is more premium than that of the bargains.

✓ For instance, when it comes to fruits like watermelon, a more expensive watermelon is usually of higher quality than cheaper ones.

原句中“the fruits”与“watermelon”搭配不当，且“the more expensive watermelon is more premium than that of the bargains”结构混乱。“more premium”重复比较含义，可用“of higher quality”或“better”。“that of the bargains”不合适，应改为“cheaper ones”或“the cheaper ones”。此外调顺语序使表达更自然。